朋友— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答有清晰的过去与现在对比，但语法和表达问题较多。将“Absolutely different”改为“There is a big difference”；“when we end off the holiday school”表达不自然，应改为“after school”或“during school holidays”；注意过去时“met/played”和现在时“meet/use”。结尾可以补充线上见面的具体原因，使答案更完整。

範例: Yes, there is a big difference. When I was younger, I usually met my friends at the playground after school, where we played energetic games together. Nowadays, we mostly meet online through apps like Discord and WhatsApp because it is more convenient.

建議: 观点明确，也使用了“because”和“So”连接原因与结论。但应使用复数或冠词，如“libraries”和“a library”；“people are accepted to keep silent”应改为“people are expected to remain silent”；“parks of bed”应改为“parks or cafés”。最后一句可直接说明合适地点的特点。

範例: Some places are unsuitable because they are too quiet. For example, in a library, people are expected to remain silent, so it is difficult to have a relaxed conversation. In contrast, cafés and parks are better because they allow people to talk freely.

建議: 答案直接回答了问题，并给出了两个合理原因，逻辑清楚，长度也合适。可以把“learn different ideas”改为更自然的“hear different ideas”或“learn from different people”；“with a lot of people”略显重复，可改为“when more people are involved”。

範例: I usually prefer spending time with a group of friends. I can hear different opinions and learn from each person’s experiences. Also, group conversations tend to be more lively and enjoyable.

建議: 回答内容具体，包含活动、时间和原因，整体结构较好。注意“just chats”应改为“just chat”，“stay overnights”应改为“stay overnight”，“many things about our life”应改为“many things about our lives”。可避免重复使用“spend time”，让表达更自然。

範例: Yes, I often invite my friends over to play video games or just chat. Sometimes they stay overnight at the weekend, which is always enjoyable because we can talk about our lives and future plans. It is a relaxing way to catch up with each other.

建議: 答案有明确观点和例子，但后半部分语法和意思不清晰。应保持时态一致：一般事实使用“play”，过去经历使用“felt”；“anxious for my exam”应改为“anxious about an exam”；“do a good lots of perspectives”应改为“get different perspectives”。建议明确说明朋友如何帮助你解决问题。

範例: Friends play a vital role in my life. When I feel anxious about an exam or face a serious problem, I can talk to them openly. They give me different perspectives and help me decide how to deal with the situation.

建議: 回答直接、自然，并清楚解释了很少外出的原因。可以在“spare time”前加“my”，并使用“so”前的逗号增强书面清晰度。为了让答案更平衡，可以补充偶尔和朋友外出的情况。

範例: I rarely go out with my friends because I generally prefer spending time alone. In my free time, I usually stay at home reading books or watching YouTube videos. However, I occasionally meet them at the weekend if we have a special plan.

建議: 答案地点明确，也提供了运动例子和原因，但最后一句未完成，影响流利度和完整性。应将“sport ground”改为“sports field”或“sports centre”；在“sometimes we go swimming”后加连接词和标点，例如“Sometimes we go swimming, while other times we play football”。注意“at a weekend”应改为“at weekends”。

範例: We usually meet at the local park or sports field to do different activities. Sometimes we go swimming, while other times we play football. At weekends, we also go hiking because we all enjoy outdoor activities, and we usually spend a few hours together.

建議: 答案包含多项具体活动，并说明了运动的好处，内容较丰富。注意“at the weekend”与“at weekends”保持一致；“an action film”需要冠词；“conversations about the lives and ideas”不自然，可改为“talk about our lives and ideas”。建议使用“Besides”或“Sometimes”分隔不同活动。

範例: We usually play sports at weekends, such as basketball or badminton, because this helps us relax and stay fit. Besides, we sometimes play video games or go to the cinema to watch an action film. We also enjoy talking about our lives and ideas.

建議: 回答直接，并提供了朋友姓名、认识时间和共同活动，细节较具体。开头“certain”应改为“Yes, certainly”或“Certainly”；“have been friends about fifteen years”应改为“have been friends for about fifteen years”。可以补充一个朋友长期重要的原因，使答案更有个人特色。

範例: Yes, certainly. I have a friend called Ised, who was my classmate in primary school. We have been friends for about fifteen years, so we know each other very well. We still play games and sports together, which has helped us stay close.

× Absolutely different.

✓ It is absolutely different.

原句只有形容词短语，没有完整的主语和谓语。需要加入主语“It”和系动词“is”，构成完整句子。

× When I was young I met my friends in the playground all the time when we end off the holiday school so we play some energetic games but now we all met online with some digital device and the apps like Discord and WhatsApps.

✓ When I was young, I met my friends in the playground all the time. At the end of the school holidays, we played some energetic games, but now we all meet online using digital devices and apps like Discord and WhatsApp.

“When I was young”表示过去时间，因此后面的习惯性动作应使用过去式：“end”改为“ended”，“play”改为“played”。另外，过去和现在的内容应分别使用相应时态。

× When I was young I met my friends in the playground all the time when we end off the holiday school so we play some energetic games but now we all met online with some digital device and the apps like Discord and WhatsApps.

✓ When I was young, I met my friends in the playground all the time. At the end of the school holidays, we played some energetic games, but now we all meet online using digital devices and apps like Discord and WhatsApp.

表示“在假期结束时”应使用固定表达“at the end of the school holidays”，而不是“end off the holiday school”。表示使用设备时，“using”比“with”更准确。

× When I was young I met my friends in the playground all the time when we end off the holiday school so we play some energetic games but now we all met online with some digital device and the apps like Discord and WhatsApps.

✓ When I was young, I met my friends in the playground all the time. At the end of the school holidays, we played some energetic games, but now we all meet online using digital devices and apps like Discord and WhatsApp.

“now”表示现在的习惯，所以应使用一般现在时“meet”，不能使用过去式“met”。

× In my opinion, some places like library are not suitable for meeting because they are very quiet and people are accepted to keep silent.

✓ In my opinion, some places like a library are not suitable for meeting because they are very quiet and people are expected to keep silent.

单数可数名词“library”前需要冠词，因此应说“a library”。这里“are accepted”表达不准确，表示“被期望”应使用“are expected”。

× When we met others, we usually want to talk freely and share our opinions.

✓ When we meet others, we usually want to talk freely and share our opinions.

该句描述现在的一般习惯，应使用一般现在时“meet”，而不是过去式“met”。

× So more relaxed places such as coffee shop or parks of bed.

✓ So more relaxed places, such as coffee shops or parks, are better.

“coffee shop”与“parks”并列，且前面有“places”表示复数概念，因此应使用复数“coffee shops”。同时，原句缺少谓语，补充“are better”后句子才完整。

× Sometimes they may stay overnights on weekends which is always enjoyable because we talk about many things about our life, even our future.

✓ Sometimes they may stay overnight on weekends, which is always enjoyable because we talk about many things in our lives, including our future.

“stay overnight”是固定搭配，“overnight”在这里作副词，不需要加复数“-s”。原句中“many things about our life”结构不自然，改为“many things in our lives”更合适。

× Sometimes they may stay overnights on weekends which is always enjoyable because we talk about many things about our life, even our future.

✓ Sometimes they may stay overnight on weekends, which is always enjoyable because we talk about many things in our lives, including our future.

“overnight”表示“过夜地”或“整夜地”，这里是副词，不能写成“overnights”。

× Sometimes they may stay overnights on weekends which is always enjoyable because we talk about many things about our life, even our future.

✓ Sometimes they may stay overnight on weekends, which is always enjoyable because we talk about many things in our lives, including our future.

“our”后面如果表示每个人各自的生活，应使用复数“lives”，而不是单数“life”。

× I think friends played a vital role in my life.

✓ I think friends play a vital role in my life.

这句话表达朋友目前对“我”的重要性，应使用一般现在时“play”，而不是过去式“played”。

× For example, when I was feeling anxious for my exam or something really bad, I can express my opinion to my friends.

✓ For example, when I feel anxious about my exams or when something really bad happens, I can express my feelings to my friends.

表示“对考试感到焦虑”应使用固定搭配“feel anxious about”。“anxious for my exam”中的介词“for”使用错误。

× For example, when I was feeling anxious for my exam or something really bad, I can express my opinion to my friends and do a good lots of perspectives and opinions that I can change or decide a better way to face these problems.

✓ For example, when I feel anxious about my exams or when something really bad happens, I can express my feelings to my friends and gain different perspectives and opinions, which can help me decide on a better way to face these problems.

如果整句描述现在的情况，使用“can”是正确的；原句的问题主要是前面的过去时“was feeling”与现在时“can”不一致。统一改为现在时后，时态关系更清楚。

× I can express my opinion to my friends and do a good lots of perspectives and opinions.

✓ I can express my feelings to my friends and gain a lot of perspectives and opinions.

“a good lots of”不是正确的数量表达。表示“许多”时应使用“a lot of”或“lots of”。此外，“gain perspectives and opinions”比“do perspectives and opinions”更符合动词搭配。

× I can express my opinion to my friends and do a good lots of perspectives and opinions that I can change or decide a better way to face these problems.

✓ I can express my feelings to my friends and gain different perspectives and opinions, which can help me decide on a better way to face these problems.

原句中“do ... perspectives”以及“opinions that I can change or decide a better way”的结构不完整且连接混乱。使用“which can help me decide on...”可以清楚表达“这些观点能帮助我决定更好的解决方式”。

× For example, sometimes we go swimming sometimes we play football and at a weekend we often go hiking together because we all enjoy outdoor activities.

✓ For example, sometimes we go swimming, sometimes we play football, and on weekends we often go hiking together because we all enjoy outdoor activities.

两个独立分句不能直接连接，需要用逗号和并列连词“and”连接。列举多个活动时，应保持清晰的并列结构。

× For example, sometimes we go swimming sometimes we play football and at a weekend we often go hiking together because we all enjoy outdoor activities.

✓ For example, sometimes we go swimming, sometimes we play football, and on weekends we often go hiking together because we all enjoy outdoor activities.

表示“在周末”通常使用“on weekends”或“at the weekend”，不能说“at a weekend”。这里使用“on weekends”表示一般习惯。

× Normally we hang out there for a couple of hours and

✓ Normally, we hang out there for a couple of hours.

原句以并列连词“and”结尾，后面没有继续的分句，因此句子结构不完整。删除句末的“and”后，句子才完整。

× We also play video games together sometimes or go to the cinema to watch action film and we often have different conversations about the lives and ideas.

✓ We also sometimes play video games together or go to the cinema to watch an action film, and we often have different conversations about our lives and ideas.

“action film”是单数可数名词，前面需要不定冠词“an”。因为“action”以元音音素开头，所以使用“an action film”。

× We also play video games together sometimes or go to the cinema to watch action film and we often have different conversations about the lives and ideas.

✓ We also sometimes play video games together or go to the cinema to watch an action film, and we often have different conversations about our lives and ideas.

这里谈论的是“我们各自的生活和想法”，应使用物主代词“our”，而不是定冠词加名词“the lives”。

× We have been friends about fifteen years so we know a lot of things about each other and we often play some games and sports together.

✓ We have been friends for about fifteen years, so we know a lot of things about each other and often play games and sports together.

表示一段持续的时间时，应使用“for + 时间段”，所以“about fifteen years”前需要加“for”。