朋友— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make a clear direct response about places (not people), use a topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (differences → difference; a year ago). Keep it under 5 sentences.

範例: Yes, there is a difference. In the past I usually met friends at school or in the neighborhood, but now we meet more often in cafés or at each other’s homes because we are busier and prefer quieter places.

建議: Answer directly and give a clear reason with specific examples. Use linking words (because, so, for example). Fix grammar and keep it concise.

範例: Some places are more suitable because they are comfortable and private. For example, meeting at home is better than a busy street because we can relax, talk freely, and do activities like cooking or watching a film.

建議: Good clear preference. Improve by making the topic sentence concise, adding one specific reason and an example, and fixing small grammar issues (spend → spending; openly and freely).

範例: I prefer spending time with one close friend because it is more comfortable and we can have deeper conversations. For example, I can discuss personal problems or plan projects with my best friend without distractions.

建議: Give a direct yes/no response, then add 1–2 specific activities you do together using linking words (for example, and, such as). Correct grammar and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I often invite friends to my home. For example, we relax by watching TV, cooking dinner together, or playing games, which helps us bond.

建議: Avoid incorrect words (cruel). Start with a clear topic sentence about importance, give specific reasons and examples, and use correct grammar (they are; help me with). Keep it concise.

範例: Friends are very important to me because they support me academically and emotionally. For example, they help me with homework, collaborate on projects, and give advice when I have problems.

建議: Answer directly and list 2–3 specific places with reasons. Use linking words (for example, such as, because) and correct word forms (supermarket, beach, coast).

範例: Yes, I often go out with friends. For example, we go to the supermarket to buy food, visit the beach to relax, and sometimes take trips to the coast to spend time together and experience local culture.

建議: State the usual meeting places clearly, then give 1–2 typical activities using linking words. Use correct nouns (coffee shop, homes) and concise sentences.

範例: We usually meet in cafés or at each other’s homes. When we meet, we often cook together, watch movies, or just chat and catch up.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence about common activities, then list specific activities with linking words and correct grammar (cook, watch movies, eat popcorn). Avoid filler words.

範例: When we meet, we usually cook together, watch movies, and eat snacks like popcorn. Sometimes we also play games or go for a walk.

建議: Provide a clear response with accurate time expression (since grade 7 or for many years). Mention one or two ways you keep the friendship strong with specific examples. Fix numbers and time confusion.

範例: Yes, I have four friends I have known since grade 7, so we have been friends for many years. We stay close by regularly chatting, sharing ideas, and working on projects together.

× Yes, actually there are difference between my friends now and my friends before 1 years.

✓ Yes, actually there are differences between my friends now and my friends from one year ago.

The noun 'difference' should be plural 'differences' to match 'there are'. Also 'before 1 years' is ungrammatical: use 'from one year ago' or 'a year ago' to indicate time; number and noun must agree ('1 years' is wrong). Use 'there are differences' for plural subject agreement.

× So uh, my friend now, uh, friendly, honest and, and uh, playing.

✓ So, my friends now are friendly, honest, and playful.

The speaker lists traits of friends so a verb 'are' is needed and adjectives must be appropriate: 'playing' is a verb/participle; use adjective 'playful'. Also use plural 'friends' to match 'my friends now'.

× As uh, in modern life and best to technology, we can meet at with other in home as suitable more than coffee as we have relaxing and uh do free and a lot of thing.

✓ In modern life, with the help of technology, we can meet each other at home more easily than in a coffee shop because we can relax and do many things freely.

Multiple preposition errors: 'best to technology' -> 'with the help of technology'; 'meet at with other in home' -> 'meet each other at home'; 'as suitable more than coffee' -> 'more easily than in a coffee shop'; 'do free and a lot of thing' -> 'do many things freely'. Reorder for clarity and correct prepositions.

× In my opinion, I think uh, spend time with my best friend is more comfortable and I can talk with him openly and free without any distractions so that more important things and.

✓ In my opinion, spending time with my best friend is more comfortable, and I can talk with him openly and freely without any distractions, so we can focus on more important things.

Use gerund 'spending' as subject, not bare infinitive; use adverb 'freely' not adjective 'free'; add commas and a verb for the final clause ('so we can focus...') to complete the sentence.

× Yes, actually as as he my best friend, so I call him that to do many activities and relaxing time watching TV, eat together and so on and in good way and.

✓ Yes, because he is my best friend, I invite him to do many activities and relax, such as watching TV and eating together.

Pronoun and clause errors: 'as as he my best friend' should be 'because he is my best friend'; 'call him that to do' -> 'invite him to do'; 'relaxing time watching TV, eat together' -> 'relax, such as watching TV and eating together'. Remove redundant conjunctions.

× My friends, uh, is very cruel and useful for me as they help me to uh, doing my homework, uh, and umm, creating some things, uh, do project together so that.

✓ My friends are very kind and helpful to me because they help me do my homework, create things, and work on projects together.

'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural 'friends' (subject-verb agreement); 'cruel' is opposite of intended meaning—use 'kind'; 'useful for me' -> 'helpful to me'; 'help me to doing' -> 'help me do' (base verb after help). Clarify list with parallel verbs.

× Yes, actually I go many times to my friends, uh, for example, to supermarket, to beach and even to the coastal that to, to take some time with others and uh, and sharing cultures.

✓ Yes, I go to my friends' houses many times; for example, to the supermarket, to the beach, and even to the coast to spend time with others and share cultures.

Plural and possessive issues: 'go many times to my friends' -> 'go to my friends' houses many times'; 'to supermarket' -> 'to the supermarket'; 'to beach' -> 'to the beach'; 'the coastal' -> 'the coast'. Use infinitive 'to spend' and parallel verb 'share' instead of 'sharing'.

× As my best friend, so we can meet other in different places, for example in coffee or in other each, uh, home.

✓ Since he is my best friend, we can meet in different places, for example in a coffee shop or at each other's homes.

'As my best friend' needs clause 'Since he is my best friend'; 'meet other in' -> 'meet in different places'; 'in coffee' -> 'in a coffee shop'; 'in other each home' -> 'at each other's homes' (correct preposition and possessive form).

× And, uh, we can do something when we meet, uh, others, for example, can, uh, cooking or spend.

✓ We can do many things when we meet, for example, cook or go out together.

Use base verb 'cook' after 'can' not gerund 'cooking'. The fragment 'or spend' is incomplete; specify 'go out together' or 'spend time together' to complete the thought.

× Actually, when we meet my friend, uh, in our home can do a lot of things that we, for example, uh, can cooking can, uh, uh, can watch TV or movie and eat popcorns and.

✓ When my friends and I meet at home, we can do a lot of things, for example, cook, watch TV or movies, and eat popcorn.

Grammar and word order: subject needed ('my friends and I'); after 'can' use base verbs ('cook', 'watch') not gerunds; plural 'movies' and uncountable 'popcorn' (not 'popcorns'). Remove extra filler words.

× Yes, ensure I have 4 friends with my grade 7 as in 40 years, so that's a long time and we always, uh, sharing ideas, sharing my uh, chat together and.

✓ Yes, I have four friends from grade 7; we have known each other for about 40 years, so that's a long time, and we always share ideas and chat together.

Numbers should be written 'four' in formal writing but digits acceptable; 'ensure' is incorrect here; 'have 4 friends with my grade 7' -> 'have four friends from grade 7'; 'as in 40 years' -> 'we have known each other for about 40 years'; use present simple 'share' for habitual actions, not 'sharing' without auxiliary.