朋友— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the comparison completely and use consistent past and present tenses. Say where you meet friends now, and explain how this differs from meeting friends near your home in the past. Avoid stopping mid-sentence and use a clear contrast such as “whereas” or “but now.”

範例: Yes, there is quite a big difference. When I was younger, I usually met friends who lived near my home, whereas now I tend to meet them at cafés or near the station because we live farther apart.

建議: Give a complete answer and explain both why quiet places are suitable and why noisy places are unsuitable. Correct the plural agreement and article use: “quiet cafés or meeting rooms are suitable.” Finish the sentence with a specific result, such as being able to hear each other clearly.

範例: Quiet cafés and meeting rooms are suitable because they are comfortable and allow us to hear each other clearly. In contrast, crowded or noisy places are not ideal because it is difficult to have a proper conversation there.

建議: State your preference clearly, then give one or two connected reasons. Use “one person” instead of “one people,” and explain what you mean by “giving my mind,” for example, sharing your thoughts or discussing personal matters. Avoid repeating “I like.”

範例: I prefer spending time with one close friend because I can build a deeper relationship with that person. It also feels more private, so I can share my thoughts and talk about personal matters more comfortably.

建議: The answer is direct and relevant, but avoid repeating “deeply” and “deep conversations.” Use the more natural phrase “comfortable for me” and add a specific activity or reason to make the answer more developed.

範例: Yes, I would. My home is comfortable and quiet, so it is a good place to relax and have a proper conversation. We could also cook together or watch a film.

建議: Answer the question directly by stating how important friends are now, not only in the past. Use natural expressions such as “friends were very important to me” and “I take online classes at home.” Explain that your limited time affects how often you meet them, but not necessarily how much you value them.

範例: Friends are still very important to me, although I do not see them as often as I used to. In the past, I spent a lot of time with them at school, but now I take online classes at home and have less free time to meet them.

建議: The main idea is clear, but complete the final thought and correct “even my friends” to “instead of spending time with my friends” or “as well as spending time with my friends.” Use a concise structure: answer, two reasons, and an occasional exception or future plan.

範例: No, not very often. I work four days a week, and I am also in Grade 12, so I have to spend a lot of time studying. However, I try to meet my friends at the weekend when I have time.

建議: Name the place clearly and explain why it is convenient. Use “when I have the chance” and “a place near the station,” rather than repeating “the place.” Complete the reason by mentioning transport, shops, cafés, or another specific feature.

範例: When I have the chance to meet all my friends, we usually meet at a place near the station. It is convenient for everyone because we can get there easily, and there are many cafés and restaurants nearby.

建議: This answer is relevant and includes specific activities. Improve the grammar by saying “take photos” and “spend time talking to each other.” Use a more natural linking phrase such as “After that” instead of “Moreover,” since you are describing activities in sequence.

範例: When I hang out with my friends, we usually take photos and have dinner together. After that, we spend time talking about school, work, and our daily lives. Sometimes we also visit a new café.

建議: Answer this specific question by identifying the friend and saying how long you have known them. The current answer gives a general preference but does not provide the required personal example. Use “deeply and privately” or, more naturally, “have meaningful and private conversations.”

範例: Yes, I do. My closest friend is someone I met in primary school, so I have known her for more than ten years. We have remained close because we understand each other and can have meaningful conversations.

× In the past I usually meet friends who lived nearby my home.

✓ In the past, I usually met friends who lived near my home.

The phrase in the past refers to a finished period, so the past-tense form met is needed instead of meet.

× Friends who lived in nearby my home.

✓ Friends who lived near my home.

Near is the correct preposition to describe location. We do not use in before near in this sentence.

× Some places such as quiet cafe or meeting room is suitable for meeting with people.

✓ Some places, such as quiet cafes or meeting rooms, are suitable for meeting people.

The subject places is plural, so the nouns in the examples should also be plural, and the verb must be are rather than is.

× Some places such as quiet cafes or meeting rooms is suitable for meeting people.

✓ Some places, such as quiet cafes or meeting rooms, are suitable for meeting people.

The plural subject places requires the plural verb are.

× Some places such as quiet cafe or meeting room is suitable for meeting with people.

✓ Some places, such as quiet cafes or meeting rooms, are suitable for meeting people.

Because the speaker is referring to cafes and meeting rooms in general, plural nouns are more appropriate than singular nouns without articles.

× Because since they are so quiet, we can talk more deeply without being interrupted.

✓ Because they are so quiet, we can talk more deeply without being interrupted.

Because and since have the same connecting function here, so using both together is redundant. Use only one conjunction.

× Because since they are so quiet, we can talk more deeply without.

✓ Because they are so quiet, we can talk more deeply without being interrupted.

Without must be followed by a noun, pronoun, or gerund phrase. The original sentence ends with an incomplete phrase, so being interrupted completes the structure.

× I love making relationships very deeply with one people.

✓ I love building a deep relationship with one person.

One must be followed by a singular countable noun, so people must change to person. The singular form also matches the meaning of one friend.

× I love making relationships very deeply with one person.

✓ I love building a deep relationship with one person.

Deep describes the noun relationship, while deeply describes an action. The adjective deep is the natural form in this noun phrase.

× So it is really private and I like my I like giving my mind.

✓ So it feels very private, and I like sharing my thoughts.

The original sentence repeats the subject and verb and contains the incomplete phrase my mind. The corrected version has one clear subject-verb structure and uses the natural expression sharing my thoughts.

× My home is comfortable to me.

✓ My home is comfortable for me.

The adjective comfortable is normally followed by for when describing the person who experiences comfort.

× It is suitable to talk with friends more deeply and have deep conversations.

✓ It is suitable for talking with friends and having deep conversations.

After suitable for, use gerunds such as talking and having. The parallel -ing forms make the two activities grammatically consistent.

× In the past friends were important to me a lot.

✓ In the past, friends were very important to me.

A lot is awkwardly placed after important in this sentence. Very is the natural adverb before the adjective important.

× Now I take an online in my home.

✓ Now I take online classes at home.

Online is an adjective and needs a noun, such as classes or courses. The corrected sentence supplies the missing noun and forms a complete sentence.

× Now I take an online in my home.

✓ Now I take online classes at home.

The fixed expression for studying or taking classes in one’s house is at home, not in my home in this context.

× I have to study hard even my friends.

✓ I have to study hard instead of hanging out with my friends.

Even cannot connect the intended contrast here. Instead of correctly introduces the activity that the speaker does not have time to do.

× When I have chance to meet all my friends.

✓ When I have a chance to meet all my friends.

Chance is a singular countable noun, so it needs the indefinite article a in this general expression.

× We usually hang out the place nearby the station.

✓ We usually hang out at a place near the station.

Hang out at is the correct prepositional combination for a location. Near is used directly before the station without another preposition.

× The place where is nearby station.

✓ A place that is near the station.

The original relative clause has no subject before is. The corrected phrase uses that as the subject and includes the necessary article before station.

× Because there are is a lot of.

✓ Because there are a lot of cafes there.

There are is already the correct plural there-be structure; is must be removed. The sentence also needs a plural noun after a lot of.

× We usually spend time on talking with each other.

✓ We usually spend time talking with each other.

After spend time, the activity is commonly expressed directly with an -ing form: spend time talking. The preposition on is unnecessary here.

× I love socializing with people who can talk with me deeply and private.

✓ I love socializing with people who can have deep and private conversations with me.

Private is an adjective, but it cannot modify the verb talk in this position. The corrected sentence uses deep and private to describe the noun conversations.

× So also I love to I use.

✓ I also love to spend time with them.

The original phrase contains repeated and incomplete verb structures. The corrected sentence has a clear subject, adverb, infinitive, and complement.