朋友— Part 1 評分報告

建議: You answer the question directly and give a clear contrast between adulthood and childhood. Make the opening less repetitive, and replace “activities that I have to really put effort into” with a more natural phrase such as “activities I choose to take part in.”

範例: Yes, there’s quite a difference. These days, I usually meet friends through activities I choose to take part in, like fitness classes or social clubs. When I was a child, I mostly made friends at school or in extracurricular activities my parents signed me up for.

建議: Your answer gives a personal view, but “places that I align my values with” is unnatural, and the examples do not fully explain why a place is suitable or unsuitable. Explain how the setting affects conversation or shared activities, and use a more natural contrast.

範例: It depends on what people enjoy and what they want to do together. A quiet café or a park can be ideal because you can talk comfortably, while a crowded nightclub may not suit people who want to have a proper conversation. Personally, I prefer meeting friends for a run or at the gym.

建議: You address both options, but the explanation becomes difficult to follow because of the long sentence and phrases such as “can invite more fun and exciting news” and “just singular to you.” Use a clear comparison and explain the different benefit of each option.

範例: I enjoy both, but I probably prefer one-on-one time with close friends. It gives us a chance to have a deeper conversation and catch up properly. That said, meeting in a group is more lively, and it’s fun to share news and jokes with everyone.

建議: Your response is direct and gives a personal reason, but “comfortness” is not the natural word here, and the second sentence is grammatically unclear. Use “a sense of comfort” and explain simply why you like hosting.

範例: Yes, I enjoy inviting friends over. My home feels comfortable and relaxed, so it’s nice to have my closest friends there and spend quality time together. We usually share a meal or watch a film.

建議: You communicate that friendship matters to you, especially after moving abroad, but “a great sense of recognition” is unclear and the final sentence is too long. Use simpler phrasing and give one specific example of how friends support or celebrate with you.

範例: Friends are very important to me, especially since I moved to another country. They’ve helped me feel less alone and have become a real support system. I can talk to them when I’m having a difficult day, and I also love celebrating good news with them.

建議: This is a clear, relevant answer with a good range of examples. Reduce the filler “well” and “Uh,” and avoid repeating that you spend weekends with friends. You could also say “go for a drink” rather than “go for social drinks.”

範例: Yes, quite often. I live with a close friend, so I see them every day, and I usually make plans with other friends at the weekend. We might go for a run, visit the beach, or meet for a drink. I enjoy mixing active plans with more relaxed ones.

建議: You provide several specific places and activities, which makes the answer engaging. Avoid repeating “arrange” and “nice,” and make the first sentence more natural by saying “meet somewhere we both enjoy.”

範例: We usually meet somewhere we both enjoy, such as the beach or the gym. If we want to catch up, we might try a new café or go for brunch. I like having a mix of active and relaxed places to meet.

建議: You give relevant examples, but “the most general occurrences” is unnatural, and the long sentence needs clearer organization. Start with a direct summary, then describe a typical weekend using linking words such as “for example” and “sometimes.”

範例: We usually mix active and social activities. For example, we might go for a run in the morning and then have brunch together. Sometimes, if there’s an event on, we’ll meet at a pub in the evening. It depends on the weekend, so we try to do different things.

建議: You give a strong, specific detail by mentioning when you met and how long you have been friends. Correct “I know very, very long time” to “I’ve known for a very long time,” and make the final sentence more concise and natural.

範例: Yes, I have a couple of friends I’ve known for a very long time. I met them at school when I was about ten, and we’ve stayed in touch ever since. We’ve now been friends for over twenty years, and I really value those long-lasting friendships.

× I would consider suitable places to meet friends in places that I align my values with, such as going to the gym and going running.

✓ I would consider places suitable for meeting friends if they align with my values, such as the gym or places where I can go running.

The original sentence combines an incomplete construction, consider suitable places in places, with a clause that suggests you align your values with the places. Use consider places suitable for meeting friends and say that the places align with your values.

× However, some places that may not be so suitable to meet friends from my perspective would be out drinking or partying.

✓ However, from my perspective, going out drinking or partying may not be so suitable for meeting friends.

The original sentence says that places would be out drinking or partying, incorrectly equating places with activities. Make the activities the subject, and use suitable for meeting friends.

× I think this is a great way to socialize and communicate and catch up with people in a group setting can invite more fun and exciting news, whereas one-on-one time it can be just singular to you and that friend.

✓ I think spending time in a group is a great way to socialize, communicate, and catch up with people. A group setting can be more fun and exciting, whereas one-on-one time is just between you and that friend.

The original joins two independent ideas without the punctuation or structure needed to separate them. It also uses the redundant construction one-on-one time it can be. Separate the ideas into clauses with clear subjects and verbs.

× I think it's a particular sense of comfortness to me and to bring my inner circle into that and enjoy some quality time in a place that I'm comfortable in.

✓ I find it particularly comforting to bring my inner circle into my home and enjoy quality time together in a place where I feel comfortable.

The original coordinates it's a sense of comfort with to bring, which do not have matching grammatical forms. Restructure the sentence so that to bring and enjoy are parallel actions. Use a place where I feel comfortable to express the final idea clearly.

× I like to have my friends as a support group when I need them, when I'm feeling down, but also in the good times when I can enjoy things and celebrate with them of life's developments.

✓ I like to have my friends as a support group when I need them, when I'm feeling down, and also in good times when I can enjoy things and celebrate life's developments with them.

The verb celebrate does not take the preposition of before its object. Say celebrate life's developments. With them can follow the object to show who you are celebrating with.

× The most general occurrences I have with my friends on the weekend would vary between starting the morning off early, going for brunch, going for a run and then sometimes if there's events on In the evenings we would spend time together in more social settings such as a pub sharing drinks together.

✓ The things I usually do with my friends on weekends vary: we start the morning early, go for brunch or a run, and sometimes spend time together in social settings, such as a pub, if there are events on in the evenings.

Use there are with the plural noun events. The original also awkwardly links a list of activities to a separate clause, so the correction makes the activities parallel and easier to follow.

× Usually it varies, however we like to mix things up.

✓ Usually, it varies; however, we like to mix things up.

The original joins two independent clauses with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Use a semicolon before however, or make the ideas separate sentences.

× Yes, I actually have a couple of friends that I know very, very long time.

✓ Yes, I actually have a couple of friends that I have known for a very, very long time.

Use for to indicate the duration of an action or state. The present perfect have known is appropriate because the friendship began in the past and continues now.