广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and finish your thought. Also correct minor grammar (e.g., 'there are always pop-up ads' and 'I have to watch them all').

範例: Yes. I often see pop-up advertisements when I watch videos or play games on my phone or computer. These interrupt what I'm doing and waste time, so I usually close them immediately.

建議: Use past tense consistently and give a clearer, slightly longer description with linking words. Avoid hesitations and aim for one topic sentence plus specific details about why it impressed you.

範例: Yes. I remember a milk commercial from my childhood that impressed me because it showed a mother sending milk to her son at school. The boy felt proud and happy, which made the ad memorable and warm.

建議: Clarify and correct grammar (use 'on airplanes' and 'I couldn't use my phone'). Start with a clear topic sentence and connect reasons with linking words. Be specific about types and where you saw them.

範例: Yes. I often notice many advertisements on airplanes and in train stations. Because I can't always use my phone on flights, I end up reading the in-flight magazines or watching the screens, which is why the ads catch my attention.

建議: Be direct and grammatical: state your preference, give specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague words and unfinished phrases. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct nouns ('Thai ads').

範例: I like creative advertisements rather than boring, repetitive ones because creativity makes them entertaining and memorable. For example, many Thai online ads use humor and surprising sketches that really catch my attention.

建議: Answer with a clear topic sentence and specific examples. Correct grammar ('I like ads that give me useful information' and 'show me how to use a product'). Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid filler sounds.

範例: I prefer advertisements that provide useful information because they help me decide whether a product is worth buying. For example, I enjoy ads that demonstrate how a gadget works and explain its real benefits.

建議: Complete your answer with a clear topic sentence, specific example, and result. Correct plural and phrasing ('many things' not 'stuffs') and avoid trailing off. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'so' to show outcome.

範例: Yes. I have bought several items after seeing online ads, especially cleaning supplies and small electronics. For instance, I ordered a robotic vacuum after watching a detailed ad and it worked well, so I was satisfied with the purchase.

× there are always popping advertisements during videos or playing video games.

✓ there are always popping-up advertisements during videos or while playing video games.

The issue is with verb + -ing form and word choice. 'popping advertisements' is unnatural; the compound adjective 'popping-up' (or 'pop-up') describes the ads. Also 'playing video games' should be introduced with 'while' to show simultaneous action. Use 'pop-up advertisements' and 'while playing video games' for clarity and correct form.

× But I'm annoyed by that because I have to, uh, watch the whole.

✓ But I'm annoyed by that because I have to, uh, watch the whole ad.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks an object; this is a sentence structure error. Adding the noun 'ad' completes the object of 'watch the whole' and makes the sentence grammatically complete.

× Yes, when I was a child, there are many funny and interesting advertisements on television.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, there were many funny and interesting advertisements on television.

Tense inconsistency: the clause begins with past time marker 'when I was a child' so the verb should be in the past tense ('were') rather than present ('are'). Match past context with past tense verbs.

× a mother sent the milk to her boy in the school and, uh, the boy felt very proud and, uh, happy.

✓ a mother sent milk to her son at school, and the boy felt very proud and happy.

Multiple small structure and word choice issues: 'the milk' is better as 'milk' in general reference; 'her boy' is awkward—use 'her son'; 'in the school' should be 'at school'. Also remove extra filler and redundant commas for fluent English.

× I've seen a lot of advertisements on airplane because I had no, I cannot play phones when I'm on an airplane, so I have to watch the advertisements on the screen or in the on magazine to pass the time.

✓ I've seen a lot of advertisements on airplanes because I cannot use my phone when I'm on a plane, so I have to watch the advertisements on the screen or read the magazine to pass the time.

Multiple article and word usage errors: 'on airplane' should be 'on airplanes' or 'on a plane' (plural or with article). Use 'cannot use my phone' rather than 'cannot play phones'. 'in the on magazine' is incorrect — use 'read the magazine'. Adjust verb forms and articles for natural English.

× I like creative *** instead of boring repetitive ones because so I was.

✓ I like creative ads instead of boring, repetitive ones because I enjoy being surprised by them.

The original has missing words ('***') and an incomplete causal clause 'because so I was'. This is a sentence structure error. Replace '***' with 'ads', add comma between 'boring' and 'repetitive', and supply a clear reason clause to complete the thought.

× I'm pretty amazed by some Thailand ads on the Internet because they are so funny.

✓ I'm pretty amazed by some Thai ads on the Internet because they are so funny.

Word choice/adjective form: use the adjective 'Thai' rather than the country name 'Thailand' when modifying 'ads'. The tense 'I'm pretty amazed' is acceptable present; correction focuses on correct adjective form.

× For example, they do some shows to impress you.

✓ For example, they put on shows to impress you.

Verb usage: 'do some shows' is unnatural. Use 'put on' with 'shows' or 'make short sketches' depending on context. 'Put on shows' is the idiomatic phrasal verb.

× I like add advertisement that gives me real useful information instead of and just wasting my time.

✓ I like ads that give me genuinely useful information instead of just wasting my time.

Adjective/adverb misuse and word order: 'add advertisement' is wrong — use 'ads'. 'Real useful' should be 'genuinely useful' or 'really useful'; 'instead of and just' is incorrect — use 'instead of just'. Rearranged for natural word order.

× Umm for example if I see a advertisement that show me how to use a product and why it's useful, I would enjoy that.

✓ For example, if I see an advertisement that shows me how to use a product and why it's useful, I enjoy that.

Subject-verb agreement and article use: 'a advertisement' should be 'an advertisement' (vowel sound). 'that show me' should be 'that shows me' because the relative clause refers to 'advertisement' (singular). Also use present simple 'I enjoy that' to express general preference.

× Yes, I bought many stuffs from the advertisements.

✓ Yes, I bought many things because of advertisements.

Word choice and count noun error: 'stuffs' is nonstandard; use 'things' or specific plural nouns. Also clarify 'from the advertisements' to 'because of advertisements' to express motivation. Past tense 'bought' is correct.

× For example, I often see some cleaning and uh uh, electronic products, uh advertised online and I would.

✓ For example, I often see cleaning and electronic products advertised online, and I would buy them.

Sentence incomplete and article use: remove unnecessary 'some' and fillers, 'electronic products' is fine without extra commas, and finish the sentence with 'buy them' to complete the idea. Also place 'advertised online' after the noun phrase for natural order.