广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fragmented phrases. Also correct small grammar errors (e.g., “advert advertisement” → “advert” or “advertisement”; “I found it” → “I find it”).

範例: Yes, I see advertisements on my phone and computer every day. For example, shopping apps often show banners offering discounts, so I sometimes scroll through them to compare prices.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific details. Remove hesitations and filler words, and use past tense consistently when speaking about childhood. Explain why it impressed you with a reason or a short description.

範例: Yes, an advertisement for a sports car impressed me when I was a child. It showed a bright red car speeding along a coastal road with exciting music, and because I loved sports cars I found the visuals and soundtrack very exciting.

建議: Reply directly and clearly, then give one or two concrete examples. Use linking words (for example, for instance) and correct word choice (e.g., “on trains or other transport” not “on trend”). Avoid unclear phrases like “retest advertisements on my it”.

範例: Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and buses. For instance, there are posters for travel agencies and video ads on subway screens, which often catch my eye when I commute.

建議: Give a direct opinion sentence and then support it concisely with reasons. Remove hesitations and unclear questions. Use linking words such as however or although if contrasting ideas.

範例: Personally, I'm not really into advertisements. However, I don't mind skimming a few if they show useful discounts or interesting product ideas.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence naming types of ads you prefer, then give specific examples and reasons. Use correct grammar (e.g., “ads that promote clothes or food” and “ads that offer discounts” ) and linking words like furthermore or for example.

範例: I prefer advertisements for clothes and food because they often include photos and prices. For example, travel brochures that show local restaurants and shops with discounts are especially helpful when I travel.

建議: Answer directly with correct tense, then give one or two specific reasons or an exception. Avoid long, repetitive explanations and keep sentences simple and connected with linking words (for example, because, so).

範例: No, I have never bought something solely because of an advertisement. Usually I see an ad on the bus but I forget the details or I cannot find where to buy the product, so I don't follow through.

× Exactly, I see an advert advertisement on my phone and computer every day.

✓ Exactly, I see advertisements on my phone and computer every day.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural because 'every day' implies repeated occurrences on both phone and computer; use 'advertisements' to match plural context.

× It's about promoting something or selling something.

✓ They're about promoting or selling something.

'It' refers to multiple advertisements, so use plural subject 'they' and the base verb 'are' with the gerund phrase 'about promoting' to make subject-verb agreement consistent.

× Offer discount.

✓ They often offer discounts.

This fragment lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'They often offer discounts' supplies subject, verb and plural noun 'discounts' to express the intended meaning.

× Yes. I personally I found it very interesting and I usually scroll about it.

✓ Yes. Personally, I find them very interesting and I usually scroll past them.

Tense and pronoun usage are inconsistent. Use present tense 'find' to match habitual action 'usually', use plural pronoun 'them' for advertisements, and use the correct verb pattern 'scroll past' instead of 'scroll about'.

× The most impressive advertisement I saw when I was a child, I, I was a child is uh, promoting about uh, uh, sport car because I love sport cars.

✓ The most impressive advertisement I saw when I was a child was one promoting sports cars because I love sports cars.

Remove disfluencies and fix structure: use past tense 'saw' with past linking verb 'was', and 'promoting sports cars' is correct without 'about'. Use plural 'sports cars' for natural phrasing.

× I was young, that's why I found it very intense.

✓ I was young, so I found it very exciting.

'Intense' is awkward here; 'exciting' is more appropriate. 'That's why' is informal; 'so' connects clauses smoothly. Tense 'found' remains past to match 'was young'.

× Yes, yes I do. I see a lot of advertisement on trend or another transportation, especially when I try going to travelling and I I love to retest advertisements on my it about promoting something or influencer promoting something it very important.

✓ Yes, I do. I see a lot of advertisements on trains and other transport, especially when I travel, and I like to look at ads about promotions or influencers; they seem very important to me.

Multiple errors: use plural 'advertisements', correct 'on trend' to 'on trains', 'going to travelling' simplified to 'travel', 'retest' incorrect—use 'look at', fix pronoun 'it' and add punctuation. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× Personally I would honestly say I'm not really into advertisements but it is OK to read a bit but umm I'm not love to.

✓ Personally, I would honestly say I'm not really into advertisements, but it's okay to read them a bit; I don't really like them.

'I'm not love to' is ungrammatical; use 'I don't really like them'. Contractions and punctuation improve clarity; use plural pronoun 'them'.

× Are we explore about it to be?

✓ I'm not sure what you mean by 'explore it further.'

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Provide a clarified alternative that fits conversational repair: 'explore it further' is a natural phrase.

× I like the kind of advertisement that they promoting about clothes and something to eat like the list for food, something offer discount and creativity advertisement.

✓ I like advertisements that promote clothes and food, especially those that offer discounts and show creativity.

Fix relative clause: use 'that promote' (not 'they promoting about'), simplify 'something to eat' to 'food', pluralize 'advertisements', and use parallel structure 'offer discounts and show creativity.'

× Especially when I travel I want to find something new.

✓ Especially when I travel, I want to find something new.

Minor punctuation: add a comma after 'travel' for clarity. Tense 'want' fits habitual/future intentions; no verb change needed.

× While I had never ever buy something because an advertisement before because I just look around on the bus and I could not find the location to buy it or I just scanning a bit and then I forget about it.

✓ I have never bought anything because of an advertisement because I just look around on the bus and can't find where to buy it, or I scan it briefly and then forget about it.

Use present perfect 'have never bought' to describe experience up to now. Change 'buy' to past participle 'bought'. Use 'can't' for present inability and change 'scanning' and 'forget' to consistent present tense 'scan' and 'forget' (or 'scan... and then forget') to describe habitual actions.

× That this one I never buy something.

✓ So, I never end up buying anything from those ads.

Original is ungrammatical. Provide smoother phrasing: 'never end up buying anything' correctly expresses the idea and uses plural 'ads' context.