植物— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and directly answer the question first (yes/no and current situation). Use one topic sentence, then one or two supporting details with clear linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "used to"). Add a brief concluding statement about current status.

範例: Yes, I used to keep many houseplants, but not anymore since we moved. When I had them, they were thriving because I watered them regularly and placed them in bright spots. However, after the move I couldn’t take most of them with me, so now I have only a couple of small plants left.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the plants, then give specific brief details (why you chose them or how you cared for them). Avoid filler words and correct plant names ("monsteras" instead of "monsters"). Use linking words for clarity.

範例: When I was young I grew mostly trailing and easy-care plants, such as pothos, tradescantia and bamboos. I chose them because they tolerate low light and are forgiving if I forgot to water them occasionally.

建議: Answer directly and provide concrete examples of your knowledge or routines (watering schedule, soil, light). Avoid vague praise and repetition of "thrive". Use linking words to connect points.

範例: Yes, I know some basics of plant care. For example, I usually check soil moisture before watering, place sun-loving plants near bright windows, and use well-draining soil to prevent root rot. Because of these routines, my plants generally stay healthy.

建議: This answer is off-topic and informal. Start by addressing the general cultural question (e.g., "Some Chinese people do..."), then give your personal experience separately. Avoid mentioning lack of acquaintances and unfinished sentences. Keep it polite and complete.

範例: Some Chinese people do give plants as gifts, especially for housewarmings or business openings, because plants symbolize growth and good luck. I personally haven’t received plants from Chinese friends, but I have been given plants by others and enjoyed them as thoughtful gifts.

× There was a point in my life where I kept a lot of plants at my home, but then we decided to move houses.

✓ There was a point in my life when I kept a lot of plants at home, but then we decided to move.

Use 'when' instead of 'where' for time reference; 'at my home' is wordy—'at home' is natural; 'move houses' is nonstandard in this context—use 'move' or 'move house'. Keep past tense consistent.

× So I wasn't able to take care of the plants that I used to have, but I had plenty and they were all thriving when I used to take care of them.

✓ So I wasn't able to take care of the plants I used to have, but I had plenty and they were all thriving when I took care of them.

Redundant 'used to' with 'when' is unnecessary; for past habitual actions use either 'used to' or simple past 'took care of'. Removing the extra 'used to' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× Now I don't know where they all went.

✓ Now I don't know where they all are.

'Where they all went' mixes present-state inquiry with past tense 'went'. Use present 'are' to ask about their current location.

× And I was young, I used to grow trailing plants like pothos, tradescantia, monsters and I also used to grow a lot of bamboos and a lot of easy to grow plants.

✓ When I was young, I used to grow trailing plants like pothos, tradescantia, monsteras, and I also used to grow a lot of bamboo and many easy-to-grow plants.

Use 'When I was young' for time clause; 'monsters' is likely 'monsteras' (plant name). 'Bamboo' is uncountable so not 'bamboos'. Use hyphens in 'easy-to-grow' and 'many' rather than 'a lot of' for variety.

× I do. I get told that I have a green thumb when it came to growing plants because I am very good at taking care of them.

✓ I do. People tell me that I have a green thumb when it comes to growing plants because I am very good at taking care of them.

Mixing present ('I get told') with past 'came' is inconsistent. Use present 'it comes' to match 'People tell me' and maintain present-tense meaning. 'I get told' is passive and acceptable but 'People tell me' is clearer.

× They thrive in the sunlight and they thrive even indoors.

✓ They thrive in sunlight, and they even thrive indoors.

Use 'in sunlight' (no article) for general statements; streamline repetition for fluency by placing 'even' before 'indoors'.

× So I think I'm very good at growing them and I make sure to take care of them properly.

✓ So I think I'm very good at growing them, and I make sure to take care of them properly.

Grammar is correct; only added a comma to join independent clauses more clearly. Tense and structure are appropriate.

× No, I don't even know any Chinese people, so why would they even send me plants as gifts?

✓ No, I don't know any Chinese people, so why would they send me plants as gifts?

Remove redundant 'even' twice; pronoun 'they' is acceptable to refer to 'Chinese people' but sentence is clearer without repeated 'even'.

× But I have received plants from other people which are not Chinese.

✓ But I have received plants from other people who are not Chinese.

Use 'who' for people, not 'which'. Present perfect 'have received' is fine because it relates to experience.

× But they still gave me really nice plants that I enjoyed having or used to have, so they were very.

✓ But they still gave me really nice plants that I enjoyed having, so I appreciated them very much.

Original sentence is incomplete ('so they were very' leaves idea unfinished). Clarify meaning: if the speaker enjoyed the gifts, 'I appreciated them very much' completes the thought. Also choose consistent tense: 'enjoyed having' (past) with 'gave me' (past) is coherent.