Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use clearer linking to separate two different hobbies. Avoid vague phrases like "work there" (unclear what work means). Add a brief, specific reason or detail for watching football and use a linking word to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: I have a few hobbies. For exercise, I go to the park near my home and walk for about an hour each day because I want to improve my health. Also, I enjoy watching football matches online, especially this World Cup, because I like the excitement of international competition.

Suggestion: Good content and specific detail (throwing and batting). Improve natural phrasing and grammar: use contractions where appropriate, fix plural/singular forms and articles, and tighten sentences with linking words (for example, use "so" or "therefore" correctly).

Example: Yes. As a child, I used to watch Japanese professional baseball after school because I was fascinated by the players' skills, like pitching and batting. As a result, I still remember many players' names, especially those from my favorite team.

Suggestion: Strong answer with clear structure and relevant details. Improve naturalness by avoiding wordy phrases like "I think" and tighten linking words. Replace vague time frame ("these 30 years") with more natural phrasing. Mention one concrete example of an app or feature to add specificity.

Example: Yes — I've loved watching baseball since I was a child, so my interest has stayed constant for decades. I also follow game results and live streams on apps like MLB.TV, which helps me keep up even while living in the UK.

Suggestion: Good content showing influence and example. Avoid repeating "for example" twice and correct small grammar issues (use plural "games" or add articles). Combine sentences with a linking phrase like "because" or "so" to improve coherence and natural flow.

Example: Yes. I share some hobbies with my family, especially baseball — my father loves it and influenced me when I was a child. Because of that, we would often watch Japanese professional league games together after school and work.

× I usually go to the park near my home and work there for about an hour each day because I need to lose weight for my health.

✓ I usually go to the park near my home and exercise there for about an hour each day because I need to lose weight for my health.

The verb 'work' is incorrect here when referring to physical activity to lose weight; 'exercise' or 'work out' is appropriate. Suggest using 'exercise' or 'work out at the park' to clearly convey physical activity.

× I have been watching football matches on the Internet because the World Cup is taking place in the US and the atmosphere here is very good.

✓ I have been watching football matches on the Internet because the World Cup is taking place in the US and the atmosphere there is very good.

Using 'here' implies the speaker is in the US; if the World Cup is in the US but the speaker is elsewhere, 'there' is correct. Change to 'there' unless the speaker is actually in the US.

× I always watched Japanese baseball leagues matches after coming back from school because I was interested in the sport and fascinated by athletes massive skills such as throwing and batting.

✓ I always watched Japanese baseball league matches after coming back from school because I was interested in the sport and fascinated by athletes' massive skills such as throwing and batting.

'Leagues' is incorrect here; 'league' as a modifier should be singular: 'Japanese baseball league matches'. Also possessive apostrophe is needed for 'athletes' to show 'athletes' skills'. These are noun form/preposition issues; correct to 'league' and 'athletes\''.

× Therefore, I can still recall a lot of players names, especially from my favorite team.

✓ Therefore, I can still recall a lot of players' names, especially from my favorite team.

The plural possessive for 'players' is required to show that the names belong to the players: players' names. Add the apostrophe to form the possessive.

× I've loved watching baseball since my childhood, so I think my hobby hasn't changed dramatically in these 30 years.

✓ I've loved watching baseball since childhood, so I think my hobby hasn't changed dramatically over the past 30 years.

'Since my childhood' is acceptable but more natural is 'since childhood'. Also 'in these 30 years' is unidiomatic; use 'over the past 30 years' to indicate a period leading to now.

× I can easily follow results of games using apps and streaming services even while living in the UK, so I don't think I have lost my interest in baseball.

✓ I can easily follow the results of games using apps and streaming services even while living in the UK, so I don't think I have lost my interest in baseball.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'results' because we refer to specific results. This clarifies the noun.

× Yes, I share some hobbies with my family members.

✓ Yes, I share some hobbies with my family.

'Family members' is not incorrect but 'my family' is more natural in this context. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammatical error.

× For example, my father is fond of watching baseball and I love it too, so I think I was greatly influenced by him when I was a child.

✓ For example, my father is fond of watching baseball and I love it too, so I think I was greatly influenced by him as a child.

'When I was a child' is acceptable, but 'as a child' is more concise and natural. This is a stylistic preposition/phrase choice.

× For example, we always watched Japanese professional league game after coming back from school and work.

✓ For example, we always watched Japanese professional league games after coming back from school and work.

Use plural 'games' because 'we always watched' implies multiple occasions. Also 'Japanese professional league game' should be pluralized to match the habitual past action.