广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答有明确观点，也补充了出现的场景和个人感受，结构基本清楚。但“advisement”应改为“advertisement”，“scan my social media”不自然，应说“scroll through social media”；“advertisements pop up”要使用复数谓语。建议用一个具体例子说明广告为什么令人烦恼，并减少重复表达。

範例: Yes, absolutely. I often see advertisements when I’m using my phone or computer, especially while scrolling through social media. To be honest, I find them quite annoying because they sometimes pop up in the middle of a video or interrupt what I’m doing.

建議: 回答中的“是的，绝对不是”自相矛盾，应该直接回答“Yes, definitely”。“advisement”和“advancement”都不能代替“advertisement”，“it looks looked”时态混乱，句子也没有完整说明广告的具体内容和影响。建议按照“广告是什么—为什么印象深刻—结果如何”的顺序回答，并控制在3至4句。

範例: Yes, definitely. I clearly remember a chocolate advertisement from my childhood. The chocolate looked delicious, and the colorful packaging made it seem like a special treat. I begged my parents to buy it for me, so that advertisement left a strong impression on me.

建議: 回答有直接观点，但“subway bars”表达错误，应为“subway cars”或“subways”；“on the other transportation”应改为“on other forms of transportation”。后半部分重复较多且没有具体例子。建议说明广告通常出现在哪里，并列举一两种常见产品，例如手机套餐、食品或护肤品。

範例: Yes, I see quite a lot of advertisements on public transport. They are usually displayed above the seats, on the doors, or on digital screens in subway cars. Most of them promote everyday products such as mobile phone plans, snacks, and skincare items.

建議: 使用“It depends”作为开头很好，但后面的句子语法和词汇问题较多。“advisement”应为“advertisements”，“investment”不符合语境，应为“advertisements”；“unrelevant”应为“irrelevant”。建议清楚对比喜欢和不喜欢的广告，并说明原因。

範例: It depends on the type of advertisement. I like funny or meaningful advertisements because they can entertain me or teach me something useful. However, I dislike irrelevant advertisements, especially when they interrupt videos or appear repeatedly on my screen.

建議: 回答表达了喜欢有趣和有教育意义的广告，也给出了原因，基本符合题目要求。但“interesting funny”应改为“interesting and funny”，“to raise”用词错误，“get something happiness or funny”不自然。建议使用更准确的词汇，如“educational advertisements”“learn useful information”“make me laugh”。

範例: I like creative and funny advertisements, especially ones with an educational message. They can teach me something useful while also making me laugh. For example, I enjoy public-service advertisements that use a short story to promote road safety or environmental protection.

建議: 回答直接且提供了具体时间和产品，这是优点。但“a advisement”应改为“an advertisement”，“tested”应改为“tasted”，“looks it looked”时态重复；“went to the supermarket by the kind of product”表达不自然。建议使用过去时完整描述购买过程，并说明购买后的结果或感受。

範例: Yes, I did. It happened last week when I saw an advertisement for strawberry milk online. It looked delicious, so I went to the supermarket and bought a bottle immediately. Fortunately, it tasted as good as it looked, so I would probably buy it again.

× To be honest, I'm very annoyed about that, especially when I scan my social media and, uh, advisement pop up through my screen.

✓ To be honest, I'm very annoyed about that, especially when I scan my social media and, uh, advertisements pop up on my screen.

“Advertisements”表示多个广告，所以要使用复数形式。复数主语后面要用“pop up”，不能使用单数形式。“advisement”不是这里表示“广告”的正确名词，应使用“advertisement”。

× To be honest, I'm very annoyed about that, especially when I scan my social media and, uh, advisement pop up through my screen.

✓ To be honest, I'm very annoyed about that, especially when I scan my social media and, uh, advertisements pop up on my screen.

表示广告出现在屏幕上时，应使用介词“on”，而不是“through”。固定表达是“pop up on my screen”。

× I thought when I was a child at that time I was attracted by the chocolate advancement since it looks looked very delicious and tasty thing and I also like.

✓ I thought that when I was a child, I was attracted to the chocolate advertisement because it looked very delicious and tasty, and I also liked it.

“thing”是可数名词，前面需要冠词，但这里可以直接用形容词作表语，因此删除“thing”更自然。此外，“liked”后面需要代词“it”指代前面提到的广告或巧克力。

× I thought when I was a child at that time I was attracted by the chocolate advancement since it looks looked very delicious and tasty thing and I also like.

✓ I thought that when I was a child, I was attracted to the chocolate advertisement because it looked very delicious and tasty, and I also liked it.

这件事发生在过去，所以“look”应使用过去式“looked”，“like”应使用过去式“liked”。同一个过去事件中的主要动词通常要保持过去时。

× I thought when I was a child at that time I was attracted by the chocolate advancement since it looks looked very delicious and tasty thing and I also like.

✓ I thought that when I was a child, I was attracted to the chocolate advertisement because it looked very delicious and tasty, and I also liked it.

“be attracted to”是固定搭配，表示“被……吸引”。这里应使用“to”，而不是“by”。

× I thought when I was a child at that time I was attracted by the chocolate advancement since it looks looked very delicious and tasty thing and I also like.

✓ I thought that when I was a child, I was attracted to the chocolate advertisement because it looked very delicious and tasty, and I also liked it.

原句中有多个从句直接堆在一起，缺少清晰的连接结构。“thought that”引导宾语从句，“because”引导原因从句，这样句子结构更加完整、清楚。

× I often see advertisements on trains and on the other transportation like subway bars I also see the advertisement.

✓ I often see advertisements on trains and on other forms of transportation, such as subway cars. I also see advertisements there.

原句把两个完整句子直接连接在一起，缺少标点和连接结构。应拆成两个句子，并使用“such as”引出例子。

× I often see advertisements on trains and on the other transportation like subway bars I also see the advertisement.

✓ I often see advertisements on trains and on other forms of transportation, such as subway cars. I also see advertisements there.

前文谈论的是一般性的多个广告，因此后面也应使用复数“advertisements”，而不是单数“the advertisement”。

× They are also about mostly about the products in my daily life like some daily.

✓ They are mostly about products in my daily life, such as daily necessities.

原句中“about”重复使用，而且“like some daily”没有构成完整、清楚的表达。应删除重复的介词，并用“such as”引出具体例子。

× They are also about mostly about the products in my daily life like some daily.

✓ They are mostly about products in my daily life, such as daily necessities.

副词“mostly”通常放在系动词“are”之后、介词短语之前，因此应说“are mostly about”，不能说“are about mostly about”。

× For some advisement about the funny interesting things or some meaningful education items, I like this kind of investment, but for some unrelevant about advancement in my daily life and very annoyed about that.

✓ I like advertisements about funny and interesting things or meaningful educational items, but I am very annoyed by irrelevant advertisements about products in my daily life.

原句后半部分没有完整的谓语结构，只有“very annoyed”这个形容词短语。应加入主语“I”和系动词“am”，构成“I am very annoyed”。

× For some advisement about the funny interesting things or some meaningful education items, I like this kind of investment, but for some unrelevant about advancement in my daily life and very annoyed about that.

✓ I like advertisements about funny and interesting things or meaningful educational items, but I am very annoyed by irrelevant advertisements about products in my daily life.

原句中“for some irrelevant about...”的结构不完整，两个对比部分也没有保持平行。修改后使用“I like...”和“I am very annoyed...”形成清晰的对比结构。

× For some advisement about the funny interesting things or some meaningful education items, I like this kind of investment, but for some unrelevant about advancement in my daily life and very annoyed about that.

✓ I like advertisements about funny and interesting things or meaningful educational items, but I am very annoyed by irrelevant advertisements about products in my daily life.

“education items”不能直接用名词“education”修饰“items”，这里应使用形容词“educational”。“unrelevant”不是正确形式，应使用“irrelevant”。

× I like interesting funny advertisements and some advisement to raise the meaningful educational items on, since I can learn a lot from this kind of advisement or get something happiness or funny.

✓ I like interesting and funny advertisements, as well as advertisements that promote meaningful educational products, because I can learn a lot from them or get some happiness and amusement.

两个形容词共同修饰“advertisements”时，通常用“and”连接，表达更自然。“interesting funny advertisements”容易造成形容词关系不清。

× I like interesting funny advertisements and some advisement to raise the meaningful educational items on, since I can learn a lot from this kind of advisement or get something happiness or funny.

✓ I like interesting and funny advertisements, as well as advertisements that promote meaningful educational products, because I can learn a lot from them or get some happiness and amusement.

“to raise the meaningful educational items on”结构不完整，不能清楚表达广告的作用。后半部分“get something happiness or funny”也缺少正确的名词结构，因此改为“get some happiness and amusement”。

× I like interesting funny advertisements and some advisement to raise the meaningful educational items on, since I can learn a lot from this kind of advisement or get something happiness or funny.

✓ I like interesting and funny advertisements, as well as advertisements that promote meaningful educational products, because I can learn a lot from them or get some happiness and amusement.

“happiness”是名词，不能直接用“something happiness”这样的结构；“funny”是形容词，也不能与“get something”直接搭配。这里应使用名词“happiness”和“amusement”。

× I saw a advisement about a strawberry milk.

✓ I saw an advertisement for strawberry milk.

“advertisement”以元音音素开头，所以前面应使用“an”，而不是“a”。“strawberry milk”通常作为不可数饮品名称使用，不需要冠词“a”。

× I saw a advisement about a strawberry milk.

✓ I saw an advertisement for strawberry milk.

表示广告宣传某种产品时，常用搭配“an advertisement for...”，因此这里用“for”比“about”更准确。

× It looks it looked very delicious and tested.

✓ It looked very delicious and tasted very good.

“It just happened last week”说明事情发生在过去，所以“look”应使用过去式“looked”。“tested”在这里不是正确的动词形式；表示“尝起来”应使用“tasted”。

× It looks it looked very delicious and tested.

✓ It looked very delicious and tasted very good.

原句中同时出现“looks”和“looked”，造成动词重复和句子结构错误。应保留过去式“looked”，并用并列结构“looked... and tasted...”描述外观和味道。

× I was attracted by this advisement and I went to the supermarket by the kind of product immediately.

✓ I was attracted to this advertisement, and I immediately went to the supermarket to buy the product.

“be attracted to”是固定搭配。表示去超市的目的时，应使用“to buy the product”，而不是“by the kind of product”。

× I was attracted by this advisement and I went to the supermarket by the kind of product immediately.

✓ I was attracted to this advertisement, and I immediately went to the supermarket to buy the product.

“went to the supermarket by the kind of product”不能表达清楚的目的。应使用“to buy the product”这一不定式结构，说明去超市的目的。