Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời đã nêu ý chính và ví dụ cụ thể, nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “watching movie” → “watching movies”; “Hobby help” → “Hobbies help”), rút gọn và làm tự nhiên hơn bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, theo sau là 1–2 chi tiết liên quan. Tránh liệt kê quá nhiều hoạt động nếu không mô tả chúng.

Example: I have a few hobbies, mainly reading and playing online games. These activities help me relax after a busy day at school; for example, I usually play Roblox with my friends every weekend because it’s a fun way to socialize and unwind.

Suggestion: Ý chính rõ nhưng có lỗi từ vựng/diễn đạt (ví dụ: “espresso” không phù hợp, có lẽ bạn muốn nói “colours” hoặc “textures”; câu cuối không rõ nghĩa). Nên tổ chức: một câu chủ đề + một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về cách bạn vẽ/loại tranh và cảm nhận. Tránh lỗi từ vựng gây hiểu nhầm.

Example: Yes, as a child I loved drawing and painting because they let me express my creativity. I enjoyed experimenting with bright colours and different brushes, turning the ideas in my head into small pictures on paper.

Suggestion: Nội dung tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và một vài từ thiếu chính xác (“catching” → maybe “sketching”; “transfer ID” → unclear). Cần dùng thì nhất quán (present perfect or present simple) khi nói về sở thích duy trì đến nay, và dùng từ chính xác để mô tả hành động. Giữ câu ngắn gọn, tối đa 4–5 câu.

Example: Yes, I still enjoy drawing and painting, a hobby I’ve had since childhood. I often spend weekends sketching and experimenting with colours and textures, trying to transfer the images in my head onto paper as small illustrations.

Suggestion: Trả lời rõ ràng, có so sánh và lý do. Cần sửa một vài lỗi nhỏ (số nhiều: “family member” → “family members”; “going travelling” → “travelling” or “going travelling” ok but choose one). Có thể thêm một cụ thể ngắn về loại trò chơi hoặc tần suất để tăng tính cụ thể.

Example: No, my family members have different hobbies; they enjoy travelling and meeting for coffee, while I usually play online video games. I find gaming relaxing and I often play multiplayer games several evenings a week to keep in touch with friends.

× I have several hobbies such as reading books, playing games, or watching movie.

✓ I have several hobbies such as reading books, playing games, or watching movies.

Wrong article/plural: 'movie' should be plural 'movies' because it refers generally to the activity of watching films, not a specific single film. Use plural nouns with general activities (watching movies). Also parallel structure: keep all items in same form (reading books, playing games, watching movies).

× Hobby help me relax after a busy day at school.

✓ Hobbies help me relax after a busy day at school.

Subject-verb agreement and article: 'Hobby' is singular but the context lists several hobbies, so use plural 'Hobbies' with verb 'help'. If singular, say 'A hobby helps me relax'. Ensure subject and verb agree in number.

× For example, I enjoy playing Roblox with my friends every weekend.

✓ For example, I enjoy playing Roblox with my friends every weekend.

No grammatical error: present simple is correct for habitual action. No change needed.

× Yes, I had hobbies when I was a child. I loved drawing and painting because it allowed me to express my creativity.

✓ Yes, I had hobbies when I was a child. I loved drawing and painting because they allowed me to express my creativity.

Pronoun number agreement: 'drawing and painting' is plural, so use 'they allowed' instead of 'it allowed'. 'It' refers to singular; use 'they' for multiple activities.

× And I like playing with color and espresso.

✓ And I liked playing with color and texture.

Meaning and word choice: 'espresso' is a coffee type and makes no sense here. Likely intended 'texture'. Also tense consistency: when describing childhood, use past tense 'liked'. Preposition 'with' is fine: 'playing with color and texture'.

× All the ideas from my brand to the paper.

✓ I transferred all the ideas from my brain onto the paper.

Fragment and word choice: Original is a fragment lacking a main verb. Use subject and verb: 'I transferred...'. Also 'brand' is wrong word; 'brain' is intended. Preposition: 'onto the paper' or 'to paper'. Use complete sentence.

× Yes, I had hobbies as a child. I loved drawing and painting because it let me express my creativity.

✓ Yes, I had hobbies as a child. I loved drawing and painting because they let me express my creativity.

Pronoun agreement: 'drawing and painting' are plural activities, so use 'they let' instead of 'it let'.

× I often spend weekends catching and experimenting with colors and texture.

✓ I often spent weekends mixing and experimenting with colors and textures.

Tense consistency: speaking about childhood requires past tense 'spent'. Word choice: 'catching' is incorrect; use 'mixing'. Use plural 'textures' to match 'colors'.

× I would try to transfer ID from my head onto paper, creating little illustration and designs.

✓ I would try to transfer ideas from my head onto paper, creating little illustrations and designs.

Wrong abbreviation and number/form errors: 'ID' is wrong abbreviation; use 'ideas'. 'Illustration' should be plural 'illustrations' to match 'designs'. Maintain article and plural agreement.

× No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family member.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members.

Number/article: 'family member' is singular but context refers to more than one person. Use plural 'family members' to indicate multiple relatives. Alternatively 'a family member' would require rephrasing.

× They prefer going travelling or hanging out and having coffee together, whereas I usually spend my free time playing video games because I find them relaxing and a good way to meet friends online.

✓ They prefer travelling or hanging out and having coffee together, whereas I usually spend my free time playing video games because I find them relaxing and a good way to meet friends online.

Redundant gerund form: 'going travelling' is incorrect — use 'travelling' or 'going travelling' in some dialects, but better simply 'travelling'. Remove 'going' to make it natural. The rest of the sentence is grammatically correct.