广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve accuracy, grammar and conciseness. Use a clear topic sentence, correct noun forms and capitalization, and one or two supporting details with a linking word. Avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I see advertisements often on my phone and computer. For example, while using social media or reading news sites I regularly encounter targeted ads; sometimes they are useful because they show products I have been searching for recently.

建議: Be direct and coherent. Give a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail or brief reason. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect vocabulary. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: I can't remember any particular advertisement from my childhood. I mostly watched cartoons on TV, so I paid little attention to the commercials that played during the breaks.

建議: Correct sentence fragments and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise examples using linking words. Fix plural and article errors.

範例: Not really — I don't use public transport much. Occasionally, when I ride my motorbike I notice large, eye-catching ads on buses and at stations, which are designed to attract attention.

建議: Use appropriate vocabulary and full sentences. Begin with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons with linking words. Avoid incorrect words and informal fragments.

範例: I don't like most advertisements because I find them annoying and disruptive. For example, pop-ups that interrupt articles or videos are frustrating, so I prefer to research products myself using reviews and comparison sites.

建議: Choose accurate adjectives and correct noun forms. Give a clear preference, then support it with a concise example using linking words. Replace incorrect words like "traumatic" and "ask."

範例: I prefer advertising that is simple and informative rather than flashy. For instance, I appreciate ads that clearly explain a product's main features and benefits so I can decide whether it's worth buying.

建議: Avoid sentence fragments and grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with one specific reason using linking words. Use correct verb forms.

範例: Not usually. I typically make purchase decisions after reading user reviews and comparing prices online, rather than relying on advertisements, which I find can be biased.

× I usually come across advertisement when I'm using social media or reading News Online.

✓ I usually come across advertisements when I'm using social media or reading news online.

Plural issue: 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to ads in general (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Also 'News Online' should be lowercase 'news online' as it is a common noun, not a proper name (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Suggestion: use plural for general repeated items and use lowercase for common nouns.

× Although I find them annoying, some of them may be relevant to me because they are spot on what I've been looking for lately.

✓ Although I find them annoying, some of them may be relevant to me because they are exactly what I've been looking for lately.

Incorrect use of phrase/word choice: 'spot on what' is incorrect; use 'exactly what' or 'spot on' as an adjective phrase before a noun (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Suggestion: replace awkward phrase with 'exactly what' to convey the meaning clearly.

× I was more focused on watching cartoons on TV rather than the US in between.

✓ I was more focused on watching cartoons on TV than on what was in between.

Incorrect pronoun/reference and preposition use: 'the US in between' is unclear and likely wrong reference; compare with 'rather than' which should be followed by a parallel structure (Grammar Problem Type IDs 12 and 11). Suggestion: make the comparison parallel and clarify the contrasting activity, e.g., 'than on other things in between' or rephrase to state the intended idea clearly.

× I even wished the arts could go always quickly.

✓ I even wished the ads could go away quickly.

Incorrect word choice and adverb placement: 'arts' should be 'ads' (advertisements), 'go always quickly' has incorrect adverb order; correct form is 'go away quickly' (Grammar Problem Type IDs 13 and 20). Suggestion: use the correct noun 'ads' and place adverbs in natural order 'go away quickly'.

× Every now and then while riding my motorbike on the road I come across advertisement on buses that are quite large and eye-catching that attract people's attention.

✓ Every now and then while riding my motorbike on the road I come across advertisements on buses that are quite large and eye-catching and attract people's attention.

Plural issue and conjunction use: 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Also the clause 'that are quite large and eye-catching that attract' repeats 'that' awkwardly; use 'and' to connect adjectives and a verb clause or restructure (Grammar Problem Type ID 16). Suggestion: use plural for general occurrences and connect clauses cleanly: 'large and eye-catching and attract...' or 'large and eye-catching, which attract...'.

× I.

✓ (remove stray fragment)

Sentence fragment/structure error: single letter 'I.' is incomplete and has no verb (Grammar Problem Type ID 23). Suggestion: delete the fragment or complete the sentence, e.g., 'I do.' if intended.

× Personally, I fight advertisements.

✓ Personally, I dislike advertisements.

Incorrect word choice: 'fight' is incorrect in this context; use verbs like 'dislike' or 'find annoying' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Suggestion: use appropriate verb to express feeling about ads.

× Very annoying and disruptive, especially when they interrupt what I'm reading or watching online.

✓ They are very annoying and disruptive, especially when they interrupt what I'm reading or watching online.

Sentence without a verb/structure error: fragment 'Very annoying and disruptive...' lacks a subject and main verb (Grammar Problem Type ID 23). Suggestion: add subject and verb: 'They are...' to form a complete sentence.

× I prefer to search products myself rather than rely on us, which can sometimes be misleading or extractoristic.

✓ I prefer to search for products myself rather than rely on advertisements, which can sometimes be misleading or exaggerated.

Preposition and pronoun use and word choice: add 'for' after 'search' ('search for products') (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). 'rely on us' is wrong pronoun; likely 'rely on ads' or 'rely on them' (Grammar Problem Type ID 12). 'extractoristic' is not an English word; use 'exaggerated' or 'misleading' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Suggestion: use correct preposition, correct reference to advertisements, and a valid adjective.

× I prefer advertisement that are simple and informative rather than overly traumatic.

✓ I prefer advertisements that are simple and informative rather than overly dramatic.

Plural and adjective choice errors: 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). 'traumatic' is incorrect for ads; 'dramatic' or 'sensational' fits context (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Suggestion: use plural and choose an adjective that matches intended meaning.

× For example, I like ask that clearly explain the main features and benefits of a product.

✓ For example, I like ads that clearly explain the main features and benefits of a product.

Incorrect word choice: 'ask' should be 'ads' (short for advertisements) (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Suggestion: use the correct noun 'ads' or 'advertisements'.

× I often make. Decision on my purchase based on reading reviews and comparing the price rather than rely on advertisements.

✓ I often make decisions about my purchases based on reading reviews and comparing prices rather than relying on advertisements.

Punctuation/structure and plural/verb form errors: 'make. Decision' is split incorrectly; should be 'make decisions' (Grammar Problem Type IDs 23 and 1). 'on my purchase' should be 'about my purchases' (preposition/number) (Grammar Problem Type IDs 11 and 1). 'rather than rely' should be 'rather than relying' to keep parallel gerund form (Grammar Problem Type ID 8). Suggestion: combine fragments, use plural nouns for general cases, and maintain parallel verb forms.