广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar; finish your thought and limit to 3–4 sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example and a brief effect or opinion. Use linking words like “for example” or “also.”

範例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer. For example, when I scroll through Instagram I frequently encounter ads for beauty treatments and clothing between stories. These ads can be useful for discovering sales, but they also interrupt my browsing.

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and singular/plural, and add a short reason why it impressed you. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like “because” or “which.”

範例: Yes, a Nike advertisement impressed me when I was a child. It showed women training hard and standing out in sports, which felt empowering because it challenged stereotypes. The slogan “Just Do It” stayed with me and motivated me to be more active.

建議: Make sentences grammatically correct and organized: begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific locations with brief details. Replace vague words and fix punctuation; avoid run-on sentences by using linking words like “also” or “for example.”

範例: Yes, there are many ads on public transport in my city. For example, I see posters on MTR platforms and bus exteriors, and inside buses there are small screens showing sponsored content. These ads are hard to avoid when I commute daily.

建議: Be clearer and correct grammar; use one or two linked sentences: state your general opinion, then give a specific condition when you find them acceptable. Avoid filler phrases like “I guess.”

範例: I don't particularly like advertisements because they distract me when I scroll on my phone. However, I appreciate ads that show discounts for products I was already planning to buy.

建議: Clarify and correct sentence structure: start with a direct topic sentence naming the type of ads you like, then give 1–2 specific examples and a short reason. Use correct vocabulary and avoid unclear words.

範例: I prefer advertisements that show sales or discounts. For instance, ads for clothing brands or designer bags are useful because they help me find good deals on items I want.

建議: Improve grammar and conciseness: give a clear topic sentence about the purchase, then briefly describe the ad and outcome. Correct verb tenses and simplify details to avoid repetition.

範例: Yes. I bought the phone case I'm using after seeing an Instagram ad offering a buy-two-get-two-free deal. I ended up buying four cases—one for myself and three as gifts for friends and family.

× I see advertisement on my phone or computer quite often.

✓ I see advertisements on my phone or computer quite often.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural because 'I see' implies repeated or multiple occurrences. Use the plural form 'advertisements' when referring to more than one instance. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when talking about repeated or multiple items: 'advertisements'.

× when I'm scrolling through Instagram, I will see an advertisement about beauty treatment, about fashion clothing and every few stories or every few reuse.

✓ when I'm scrolling through Instagram, I see advertisements about beauty treatments and fashion clothing every few stories or every few posts.

Mixed tense and form: 'when I'm scrolling' requires present tense result 'I see' rather than 'I will see'. 'beauty treatment' should be plural 'beauty treatments' to match multiple ads; 'every few reuse' is incorrect word choice – likely 'posts' or 'stories'. Also 'advertisement' should be plural. Suggestion: Use present continuous with simple present for habitual results: 'when I'm scrolling... I see' and correct nouns to plural and choose the correct word 'posts' or 'stories'.

× I remember the advertisement of Nike left quite an impression on me.

✓ I remember the Nike advertisement left quite an impression on me.

Word order and article usage: 'advertisement of Nike' is awkward; 'the Nike advertisement' is natural. 'advertisement' can be singular here because referring to a specific ad that left an impression. Suggestion: Use natural noun phrase order: 'the Nike advertisement'.

× It was very empowering to see how women put in efforts and stand out in this sports industries and with their slogan just do it.

✓ It was very empowering to see how women put in effort and stood out in these sports industries with their slogan 'Just Do It'.

Multiple issues: 'put in efforts' should be 'put in effort' or 'made efforts'; 'stand out' should match past reference 'It was' so use 'stood out'; 'this sports industries' has wrong determiner and number: use 'these sports industries' or simply 'the sports industry'; slogan capitalization set as title. Suggestion: Ensure verb tense consistency (past), correct noun number and determiners, and use idiomatic expressions: 'put in effort' or 'made efforts'.

× I see advertisement on trains and various transportations everywhere when I'm waiting for the MTR, it's on the board, when I'm on the bus, it's outside the bus and even in the bus there is this small television displaying different sponsor aids.

✓ I see advertisements on trains and other forms of transport everywhere: when I'm waiting for the MTR they're on the boards; when I'm on the bus they're outside the bus and even inside there is a small television displaying different sponsored ads.

Use plural 'advertisements'. 'Transportations' is incorrect; use 'transport' or 'forms of transport'. 'it's on the board' should agree in number: use plural or rephrase. 'sponsor aids' is incorrect — likely 'sponsored ads'. Also split into clearer clauses. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for multiple items and correct collocations: 'forms of transport', 'sponsored ads'.

× I don't particularly like advertisement.

✓ I don't particularly like advertisements.

'Advertisement' should be plural when speaking generally about ads. Alternatively could say 'I don't particularly like advertising.' Suggestion: Use 'advertisements' or 'advertising' when speaking generally.

× I find them distracting when I'm scrolling through my phones, but if it's about something being on sale after products that I want to buy and I guess I don't hate it.

✓ I find them distracting when I'm scrolling through my phone, but if an item I want is on sale I guess I don't hate them.

Pronoun and noun number errors: 'phones' should be singular 'phone' (refers to the speaker's device). 'it's about something being on sale after products that I want to buy' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'if an item I want is on sale'. Keep pronoun reference consistent: 'them' for 'ads'. Suggestion: Keep singular/plural consistency and use clear phrasing: 'if an item I want is on sale'.

× As I say, I don't mind advertisement that show sales would discount for things like actually want to buy, let's say clothing brands or designer of purse since doors can be useful information.

✓ As I said, I don't mind advertisements that show discounts on things I actually want to buy, like clothing brands or designer purses, since those can be useful information.

Multiple issues: tense 'As I say' better 'As I said'; 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'; 'that show sales would discount' is incorrect — use 'that show discounts' or 'that advertise sales'; 'things like actually want to buy' needs subject: 'things I actually want to buy'; 'designer of purse' should be 'designer purses'; 'doors' is wrong word, likely 'those'. Suggestion: Use correct collocations ('show discounts', 'designer purses'), correct relative clauses ('things I actually want to buy') and correct demonstratives ('those').

× Yes, in fact the phone case I'm using this days I bought it because of an advertisement I saw on an Instagram post and I remember it was a buy to get to free so I bought four phone cases in total, one for my friend, one for my sister and one for my sister's boyfriend.

✓ Yes, in fact the phone case I'm using these days I bought because of an advertisement I saw on an Instagram post, and I remember it was a buy-one-get-one-free deal so I bought four phone cases in total: one for my friend, one for my sister and one for my sister's boyfriend.

Errors: 'this days' should be 'these days'; unnecessary 'it' after 'I bought'; 'a buy to get to free' should be 'a buy-one-get-one-free' or 'buy one, get one free'; punctuation and article use improved. Maintain present perfect/simple past consistency: 'I'm using' present and 'I bought' past is acceptable. Suggestion: Use standard expressions for promotions ('buy-one-get-one-free') and correct time expressions ('these days').