朋友— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答有直接对比，但“make friends in company”表达不自然，且“at parks and even in at hometown”存在介词和搭配错误。可以使用“at work”和“in my hometown”，并补充现在与过去交友地点不同的原因。注意句子不要过长，避免重复使用“friends”。

範例: Yes, there is quite a big difference. I used to meet friends at school, in parks, or around my hometown, but now I mostly meet people at work or in cafés. This is mainly because my daily routine has changed since I graduated.

建議: 观点清楚，并且使用了“such as”和“By contrast”进行衔接。可以将“suitable for meetings”改为更自然的“suitable for meeting friends”，将“talk a lot”改为“have a proper conversation”，同时说明噪音会带来的具体影响。

範例: Cafés are usually suitable because they are relatively quiet and offer comfortable seating. People can order coffee or dessert and have a proper conversation. In contrast, a busy market or a noisy club makes it difficult to hear each other.

建議: 回答立场明确，但“receive energy from external way”和“enjoy when I stay”不符合自然英语。可以使用“draw energy from being around others”或“feel energised when I’m with others”，并补充群体活动的具体优势，例如气氛更活跃、话题更多。

範例: I prefer spending time with a group of friends because I’m quite outgoing. I feel energised when I’m around other people, and group gatherings are usually more lively. We can share different opinions and enjoy a wider range of activities together.

建議: 回答有让步结构，内容也比较完整。“private zone to me”应改为“a private space for me”，“enjoy dinner”可改为“have dinner”。建议进一步说明为什么只邀请最亲密的朋友，这会让答案更具体。

範例: I don’t often invite friends over because I see my home as a private space, and we usually meet outside. However, I would invite my closest friends for dinner or afternoon tea. I feel comfortable hosting them because we know each other very well.

建議: 内容表达了朋友的重要性，但“share my feelings to them”应改为“share my feelings with them”，“feel pleased or exhausted”不够自然，可以说“feel happy or exhausted”。“give me blessings or encouragement as feedback”表达生硬，建议改为“offer me encouragement and support”。

範例: Friends are an essential part of my life. Whenever I feel happy, stressed, or exhausted, I share my feelings with them. They usually listen to me and offer encouragement or practical advice, which helps me feel much better.

建議: 回答有清晰的过去与现在对比，也提供了活动细节。“spend my friends”应改为“spend time with my friends”，“go to coffee shop”应加冠词并使用复数；可以减少“but”的重复，并说明见朋友的频率。

範例: I used to go out with my friends almost every weekend, but now I’m married and have a daughter, so I spend most of my free time with my family. Nevertheless, I still meet my friends once or twice a month. We usually visit a café, go shopping, and catch up.

建議: 地点和活动相关，回答方向正确，但句子过长且“where it has”“talk it calmly”不自然。应改为“a coffee shop that has a pleasant atmosphere”和“talk peacefully”。建议使用两个短句，避免重复“nice”。

範例: We often meet at a café with a pleasant atmosphere. It’s a good place to enjoy coffee and dessert while having a relaxed conversation. Sometimes we also meet at a restaurant, especially when we want to have a proper meal together.

建議: 回答太短，而且“spend time on chatting”应改为“spend time chatting”，“the most important thing why”结构错误。可以直接说明聊天的内容，并补充一项具体活动，使答案更有细节。

範例: We usually spend most of our time chatting and catching up. We talk about our families, work, and recent experiences. If we have more time, we might also go shopping or watch a film together.

建議: 内容具体，包含朋友数量、认识时间和联系方式，但时态及搭配错误较多。“I have had two best friends since...”“we have known each other”更准确；“talk on WeChat”可改为“chat on WeChat”。建议说明长期友谊能够维持的原因。

範例: Yes, I have two close friends whom I’ve known since junior high school, so we’ve been friends for more than 15 years. Although we are busy and cannot meet very often, we chat on WeChat almost every day. I think our friendship has lasted because we trust and support each other.

× Since I graduated from school and worked for a period of time, I usually make friends in company and I used to make friends at school, at parks and even in at hometown.

✓ Since I graduated from school and started working, I usually make friends at my company, while I used to make friends at school, in parks, and even in my hometown.

表示工作地点时通常使用介词 at，并且 company 是可数名词，前面需要限定词。表示“在我的家乡”应使用 in my hometown。“in at”是两个介词重复使用，应改为 in。

× Since I graduated from school and worked for a period of time, I usually make friends in company and I used to make friends at school, at parks and even in at hometown.

✓ Since I graduated from school and started working, I usually make friends at my company, while I used to make friends at school, in parks, and even in my hometown.

Company 是单数可数名词，不能单独使用，应说 my company、a company 或 the company。Hometown 前面也需要物主限定词 my。

× As I'm an outgoing person, I prefer to receive energy from external way so I really enjoy when I stay with my group of friends.

✓ As I'm an outgoing person, I prefer to receive energy from outside sources, so I really enjoy staying with my group of friends.

“从某种方式获得能量”中的 from external way 表达不正确。这里可以使用 from outside sources，表示“从外界获得能量”。

× As I'm an outgoing person, I prefer to receive energy from external way so I really enjoy when I stay with my group of friends.

✓ As I'm an outgoing person, I prefer to receive energy from outside sources, so I really enjoy staying with my group of friends.

Way 是单数可数名词，前面需要冠词，但在这个句子中使用 outside sources 更自然。若保留 way，应说 in an external way。

× As I'm an outgoing person, I prefer to receive energy from external way so I really enjoy when I stay with my group of friends.

✓ As I'm an outgoing person, I prefer to receive energy from outside sources, so I really enjoy staying with my group of friends.

Enjoy 后面通常接动名词，即 enjoy doing something，不能直接接 when 从句来表达这个意思。因此 enjoy when I stay 应改为 enjoy staying。

× I used to hang out with my friends on weekends but since I'm married and I have a daughter now, I usually spend time with my family. But I still try to save some time to spend my friends and we usually go to coffee shop or shopping and talk a lot.

✓ I used to hang out with my friends on weekends, but since I'm married and have a daughter now, I usually spend time with my family. However, I still try to save some time to spend with my friends, and we usually go to a coffee shop or go shopping and talk a lot.

Spend time 后面表示“和某人一起度过时间”时，需要使用介词 with，因此 spend my friends 应改为 spend time with my friends。

× I used to hang out with my friends on weekends but since I'm married and I have a daughter now, I usually spend time with my family. But I still try to save some time to spend my friends and we usually go to coffee shop or shopping and talk a lot.

✓ I used to hang out with my friends on weekends, but since I'm married and have a daughter now, I usually spend time with my family. However, I still try to save some time to spend with my friends, and we usually go to a coffee shop or go shopping and talk a lot.

Coffee shop 是单数可数名词，前面需要冠词。这里表示去一家咖啡店，应说 go to a coffee shop。

× We usually meet each other at a coffee shop where it has a good atmosphere so that we can enjoy nice dessert and coffee and we can talk it calmly.

✓ We usually meet each other at a coffee shop that has a good atmosphere, where we can enjoy some nice dessert and coffee and talk calmly.

Where 不能和 it 一起作为从句的主语，因为 where 本身已经表示地点关系。应改为 that has a good atmosphere，或者直接说 a coffee shop with a good atmosphere。

× We usually meet each other at a coffee shop where it has a good atmosphere so that we can enjoy nice dessert and coffee and we can talk it calmly.

✓ We usually meet each other at a coffee shop that has a good atmosphere, where we can enjoy some nice dessert and coffee and talk calmly.

Talk 通常是不及物动词，不能直接接 it 作为宾语。这里应删除错误的代词 it，使用 talk calmly。

× We usually spend a lot of time on chatting and I think it is the most important thing why we catch up together.

✓ We usually spend a lot of time chatting, and I think it is the most important reason why we catch up.

Spend time 后面可以直接接动名词，使用 spend time doing something。因此 spend time on chatting 应改为 spend time chatting。

× We usually spend a lot of time on chatting and I think it is the most important thing why we catch up together.

✓ We usually spend a lot of time chatting, and I think it is the most important reason why we catch up.

Thing why 的搭配不正确。表达“……的原因”时，应使用 reason why。Catch up 本身已经表示“叙旧、联络感情”，通常不需要再加 together。

× Of course, I have two best friends since we had been classmates in junior high school and we have been known each other for over 15 years.

✓ Of course, I have two best friends who have been my friends since we were classmates in junior high school, and we have known each other for over 15 years.

Since 引导的时间从句通常使用一般过去时，表示过去开始的状态，因此 had been classmates 应改为 were classmates。过去完成时 had been 在这里没有必要。

× Of course, I have two best friends since we had been classmates in junior high school and we have been known each other for over 15 years.

✓ Of course, I have two best friends who have been my friends since we were classmates in junior high school, and we have known each other for over 15 years.

Know each other 是主动关系，主语 we 是“认识对方的人”，不能使用被动语态 have been known each other。应使用现在完成时主动形式 have known each other。