朋友— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using linking words. Avoid hesitation fillers.

範例: Not really. I usually met friends at school when I was younger, but now I often meet colleagues at work or at birthday and anniversary parties. So overall, the places are quite similar.

建議: Use clearer grammar and linking words (for example, however). Give one or two specific reasons and an example. Replace vague phrases and avoid repetition.

範例: Some places are suitable because they are quiet and allow conversation; for example, a coffee shop is ideal for chatting. However, busy places like shopping centers are noisy and distracting, so it is harder to talk there.

建議: Improve sentence structure and fluency. Use a clear topic sentence and link supporting reasons with connectors (because, while). Avoid sentence fragments and be specific about what changes in groups.

範例: I prefer spending time with one friend because you can have deeper, more personal conversations, while group meetings tend to be less intimate and more focused on general topics.

建議: Correct verb forms and organise ideas: state your habit, give two specific activities, and add a cultural comment linked with a reason. Remove pauses and unclear fragments.

範例: Yes, I do. I often invite friends to cook together or share drinks at home because I enjoy a relaxed atmosphere. This is also common in Latin America, where social gatherings at home are part of the culture.

建議: Be more fluent and correct small grammar errors. Start with a direct statement, then explain with a specific reason and an example. Remove fillers like 'uh'.

範例: My friends are very important to me. When you live far from your family, close friends become like a second family, so I appreciate sharing my life and experiences with them.

建議: Make sentences grammatically correct and concise. Use linking words to combine ideas and specify typical activities. Clarify the phrase about caring for each other.

範例: Yes, we usually go out every weekend, and if we cannot, we meet during the week because maintaining contact and supporting each other is important to our group.

建議: Remove hesitation and use past/present tenses correctly. Give a concise answer with two specific locations and a brief reason for each.

範例: We often meet at a bar in the CBD called The Wooden Horse to celebrate achievements and birthdays. We also frequently go to a nearby Japanese restaurant because we all enjoy that cuisine.

建議: Correct vocabulary (bird watching) and verb forms. Use linking words to list activities and give one specific example or detail about a recent trip.

範例: We like spending time in nature, so we often go camping and look for hiking trails. For example, last month we went bird watching in a nearby reserve and saw several native species.

建議: Use correct tense and concise phrasing. Start with a clear statement, give the length of the friendship, and add one specific memory or reason this friendship is long-lasting.

範例: Yes, I have two friends I met in primary school and we've been close for about 25 years. We grew up in the same village and shared many experiences, which has kept our friendship strong.

× When I was younger I met people in school and sometimes parties of another friends.

✓ When I was younger, I met people at school and sometimes at other friends' parties.

Incorrect past tense preposition and possessive: 'in school' should be 'at school'; 'parties of another friends' is ungrammatical — use 'other friends' parties' to show possession. Also add commas for clarity.

× Umm, actually, I know people from work and I make new friends in birthdays or anniversary parties.

✓ Umm, actually, I meet people at work and make new friends at birthday or anniversary parties.

Use present tense 'meet' for habitual actions and correct preposition 'at' for events; use 'birthday' (singular as modifier) and 'anniversary parties' for plural events. 'Make new friends in birthdays' is incorrect.

× I believe everyone want to feel confident and listened and some places allow that happens meanwhile others not.

✓ I believe everyone wants to feel confident and listened to, and some places allow that to happen while others do not.

Subject-verb agreement: 'everyone' is singular so use 'wants' (Grammar problem 27 also). 'Listened' needs the particle 'to'. Use infinitive 'to happen' and 'while' or 'whereas' instead of 'meanwhile' in this clause; include auxiliary 'do not' for negation.

× For example, if you met with some with someone, meet with someone in a coffee, maybe you can chat.

✓ For example, if you meet with someone in a coffee shop, you can maybe chat.

Use present tense 'meet' for general condition. Remove duplicate words and use 'someone' correctly. Use 'coffee shop' rather than 'in a coffee' and place adverb 'maybe' appropriately.

× But in a shopping center, maybe that will be impossible because of the noise and people around.

✓ But in a shopping center that may be impossible because of the noise and the crowds around.

'Maybe that will be impossible' is awkward; 'that may be impossible' is clearer. Use 'crowds' or 'people' with article 'the' for specificity.

× I prefer spend time with just one friend at a time because it's easier to have a deep and open heart conversation.

✓ I prefer to spend time with just one friend at a time because it's easier to have a deep, open-hearted conversation.

After 'prefer' use infinitive 'to spend'. 'Open heart conversation' should be 'open-hearted conversation' or 'a heartfelt conversation'. Add comma between adjectives.

× In one-on-one meeting you can focus in each other and. Give all your attention on that discussion whereas in a group. Possibly will be less personal and more.

✓ In a one-on-one meeting you can focus on each other and give all your attention to that discussion, whereas in a group it is likely to be less personal and more distracting.

Fix sentence fragments and prepositions: 'focus on each other' and 'give attention to'. Combine fragments into one sentence and supply subject 'it' and adjective 'distracting' to complete thought.

× I really enjoy invite some friends cooking together or sometimes share some drinks.

✓ I really enjoy inviting some friends over to cook together or sometimes sharing drinks.

After 'enjoy' use gerund 'inviting'. Add 'over' for inviting to your home; 'cooking together' and 'sharing drinks' are gerunds.

× I like to spend time at home. I think it's a very cultural. Thing in on something very common in Latin America.

✓ I like to spend time at home. I think it's a very cultural thing and quite common in Latin America.

Remove misplaced periods and fix word order: 'a very cultural thing' is acceptable though 'very cultural' is informal; combine clauses properly and use 'quite common'.

× Sometimes when you leave very away from your family or the place you born, friends are like family.

✓ Sometimes when you live far away from your family or the place you were born, friends are like family.

Use 'live' not 'leave'. Use 'far away' rather than 'very away'. For birthplace use passive past 'were born'.

× I really love uh, my friends and I'm very grateful of share my life with them.

✓ I really love my friends and I'm very grateful to be able to share my life with them.

Use correct preposition 'grateful to' and add 'be able to' or use gerund 'for sharing'. 'Grateful of share' is incorrect.

× Yes, we try to go out every weekend and if we can't, we try to do something in the middle of the week.

✓ Yes, we try to go out every weekend, and if we can't, we try to do something in the middle of the week.

Add comma for clarity; tense is fine. Minor punctuation fix.

× Because it's important to us keep an eye of others and take it care, taking care of the whole group.

✓ Because it's important for us to keep an eye on others and take care of the whole group.

Correct prepositions: 'important for us to', 'keep an eye on', and 'take care of'. Remove redundant phrase 'taking care'.

× Oh, there is a place in the CBD we really enjoy.

✓ Oh, there is a place in the CBD that we really enjoy.

Add relative pronoun 'that' to link clauses; sentence otherwise okay.

× Umm, it's a bar called The Wooden Horse and we usually went there to celebrate someone's achievement.

✓ Umm, it's a bar called The Wooden Horse and we usually go there to celebrate someone's achievements.

Use present tense 'go' for habitual action; 'achievement' often plural 'achievements' or keep singular depending on context.

× And also we have another, uh, restaurant we like a lot is a Japanese restaurant and I think we all like that kind of food.

✓ We also have another restaurant we like a lot; it is a Japanese restaurant, and I think we all like that kind of food.

Fix sentence structure and article usage: 'a Japanese restaurant' is correct. Split into clear clauses.

× We really like spend time in nature, so most of the time we make plans to go to camping and we look for some trails.

✓ We really like spending time in nature, so most of the time we make plans to go camping and look for trails.

After 'like' use gerund 'spending'. Use 'go camping' not 'go to camping'. 'Look for trails' is more natural.

× Sometimes we do bird washing.

✓ Sometimes we go bird watching.

'Bird washing' is incorrect; the hobby is 'bird watching'. Use 'go bird watching'.

× Yes, I have two friends that I met in the primary school, so we have been friends for a long time, I could say 25 years or something like that.

✓ Yes, I have two friends whom I met in primary school, so we have been friends for a long time — I would say about 25 years.

Use 'whom' as object of 'met' (formal) and drop 'the' before 'primary school'. Use 'would say' for estimate and punctuation for clarity.

× We grew up together and went to the same school, live in the same little village, so yes has been a long time sharing our lives.

✓ We grew up together and went to the same school, and lived in the same little village, so yes, it has been a long time sharing our lives.

Maintain past tense 'lived' to match 'grew up' and 'went'. Add subject 'it' in 'it has been' and commas for clarity.