Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your reply more natural and concise: correct minor grammar errors, avoid repetition, and keep to 2–4 sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words.

Example: Yes — I enjoy drawing. It helps me relax after work and clears my mind, so I can focus better. I usually sketch simple scenes or portraits for about an hour each evening.

Suggestion: Correct tense and sentence structure, remove awkward phrasing, and provide a specific example to make the answer more concrete. Use linking words like "after" or "so" to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I loved drawing and painting as a child. After school I would spend an hour in my room sketching cartoons or painting with watercolours, which was a fun way to relax and express myself.

Suggestion: Fix grammar and unclear phrases, be specific about how the hobby helps you, and avoid incomplete sentences. Combine ideas into a clear 2–3 sentence response with linking words such as "because" or "so".

Example: Yes, drawing is a hobby I have had since childhood. I started when I was very young and still enjoy it today because it boosts my creativity and reduces stress.

Suggestion: Remove filler words, make the description specific and grammatically correct, and use linking words like "so" or "for example" to explain why it’s enjoyable. Mention a concrete activity you do together.

Example: Yes, my sister and I both enjoy drawing. On weekends we often go to a nearby park to sketch flowers, trees and animals, which is a relaxing and pleasant way to spend time together.

× When I draw I feel calm and more more focused.

✓ When I draw, I feel calm and more focused.

Duplicate word 'more' is a repetition error; remove the extra 'more'. Also add a comma after the introductory clause 'When I draw' for clarity. Suggestion: proofread for repeated words and use commas after adverbial clauses.

× Yes, when I was a child I like drawing and painting.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked drawing and painting.

The time marker 'when I was a child' places the action in the past, so the verb should be in the past tense ('liked') rather than present ('like'). Suggestion: match verb tense to time expressions.

× After school I usually spend time drawing in my room is what a fun activity and it's helped me feel relaxed.

✓ After school I usually spent time drawing in my room; it was a fun activity and it helped me feel relaxed.

Sentence mixes present and past incorrectly and has an awkward clause 'is what a fun activity'. Use past tense to match 'when I was a child' context ('spent', 'was', 'helped') and restructure into two clear clauses. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and avoid inserting phrases like 'is what' that break sentence flow.

× Drawing it a hobby that I had seen a child.

✓ Drawing is a hobby that I have had since childhood.

Multiple issues: 'it' should be the verb 'is'. 'had seen a child' is incorrect; use the expression 'have had since childhood' to indicate duration from past to present. Also use 'since childhood' rather than 'seen a child'. Suggestion: use correct verb 'is' and the present perfect 'have had' with 'since' to show an action continuing to present.

× It helps me expand my creativity and reduce that.

✓ It helps me expand my creativity and reduce stress.

The pronoun 'that' is vague and 'reduce' requires an object like 'stress' or 'tension'. Choose a specific noun to convey meaning. Suggestion: replace vague pronouns with precise nouns.

× On weekends we sometimes go to a park and uh, flowers, trees and cows.

✓ On weekends we sometimes go to a park and look at flowers, trees, and cows.

The original sentence fragments 'and uh, flowers, trees and cows' lacks a verb and contains filler 'uh'. Add a verb like 'look at' to complete the sentence and remove fillers. Suggestion: include an action verb after 'and' to list activities.