广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は内容を伝えていますが、文法や語順の誤り、冗長さ、つながり表現の欠如があります。まずトピックセンテンスを明確にし、Supporting detailsは論理的に接続詞（for example, because, so）で結び、文を短く分ける練習をしてください。また、複数形や前置詞（on my phone / on my computer）を正しく使い、同じ表現の繰り返しを避けること。具体的には“I often see ads on my phone and computer. They appear as banners or pop-ups when I scroll, and that can be annoying because I don’t want to check them.”のように5文以内で簡潔に述べる練習をしましょう。

範例: I often see ads on my phone and computer. They usually appear as banners or pop-ups when I scroll, which can be distracting. Because they interrupt what I’m doing, they sometimes make me feel annoyed. I rarely click on them unless the ad is relevant to something I need.

建議: 内容は思い出を伝えていますが、語彙選択と文の構成が不自然で、意味が取りにくい箇所があります。まず英語で主語と述語をはっきりさせ、不要な繰り返しを避けてください。アニメーションやジングル（singing jingle）といった具体的語を用い、過去形で一貫して話すと分かりやすくなります。例: “When I was a child, a beverage commercial with a cute animated character and a catchy jingle impressed me. Although it stopped airing for years, the brand still exists in Hong Kong.”のように整理して練習を。

範例: When I was a child, a beverage commercial with a cute animated character and a catchy jingle impressed me. The song and animation made it memorable, so I still remember it now. It stopped airing on TV for a long time, but the brand continues to sell its products in Hong Kong.

建議: 回答は肯定していますが、文の意味が不明瞭で文法ミスが多いです。交通機関の広告の種類を述べるときは、具体的に“posters, digital screens, exterior ads”などの語を使い、接続詞で整理してください。例: “Yes, I see many ads on buses and trains, such as posters and digital screens. They also display ads on the exterior of the trains.”のように簡潔に。

範例: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport. For example, there are posters inside trains and buses and digital screens on platforms. In Hong Kong, companies also put ads on the outside of trains, which are hard to miss.

建議: 意見は示されていますが、時制の混乱と冗長さ、曖昧な表現があります。まず現在の気持ちと過去の経験を分けて述べ、理由は明確に示してください。接続詞（however, because）を使うと流れが良くなります。例: “I used to enjoy ads because they let me learn about products, but I dislike repetitive ads that play too often.”のように練習してください。

範例: I used to enjoy watching advertisements because they helped me learn about new products. However, I dislike ads that are repeated too often on TV because they become annoying. Nowadays I’m more indifferent to most advertisements unless they are creative or informative.

建議: 好みは明確ですが、文が長く不自然で一部語順や語法が誤っています。好みを述べたあと、その理由や具体例を一つか二つで説明すると良いです。接続詞（because, for example）を使い、句の簡潔さを保ってください。例: “I like animated ads, especially Japanese ones, because they are creative and often funny. For example, there's a YouTube channel that compiles these ads.”

範例: I prefer animated advertisements, especially those from Japan, because they are creative and entertaining. For example, there is a YouTube channel that collects many Japanese animated ads, so I watch them when I feel bored.

建議: 答えは肯定的で理由も示していますが、人名や表現が不明確で文法ミスがあります。まず“yes”のあとに簡潔なトピックセンテンスを置き、理由と具体例を続けてください。動詞の形や冠詞（a/the）にも注意。例: “Yes. I once bought a product because a favourite actress endorsed it. I tend to trust products she advertises.”のように5文以内で練習しましょう。

範例: Yes, I have. I once bought a skincare product because my favourite actress was the brand ambassador. I trust her taste, so I felt confident trying the product, and I ended up liking it.

× Yes, I have to say I see advertisement everywhere because they can insert into different types of banner and to scroll down when no matter when you use phone computer, sometimes it actually makes me feel annoyed because I really don't want to check any of them.

✓ Yes, I have to say I see advertisements everywhere because they can be inserted into different types of banners and appear when you scroll on your phone or computer; sometimes it actually makes me feel annoyed because I really don't want to look at any of them.

Many article and countability issues: 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because 'everywhere' implies many. 'different types of banner' needs plural 'banners'. Use passive 'can be inserted' or active 'they insert themselves' for natural English. Also improve phrasing 'to scroll down when no matter when you use phone computer' to 'appear when you scroll on your phone or computer'. Use 'look at' instead of 'check' for adverts. Suggestion: ensure correct singular/plural nouns and use appropriate articles or plural forms; simplify awkward clauses.

× And how to say this one is the cruel the cruel bearage drink using the animation to share and also have a singing tone which makes everything quite fascinating but it just stopped to play on TV for a long time.

✓ There was an advertisement for a cruel-sounding beverage that used animation and had a singing jingle, which made it quite memorable, but it stopped airing on TV a long time ago.

Original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. 'And how to say this one is' is unnecessary. 'the cruel the cruel bearage drink' is repetitive and misspelled; use 'cruel-sounding beverage' or 'cruel beverage' and correct 'beverage'. 'using the animation to share' should be 'used animation' (past tense). 'have a singing tone' → 'had a singing jingle'. 'stopped to play on TV for a long time' → 'stopped airing on TV a long time ago'. Suggestion: make a single coherent past-tense sentence, fix spelling, remove repetition.

× I just notice it still survived the brand in Hong Kong.

✓ I just noticed that the brand still survives in Hong Kong.

Tense and preposition issues: 'notice' should be past 'noticed' to match context. 'it still survived the brand' is incorrect word order and verb choice; use 'the brand still survives' and preposition 'in Hong Kong' is correct. Suggestion: use correct tense and subject-verb order; place prepositional phrase after the verb phrase.

× Some online parliament the screen type of advertising and there is also talk the thing train in Hong Kong they also put the advertising outside

✓ Some are online or screen-type advertisements, and on trains in Hong Kong they also put advertisements on the outside of the trains.

The original is a run-on with missing verbs and unclear nouns. 'parliament' is likely misused; clarify as 'are online or screen-type advertisements'. 'talk the thing train' is unclear; interpret as 'on trains'. Use 'put advertisements on the outside of the trains' for clarity. Suggestion: restructure into clear coordinated clauses with proper verbs and prepositions.

× When I was there, I really loved watching advertisements because it's the way for you to learn different products when you really want to expand your knowledge.

✓ When I was younger, I really loved watching advertisements because they're a way to learn about different products if you want to expand your knowledge.

Mixed tense and vague reference: 'When I was there' is unclear—use 'when I was younger' for childhood reference. 'it's the way for you to learn' mixes singular present 'it's' with general advice; use 'they're a way to learn about'. Also replace 'when you really want' with 'if you want' for condition. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and clearer subject references.

× But I really dislike advertising just to repeat and play it many times at the end on the TV stations and now I'm just feel fine with it

✓ But I really dislike advertisements that are repeated many times on TV stations; now I just feel fine with them.

Tense and noun form: use plural 'advertisements'. 'just to repeat and play it many times' should be 'that are repeated many times'. 'at the end on the TV stations' is awkward—simplify to 'on TV stations'. 'I'm just feel' is incorrect: use 'I just feel' or 'I'm fine with them now.' Suggestion: use correct verb forms and plural nouns, and simplify phrases.

× I like the animation type of advertising especially those from Japan and I also know there is a YouTube channel that's always gathering all of the animation advertisements from Japan with a package and to reveal when anyone is filled bored.

✓ I like animated advertisements, especially those from Japan, and I know there is a YouTube channel that collects all the Japanese animated adverts into compilations to watch when someone is bored.

Article and word choice: 'the animation type of advertising' is awkward—use 'animated advertisements'. 'those from Japan' is fine. 'gathering all of the animation advertisements from Japan with a package' → 'collects all the Japanese animated adverts into compilations'. 'to reveal when anyone is filled bored' → 'to watch when someone is bored.' Suggestion: choose natural collocations (animated advertisements, compilations) and correct prepositional phrases.

× I have to say yes, I prefer one Chinese actress. She is Tokipu and she actually is the celebrity represents for so many advertisement brands and no matter which brand she is working with and I will definitely to support and purchase something.

✓ I have to say yes. I prefer one Chinese actress, Tokipu; she actually represents many advertising brands, and no matter which brand she works with, I will definitely support and buy something.

Tense and verb form errors: split into sentences for clarity. 'prefers one Chinese actress' needs punctuation. 'she actually is the celebrity represents for' should be 'she represents many advertising brands'. 'no matter which brand she is working with' → 'no matter which brand she works with'. 'I will definitely to support and purchase something' remove 'to' after 'definitely' and use natural verbs 'support and buy'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms and remove unnecessary infinitives; keep consistent present tense for habitual actions.