Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically correct: state your hobbies clearly in one topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Reduce fillers (uh, um) and avoid repetition. Use correct articles/plurals (a lot of hobbies, my favorite hobbies are).

Example: I have several hobbies, but my favorites are drawing, painting and cooking. For example, in my free time I usually cook new recipes, and my family often compliments the meals I make.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid repeating phrases (childhood, when I was a child). Use past tense consistently and give a specific example or reason. Keep it to two or three sentences and link ideas (because, so).

Example: Yes, I had many hobbies as a child, but my favorite was painting and drawing. Whenever I felt bored, I would draw landscapes or cartoons because it helped me relax and pass the time.

Suggestion: Good idea structure but fix grammar and word choice: use ‘have enjoyed’ or ‘have had’ and correct verbs (sketching, landscapes, express my creativity). Use linking words (for example, so) and be concise. Mention one clear example with correct tense.

Example: Yes, I have enjoyed drawing since childhood. For example, I used to spend hours sketching cartoons and landscapes, which helped me relax and express my creativity; I also joined the primary school art club and won a few prizes.

Suggestion: Be clearer and correct grammar (some hobbies are the same as my family members). Use one linking word to explain why (because, so) and provide a specific example of when you cook together. Avoid repetition and filler words.

Example: Yes, some of my hobbies are the same as my family members, especially cooking. For example, we often cook together on weekends because it’s a great way to spend time together and try new recipes.

× Uh, yes, I have lot of hobby, but uh, few hobbies of is my favorite.

✓ Uh, yes, I have a lot of hobbies, but a few of them are my favorites.

The noun phrases require correct singular/plural and articles: 'a lot of' needs 'a' and 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies'. 'A few' must be followed by 'of them' to refer back, and 'is' should agree with plural 'a few of them' so use 'are'. Also 'favorite' should be plural to match 'a few'. Use: 'I have a lot of hobbies, but a few of them are my favorites.'

× First is uh, drawing and painting and cooking.

✓ First, I like drawing, painting, and cooking.

The original sentence lacks a subject and proper conjunction use: listing activities is clearer with commas and the conjunction 'and' before the last item. Adding 'I like' provides a complete clause. Also include a comma after 'First' to indicate the sequence.

× And during my leisure time mostly I cook some food.

✓ And during my leisure time I mostly cook.

The verb phrase 'cook some food' is grammatically possible but word order is improved by placing the adverb 'mostly' before the verb: 'I mostly cook.' Omitting 'some food' is more natural in this context. Maintain simple present for habitual action.

× It it's my choice and everybody like my food and sometimes.

✓ It is my choice and everybody likes my food sometimes.

Remove the duplicated 'It it's'. Use 'likes' for third person singular agreement. Place 'sometimes' at the end or after verb; 'everybody likes my food sometimes' reads naturally. Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× During my childhood age when I was a child, I had many hobby but my favorite was painting and drawing.

✓ During my childhood I had many hobbies, but my favorites were painting and drawing.

The phrase 'childhood age when I was a child' is redundant; use 'During my childhood'. 'Hobby' should be plural 'hobbies'. 'Favorite' should be plural 'favorites' and verb should be plural 'were' to agree with plural subject.

× When I feel bored that time and I draw the picture and painted and then I was very relaxed and.

✓ When I felt bored, I would draw pictures and paint, and then I felt very relaxed.

Tense consistency: the context is past, so use past tense 'felt'. Use 'would draw' or 'drew' for habitual past; choose 'would draw' or 'drew'. Use plural 'pictures'. 'Painted' should be parallel 'paint'. End the sentence cleanly; avoid trailing conjunctions. Maintain past tense throughout.

× Uh, yes, I have enjoyed drawing since umm, uh, childhood.

✓ Uh, yes, I have enjoyed drawing since childhood.

Remove filler 'umm, uh'. Present perfect 'have enjoyed' with 'since childhood' is correct. Keep concise: 'since childhood' is sufficient.

× I used to spend hours stretching cartoons and landscape, which helped me relax and express myself creativity.

✓ I used to spend hours sketching cartoons and landscapes, which helped me relax and express my creativity.

'Stretching' is incorrect; likely intended 'sketching'. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes'. 'Express myself creativity' has word order error; correct is 'express my creativity'. Maintain past habitual 'used to' with base verb 'sketch'.

× And for example, in primary school I enjoyed art club, won a few some prizes and so I continue practice.

✓ For example, in primary school I enjoyed the art club, won a few prizes, and so I continued to practice.

Add definite article 'the' before 'art club'. Remove redundant 'few some' keeping 'a few'. Maintain past tense 'continued' and use 'to practice' or 'practicing'. Use commas to separate list items.

× Yes, some hobby are same as my family member and sometimes I like to cook food and and my other family member also like to prepare food with the with me.

✓ Yes, some hobbies are the same as my family members', and sometimes I like to cook, and my other family members also like to prepare food with me.

Use plural 'hobbies' and 'family members' when referring to more than one. Add possessive or rephrase 'family members' and correct verb agreement to 'are' for plural. Remove duplicate 'and' and extra 'the'. Use 'with me' (not 'with the with me'). Ensure verbs agree: 'members also like'.

× And so that's why it's the same as me and it's a very good spend spend time with.

✓ So that's why we share the same hobbies, and it's a very good way to spend time together.

The original is ungrammatical and repetitive: 'the same as me' is awkward—use 'we share the same hobbies'. 'Spend spend' is duplicated; use 'way to spend time together' to express spending time with family. Ensure clear subject and verb and natural phrasing.