Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm), and keep the answer concise (≤5 sentences). Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word (for example or because) to make it more informative.

Example: Yes. My main hobby is travelling, both internationally and around my own country, because I enjoy learning about different cultures. For example, last year I visited three regional capitals to try their local food and visit museums.

Suggestion: Give a clear past-focused statement, use correct grammar (avoid awkward phrasing like “trying to fulfill it”), and add a brief specific example. Use a linking word such as "so" or "therefore" to show continuity from childhood to now.

Example: Yes. Since childhood I dreamed of travelling abroad and around my country, so I now save money each year to visit new places. For instance, I joined a school exchange program when I was 16 to experience life in another country.

Suggestion: This answer is clear but slightly repetitive. Begin with a direct topic sentence confirming continuity, then give one or two specific details and a linking word (for example or also) to expand. Keep sentences concise and avoid repeating earlier phrasing exactly.

Example: Yes. I have loved travelling since childhood, and I also collect souvenirs and postcards from each place I visit. For example, I keep postcards in an album and write a short note about the date and place for each one.

Suggestion: This answer doesn't address whether family members share the hobby. Start by directly answering (yes/no), then briefly explain similarities or differences with a specific example and a linking word (however, for example). Avoid repeating previous content without answering the question asked.

Example: Not exactly. My parents enjoy travelling too, but they prefer relaxing beach holidays, whereas I like cultural city trips and collecting postcards. For example, last year my family went to the coast while I stayed longer in the city to visit museums.

× Yes, among all the hobbies do I have, I umm, prefer more like travelling around the world or different parts of my country.

✓ Yes, among all the hobbies I have, I prefer traveling around the world and to different parts of my country.

This sentence has an incorrect word order and extra filler words. The phrase 'do I have' is a question form inserted into a statement; change to 'I have' (statement). Remove 'umm' and 'more like' which are informal fillers that confuse meaning. Use 'prefer traveling' and parallel structure 'around the world and to different parts of my country.' Ensure parallel prepositions for both objects.

× Since my childhood, I've always dreamed of travelling abroad and in my home country, which I am currently trying to fulfill it.

✓ Since my childhood, I've always dreamed of travelling abroad and within my home country, which I am currently trying to fulfill.

The sentence contains redundancy and a misplaced pronoun. 'In my home country' should be 'within my home country' to match 'abroad' as a contrast. The clause 'which I am currently trying to fulfill it' has a redundant object 'it' after 'which'; remove 'it' because 'which' already refers to 'dreamed.' Maintaining present perfect 'I've always dreamed' is correct for a lifelong desire.

× As I've told you earlier, I love traveling to other countries as well as my own country.

✓ As I told you earlier, I love traveling to other countries as well as to my own country.

Use past simple 'As I told you earlier' to refer to a previous statement. Add the preposition 'to' before 'my own country' to keep parallel prepositional phrases ('to other countries' and 'to my own country').

× I also love collecting souvenirs and postcards from the place I've visited.

✓ I also love collecting souvenirs and postcards from the places I've visited.

Use plural 'places' because collecting souvenirs usually comes from multiple locations; this corrects a singular/plural issue. The present perfect 'I've visited' is correct to indicate experiences up to now, matching the hobby context.

× As I've told you earlier, I love traveling to other countries as well as my own country. I also love collecting souvenirs and postcards from the place I've visited.

✓ As I told you earlier, I love traveling to other countries as well as to my own country. I also love collecting souvenirs and postcards from the places I've visited.

Same corrections as above applied to repeated answer. Change 'As I've told you earlier' to 'As I told you earlier' for reference to a prior statement, add 'to' before 'my own country' for parallelism, and change 'place' to 'places' to correct singular/plural mismatch. Keep present perfect 'I've visited' to indicate completed experiences.