朋友— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the comparison directly and use accurate grammar. Replace “The players that I meet friends now” with “The places where I meet my friends now.” Use the past tense consistently when describing the past, and give specific reasons for preferring malls, such as their restaurants and entertainment facilities. Avoid repeating “I love to.”

範例: Yes, there is a difference. Nowadays, I usually meet my friends at a mall because it has plenty of restaurants and entertainment facilities. In the past, we mostly met in the park, where we could walk around and chat for free.

建議: State the general reason first, then provide a clear example. Use plural nouns and natural expressions, such as “Some places are unsuitable because they are too crowded or difficult to reach.” Avoid unclear wording like “San Page” unless you name a specific place accurately, and do not use both “because” and “so that’s why” in the same sentence.

範例: Some places are unsuitable for meeting because they are crowded and difficult to reach. For example, I would avoid a busy shopping area during rush hour because traffic congestion can make everyone late. A quiet café near a train station would be more convenient.

建議: Your preference is clear, but “interrupted person” is not the intended expression; use “introverted” or “a private person.” Correct “one people” to “one person,” and explain that one-to-one conversations help you feel comfortable and relaxed. Use one linking phrase instead of repeating “This is because.”

範例: I prefer spending time with one close friend rather than with a large group. I’m quite introverted, so I feel more comfortable having a meaningful conversation with one person. It also helps me relax and speak more openly.

建議: This is a clear answer with a relevant reason, but use the uncountable noun “healthy food” rather than “a healthy food.” Explain more naturally that cooking at home allows you to prepare nutritious meals and enjoy a relaxed evening together. Avoid repeating the reason in the final sentence.

範例: Yes, I often invite my friends over. I enjoy cooking healthy meals for them, and eating at home is usually more nutritious and less expensive than eating out. We can also have a relaxed conversation while we prepare the food.

建議: Use the plural “friends” consistently and explain their importance with a complete example. Replace “shoot a career path” with “choose a career path,” and “They obtain guide me” with “They guide me and help me find information.” Make the example a complete sentence and use a linking phrase such as “For instance.”

範例: Friends are extremely important to me because they give me advice and support. For instance, when I was choosing a career path, my friends helped me compare different options and find useful information. Their advice helped me make a more confident decision.

建議: Give a direct answer, then mention a usual destination and activity. Say “I feel relaxed and have fun,” not “I feel relaxed and fun,” and replace the unclear phrase “about mors” with “the mall” if that is what you mean. Use complete sentences and connect the ideas clearly.

範例: Yes, I often go out with my friends because it helps me relax and have fun. We usually go to the mall, where we watch a film at the cinema and sometimes have dinner afterward.

建議: Answer with a complete, concise explanation. Replace “lots of fascinating” with “many interesting things” or “a wide range of facilities,” and make the list grammatically parallel: “cinemas, restaurants, and shops.” Avoid ending with the incomplete phrase “we often make.”

範例: We often meet at shopping malls because they offer a wide range of facilities. There are cinemas, restaurants, and shops, so we can easily decide what to do when we meet. They are also convenient for everyone to reach.

建議: The answer is relevant and includes a reason, but use the natural subject “My friends and I.” Replace “release our stress” with “relieve our stress,” and avoid repeating “my mood and our mood.” “Re-energize ourselves” or “improve our mood” would be more natural.

範例: My friends and I often go to the mall and watch a film at the cinema. It helps us relieve stress after work, and we can usually have a meal together afterward. It’s a simple way to improve our mood and spend quality time together.

建議: You provide a clear answer, a shared history, and specific examples. Improve the grammar by saying “a couple of friends,” “We studied together in primary school,” and “a common interest.” Replace “keep contracts” with “keep in contact” or “keep in touch,” and avoid repeating the same idea in the final sentence.

範例: Yes, I have a couple of friends whom I’ve known since primary school. We still keep in touch because we share an interest in exercise, especially running and cycling. We sometimes train together, which helps us maintain our friendship.

× The players that I meet friends now is in Moss, but in the past I love to meet friends in the park.

✓ The place where I meet my friends now is Moss, but in the past I loved meeting my friends in the park.

The sentence needs a suitable subject and a clearer relative clause. The word players does not fit the meaning; place is the appropriate noun. The phrase loved meeting is also more natural than love to meet when describing a past habit.

× The players that I meet friends now is in Moss, but in the past I love to meet friends in the park.

✓ The place where I meet my friends now is Moss, but in the past I loved meeting my friends in the park.

The phrase in the past refers to a previous habit, so the past-tense verb loved is required instead of the present-tense verb love.

× This is because I think most have a many facilities and popular restaurant.

✓ This is because I think Moss has many facilities and popular restaurants.

Moss is a singular place name, so the verb must be has, not have.

× This is because I think most have a many facilities and popular restaurant.

✓ This is because I think Moss has many facilities and popular restaurants.

Many is used directly before a plural countable noun. The combination a many facilities is incorrect, so the article a must be removed.

× This is because I think most have a many facilities and popular restaurant.

✓ This is because I think Moss has many facilities and popular restaurants.

Facilities and restaurants refer to more than one item, so both nouns need plural forms.

× Someplace is very crowded and hard to go there because of traffic congestion so that's why San Page is not suitable for meeting someone.

✓ Some places are very crowded and difficult to get to because of traffic congestion, so San Page is not suitable for meeting people.

The plural subject some places requires the plural verb are. The noun people is also more appropriate after meeting when referring to people in general.

× Someplace is very crowded and hard to go there because of traffic congestion so that's why San Page is not suitable for meeting someone.

✓ Some places are very crowded and difficult to get to because of traffic congestion, so San Page is not suitable for meeting people.

For a place that is difficult to reach, the correct expression is difficult to get to. The preposition to is needed at the end of this expression.

× Someplace is very crowded and hard to go there because of traffic congestion so that's why San Page is not suitable for meeting someone.

✓ Some places are very crowded and difficult to get to because of traffic congestion, so San Page is not suitable for meeting people.

Using so and that is why together is redundant. Use one linking expression, such as so, to connect the cause and result.

× This is because I am an interrupted person.

✓ This is because I am an introverted person.

Interrupted means stopped or disrupted. The adjective introverted describes someone who prefers spending time with one person or alone.

× I love to talk with just one people.

✓ I love to talk with just one person.

After the number one, use the singular noun person, not the plural noun people.

× This is because it helped me to comfort to speak and relax.

✓ This is because it helps me feel comfortable speaking and relaxing.

The answer discusses a general present benefit, so helps is needed instead of the past-tense verb helped.

× This is because it helped me to comfort to speak and relax.

✓ This is because it helps me feel comfortable speaking and relaxing.

After the adjective comfortable, use the -ing forms speaking and relaxing to describe the activities. The phrase comfort to speak is grammatically incorrect.

× This is because I love to cook, especially a healthy food.

✓ This is because I love to cook, especially healthy food.

Food is normally an uncountable noun when referring to food in general, so the indefinite article a is not used.

× My friend is very important to me.

✓ My friends are very important to me.

The following sentence uses the plural pronoun they and refers to friends in general, so the subject should be plural: friends are.

× My friend is very important to me. This is because they often help me to make a better decision.

✓ My friends are very important to me. This is because they often help me make better decisions.

The pronoun they must refer clearly to the plural noun friends. The corrected version also uses the plural noun decisions for general advice.

× They obtain guide me and find information for me.

✓ They often guide me and find information for me.

Obtain guide is not a valid verb structure. The sentence needs the main verb guide, coordinated with find.

× I often go out with my friends because I think I feel relaxed and fun so the popular place that I and my friends often go is about mors.

✓ I often go out with my friends because it makes me feel relaxed, and we have fun. The popular place where my friends and I often go is Moss.

Relaxed describes a person, but fun does not describe how the speaker feels in this context. The natural expression is have fun. The sentence is also clearer when divided into two sentences.

× I often go out with my friends because I think I feel relaxed and fun so the popular place that I and my friends often go is about mors.

✓ I often go out with my friends because it makes me feel relaxed, and we have fun. The popular place where my friends and I often go is Moss.

When go is followed by a place, use go to or use the relative expression where. The corrected sentence uses where to avoid the incorrect phrase go is about.

× I often go out with my friends because I think I feel relaxed and fun so the popular place that I and my friends often go is about mors.

✓ I often go out with my friends because it makes me feel relaxed, and we have fun. The popular place where my friends and I often go is Moss.

In a compound subject, use the subject pronoun I after the other person or people: my friends and I, not I and my friends.

× We often meet each other at malls. This is because there are lots of fascinating in there, cinemas, restaurants and many things I think is very suitable for us and we often make

✓ We often meet each other at malls because there are lots of fascinating places there, such as cinemas, restaurants, and many other suitable activities for us.

Fascinating is an adjective and cannot function as the noun after lots of. It must modify a noun, such as places.

× We often meet each other at malls. This is because there are lots of fascinating in there, cinemas, restaurants and many things I think is very suitable for us and we often make

✓ We often meet each other at malls because there are lots of fascinating places there, such as cinemas, restaurants, and many other suitable activities for us.

The plural noun things or activities requires the plural verb are, not is. The corrected sentence also makes the subject and verb relationship clear.

× We often meet each other at malls. This is because there are lots of fascinating in there, cinemas, restaurants and many things I think is very suitable for us and we often make

✓ We often meet each other at malls because there are lots of fascinating places there, such as cinemas, restaurants, and many other suitable activities for us.

The original sentence ends with the incomplete phrase we often make and contains several ideas without clear connections. The correction removes the unfinished clause and organizes the ideas into a complete sentence.

× I and my friends often go to the mall and watch a movie at the cinema because it helps us to relax and release our stress from work.

✓ My friends and I often go to the mall and watch a movie at the cinema because this helps us relax and release stress from work.

Use the subject pronoun I after the other subjects in a compound subject. The natural order is my friends and I.

× Yes, I have just a couple friends that I have known for a long time.

✓ Yes, I have just a couple of friends whom I have known for a long time.

The standard quantifier expression is a couple of friends. The preposition of is required after couple.

× We study primary school together and we keep in touch because we have the common interest, for example, exercise.

✓ We studied in primary school together, and we keep in touch because we have a common interest, such as exercise.

Use in before primary school when referring to the period or place of study. The preposition such as is also appropriate when introducing an example.

× We study primary school together and we keep in touch because we have the common interest, for example, exercise.

✓ We studied in primary school together, and we keep in touch because we have a common interest, such as exercise.

Common interest is a singular countable noun, so it needs the indefinite article a. The definite article the would be used only when referring to a specific interest already identified.