Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, limit to 2–3 specific hobbies, and give one brief detail for each using linking words. Correct word choices (e.g., "photography" instead of "photos", "modeling" instead of "be a lot model").

Example: I have several hobbies. For example, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax, and I also like photography — especially taking portraits of friends. Additionally, I do some part-time modeling, which gives me confidence and experience in front of the camera.

Suggestion: Give a clear, grammatically correct response with one or two specific childhood hobbies and a brief detail or reason. Use simple past tense for past activities and correct word choices ("wrote love stories" and "liked drawing/painting"). Avoid uncertain phrases like "maybe" unless needed.

Example: Yes. When I was a child, I often wrote short love stories because I enjoyed imagining characters and their relationships. I also liked drawing pictures to illustrate my stories, which made writing more fun.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and correct tense. Keep to two sentences: state the hobby and explain why you kept it, using linking words and correct collocations ("I have loved singing since childhood"; "it makes me happy and relaxed"). Avoid repetition and incorrect forms.

Example: Yes, I have loved singing since I was a child because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Over the years I practiced in school choirs and at home, which helped me improve my voice.

Suggestion: Answer clearly: say whether you share hobbies and give one specific similarity and one clear difference. Use correct grammar and natural expressions ("my sister and I both like singing"; "she is braver and performs on stage"). Keep it concise and coherent with linking words.

Example: Yes, my sister and I both enjoy singing, so we often practice together at home. However, she is braver than me and often performs on stage, while I prefer singing privately or at small gatherings.

× For example I like singing and photos and also be a lot model.

✓ For example, I like singing and photography and also used to be a model a lot.

The original sentence uses incorrect word forms and order. 'Photos' should be the noun 'photography' to express a hobby. 'be a lot model' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'used to be a model a lot' or 'was often a model'. Use of adverbs and verb forms is incorrect; change to 'used to be a model often' or 'was often a model'. Also add a comma after 'For example'. Suggestion: choose correct noun forms (photography) and proper verb phrase for habitual past activity ('used to be' or 'was often').

× When I was a child, I loved to write several novels of the love story.

✓ When I was a child, I loved writing several love stories.

The phrase 'loved to write' is acceptable but 'novels of the love story' is incorrect word order and form. Use the noun phrase 'love stories' or 'romance novels'. Use gerund 'writing' for a habitual childhood activity. Suggestion: use natural collocations: 'loved writing several love stories' or 'loved writing several romance novels'.

× Or maybe I were in structure the picture.

✓ Or maybe I used to illustrate pictures.

The original is ungrammatical: 'I were in structure the picture' mixes wrong verb form and word order. 'Were' is wrong here and 'structure' is not the correct verb. If the speaker meant creating or arranging pictures, use 'illustrate' or 'draw' and 'used to' for past habit. Suggestion: use clear verb and correct past habit structure: 'I used to illustrate pictures' or 'I used to draw pictures'.

× Yes, when I was child and until I growing up, I always is a very love and enjoying singing girl because I think singing can bring bring me lots of joyful and relaxed.

✓ Yes, when I was a child and as I grew up, I have always loved singing because I think singing brings me a lot of joy and helps me relax.

Multiple tense and form errors: 'when I was child' needs article 'a child'; 'until I growing up' should be 'as I grew up' or 'until I grew up'; 'I always is a very love and enjoying singing girl' is ungrammatical—use 'I have always loved singing' and remove 'girl' (unnecessary). 'bring bring me lots of joyful and relaxed' duplicates 'bring' and uses wrong adjective forms; use 'brings me a lot of joy and helps me relax'. Suggestion: simplify sentences, use present perfect for continuing states ('have always loved'), correct comparative/adjective forms, and avoid redundant words.

× Yes, my sister is very familiar with me.

✓ Yes, my sister is very similar to me.

'Familiar with me' means she knows me well, which is likely not the intended meaning. To express shared hobbies or personality, use 'similar to me'. This is a pronoun/preposition choice issue. Suggestion: use 'similar to me' or 'we are very close and share interests' depending on intended meaning.

× But the difference is she have a brave to stand on the stages singing for.

✓ But the difference is she has the courage to stand on stage and sing.

Subject-verb agreement: 'she have' should be 'she has'. Word choice and order issues: 'a brave' is wrong; use 'the courage' or 'she is brave enough'. 'the stages' should be 'stage' (general) and 'singing for' is incorrect; use 'sing'. Suggestion: use correct verb agreement 'has', choose proper noun 'courage' and natural verb phrases 'stand on stage and sing'.