Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers like 'uh' and redundant phrases, and use past/present tense appropriately. Add one specific detail about what you draw and why to enrich the answer.

Example: I enjoy drawing, especially comic characters, because it lets me tell stories visually. When I was young my mother hired a tutor to teach me basic techniques, which helped me improve my line work and shading. Now I often draw short comic strips about everyday life to practice storytelling.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and correct small errors. Provide a direct topic sentence and one or two specific examples of what you painted (subjects, materials) and link ideas with connectors like 'for example' or 'because'. Reduce fillers and fix grammar (e.g., 'how I could use the paintbrush to make strokes').

Example: Yes. As a child I loved painting because it helped me imagine new worlds. For example, I often painted fantasy characters and landscapes using watercolours, and I enjoyed experimenting with bold strokes to create texture.

Suggestion: Combine ideas into a fluent, structured response: state the hobby, explain its emotional impact, and give a concrete example of a project. Remove fillers and redundant phrasing; correct grammar and singular/plural issues.

Example: Yes, drawing has been my hobby since childhood and it makes me very happy. It lets me turn imaginative ideas into characters and short storyboards; for instance, I once created a series of illustrations about a girl exploring strange cities, which I still revisit for practice.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer then support with concise reasons and correct tense/grammar. Avoid filler words and negative phrases like 'I just rejected him'—use softer language such as 'I declined'. Add a brief comment about any shared activities or willingness to try to show flexibility.

Example: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. For example, my father enjoys tennis and my brother likes football. Although they sometimes invite me to join them, I prefer drawing, so I politely decline, but I do try playing tennis occasionally to spend time with my father.

× That's why I always drew a lot since I was young.

✓ That's why I have always drawn a lot since I was young.

The speaker uses 'since I was young' which connects past action to the present, so the present perfect ('have drawn') is required rather than simple past ('drew'). Use present perfect to show a continuing or repeated action from past until now.

× My mom had a tutor especially for me to learn how to do draw nicely and well.

✓ My mom arranged a tutor especially for me to learn how to draw well.

The phrase 'to learn how to do draw' is ungrammatical: 'do' is unnecessary before 'draw'. Also 'had a tutor' is acceptable but 'arranged a tutor' or 'hired a tutor' is clearer. 'Nicely and well' is redundant; use 'well'. Use correct verb pattern 'learn how to draw'.

× Yes, uh, as I said before, I love drawing so much.

✓ Yes, as I said before, I love drawing so much.

This sentence is mostly correct but contains filler 'uh' which is acceptable in speaking. No tense change needed. I removed 'uh' for clarity. (No grammatical tense error; kept present tense to express habitual preference.)

× Well, I usually love to paint.

✓ Well, I usually like painting.

'Love to paint' is not wrong, but 'usually' pairs more naturally with 'like painting' or 'usually love painting'. The pattern 'usually love to paint' is acceptable but less natural; changing to 'like painting' aligns habitual adverb placement with -ing form.

× I love how the I could use the paintbrush to strokes on the paper.

✓ I love how I can use the paintbrush to make strokes on the paper.

Errors: extra definite article 'the' before 'I', incorrect verb form 'could' (modal mismatch with present habitual), and 'to strokes' uses noun where verb phrase 'to make strokes' or 'to stroke' is needed. Use present modal 'can' for general ability and correct verb phrase 'make strokes'.

× Whenever I draw, I feel a sense of happiness in myself.

✓ Whenever I draw, I feel a sense of happiness.

The phrase 'in myself' is redundant and unnatural in English here. Removing it makes the sentence idiomatic. Tense is correct (present simple for habitual action).

× Since I was a child, I always drew a lot of characters, a lot of stories just from my creativity and the wild thoughts inside my head just help me to build many different, uh, artistic world I have created.

✓ Since I was a child, I have always drawn many characters and stories from my creativity, and the wild thoughts in my head have helped me create many different artistic worlds.

Multiple issues: 'Since I was a child' requires present perfect ('have always drawn') not simple past. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for formal clarity. 'Just help me to build' should match tense with present perfect 'have helped me create'. 'Artistic world' should be plural 'artistic worlds'. Remove filler 'uh' and streamline sentence structure.

× No, because like for example, my father, he loves playing tennis very much.

✓ No, for example, my father loves playing tennis very much.

Using both 'my father' and the pronoun 'he' in the same short clause is redundant. Remove the extra pronoun to make the sentence concise and grammatically natural.

× He often persuades me to learn tennis in order to play with him during our free time.

✓ He often persuades me to learn tennis so we can play together during our free time.

The original is grammatically acceptable but can be made more natural: 'in order to play with him' is wordy; 'so we can play together' is clearer and keeps present tense for habitual action ('often persuades'). No tense change necessary.

× Uh, but I don't love playing tennis that much, so I just rejected him.

✓ But I don't love playing tennis that much, so I just refused.

'Rejected him' is awkward when referring to refusing an invitation or request; use 'refused' or 'declined' without an object. 'Just refused' fits the present/past context of a recent action. If the refusal was habitual in the past, use 'I usually refused'.

× However, my uh, brother love football, but I didn't like it too.

✓ However, my brother loves football, but I don't like it either.

Subject-verb agreement: 'brother love' should be 'brother loves' (third person singular). Tense/pronoun mismatch: 'I didn't like it too' mixes past negative and 'too' for agreement; use present 'I don't like it either'. 'Either' is correct in negative contexts rather than 'too'.