朋友— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接，过去和现在的对比也很清楚。注意“mand”应为“major”，并且“make friends at school”更自然地说成“meet or make friends at school”。可以再补充一个原因或例子，使答案更完整。

範例: Yes, there is a major difference. I used to meet most of my friends at school because we spent so much time together there. Nowadays, I usually meet new people at work or through professional events.

建議: 答案中“suitable because they are quite uncomfortable”意思相反，应改为“comfortable”。“visiting”不适合这里的语境，应使用“meeting or socialising”。最后一句不完整，而且需要说明酒吧为什么不适合，例如太吵、难以交谈。

範例: Some places are suitable for meeting because they are comfortable and relatively quiet. For example, cafés and restaurants are good choices since people can talk without being interrupted. In contrast, busy bars may not be ideal because they are often noisy and crowded.

建議: 观点明确，也提供了原因和对比。注意“the more private atmosphere”应改为“a more private atmosphere”，“If I went out”与一般偏好不匹配，应使用“If I go out”。“inharge activities”表达不清，可以改为“light-hearted activities”或“casual activities”。

範例: I prefer spending time with just one friend because I enjoy having a more private atmosphere. It is easier to have a meaningful conversation and talk about personal matters. When I go out with a large group, we usually just take photos or do casual activities.

建議: 回答有明确条件，但语法错误较多。“the person itself”应改为“the person”，“If my friend is not very clean or tidy”需要补充谓语；“in my homes”应为“in my home”。可以先直接回答“yes, but it depends”，再解释你重视整洁。

範例: Yes, but it depends on the person. I would invite a friend who is considerate and keeps things tidy. However, if someone often leaves rubbish around my home, I would probably prefer to meet them somewhere else.

建議: 内容表达了朋友的重要性，但“a quarter of my life”不符合原意，可能想说“a big part of my life”。句子之间缺少标点和连接词，“someone supporting me”应改为“someone to support me”。建议说明朋友在情感支持和放松方面的作用。

範例: Friends are a very important part of my life. They support me when I have problems, and I can talk to them openly about my feelings. In addition, spending time with them helps me relax and feel comfortable.

建議: 回答直接，并提供了频率和时间，结构清晰。注意一般现在时中应说“It usually takes place”或更自然地说“We usually go out at weekends, when we don’t have to work”。可以补充通常进行的活动，让答案更具体。

範例: Yes, I usually go out with my friends about twice a week, mostly at weekends when we do not have to work. We often have dinner together or go shopping, depending on our schedules.

建議: 地点回答明确，但“held to buy”应为“go there to buy”，“cut clothes”应为“buy clothes or shop for clothes”。“because my friends are mostly girls”表达不够自然，可以说明商场方便、选择多。

範例: We often meet at a shopping mall because it is convenient and there are plenty of things to do. Most of my friends enjoy shopping for clothes, and we can also have a drink or a meal there.

建議: 活动顺序清楚，也使用了“First”和“Finally”，但“stereotype”在这里使用错误，应改为“routine”或“typical plan”。“some small chat”应改为“a little chat”或“have a chat”。建议使用“Then”连接第二个活动，并使表达更自然。

範例: We usually follow a fairly regular routine. First, we have some milk tea and catch up with each other. Then, we go to the cinema, and finally, we have a short chat before going home.

建議: 回答内容具体，时间、认识的地点和共同经历都很清楚。注意“whom I know for more than twenty years”应改为现在完成时“whom I have known for more than twenty years”，“met each other in the same neighborhood”可改为“met in the same neighbourhood”。可以补充如今仍保持联系的情况。

範例: Yes, I actually have two friends whom I have known for more than twenty years. We met in the same neighbourhood and attended some of the same classes. We spent a lot of time together as children, and we still keep in touch today.

× Well, it depends on the person itself.

✓ Well, it depends on the person herself.

“Person”指人，不能使用指物的反身代词“itself”。如果指女性，应使用“herself”；如果性别不明确，可以使用“themselves”。

× If my friend not very focus on the claims or tidy and for example she left a lot of rubbish in my homes in that case I won't invite her.

✓ If my friend is not very focused on cleanliness or tidiness, and, for example, leaves a lot of rubbish in my home, I won't invite her.

“my friend not very...”缺少系动词“is”。英语句子通常需要完整的主语和谓语，因此应说“my friend is not...”。

× If my friend not very focus on the claims or tidy and for example she left a lot of rubbish in my homes in that case I won't invite her.

✓ If my friend is not very focused on cleanliness or tidiness, and, for example, leaves a lot of rubbish in my home, I won't invite her.

“be focused on”是固定搭配，表示“关注或在意……”。因此“focus”应改为过去分词“focused”。

× If my friend not very focus on the claims or tidy and for example she left a lot of rubbish in my homes in that case I won't invite her.

✓ If my friend is not very focused on cleanliness or tidiness, and, for example, leaves a lot of rubbish in my home, I won't invite her.

这里说的是自己的一个家，应使用单数“home”，而不是复数“homes”。

× If my friend not very focus on the claims or tidy and for example she left a lot of rubbish in my homes in that case I won't invite her.

✓ If my friend is not very focused on cleanliness or tidiness, and, for example, leaves a lot of rubbish in my home, I won't invite her.

在“If”条件从句中，主语“my friend”是第三人称单数，所以一般现在时应使用“leaves”，不能使用“left”。同时，条件句描述的是一般情况，因此使用现在时更合适。

× Like friends are quarter of my life.

✓ Friends are a quarter of my life.

“quarter”是可数名词，表示“四分之一”时通常需要冠词，应该说“a quarter”。句首的“Like”在这里不需要使用。

× They are really important when I really need someone supporting me or talking with me.

✓ They are really important when I really need someone to support me or talk with me.

“need someone”后面通常接不定式“to do”，表示“需要某人做某事”。因此应使用“to support”和“to talk”，而不是“supporting”和“talking”。

× Friends provides a very comfortable place for me.

✓ Friends provide a very comfortable place for me.

主语“Friends”是复数，因此谓语动词不能加第三人称单数词尾“-s”，应使用“provide”。

× It always took place on weekends where we don't need to work.

✓ It always takes place on weekends, when we don't need to work.

“always”表示经常发生的习惯或规律，应使用一般现在时“takes”，而不是过去式“took”。此外，“weekends”是时间，应使用“when”引导时间从句，而不是“where”。

× Finally we have some small chat and go home.

✓ Finally, we have a little chat and go home.

“chat”在这里表示一次简短的聊天，通常使用“a little chat”或“a short chat”。“some small chat”不符合自然的英语表达。

× Yeah, actually I have two friends whom I know for more than twenty years.

✓ Yeah, actually I have two friends whom I have known for more than twenty years.

动作从过去开始并持续到现在，且和“for more than twenty years”连用时，应使用现在完成时“have known”，而不是一般现在时“know”。

× We just met each other in the same neighborhood and we took the same courses together.

✓ We just met each other in the same neighborhood, and we took the same courses together.

“same”前通常需要使用定冠词“the”，所以“the same neighborhood”和“the same courses”都是正确形式。这里还应使用逗号连接两个完整分句，使句子结构更清晰。