广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và rõ ràng: tránh lỗi thì và từ sai (ví dụ: "on the term" → "online"; "us" → "ads"); sắp xếp câu hợp lý theo cấu trúc chủ đề → chi tiết; giới hạn độ dài tối đa 3-4 câu và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc (e.g., "so", "then").

範例: Yes, I often see advertisements online, especially when I'm using social media like YouTube, TikTok and shopping apps. For example, if I'm looking for shoes, I will suddenly see shoe ads everywhere, so it's hard to avoid them.

建議: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể: dùng thì đúng ("when I was younger"), sửa từ sai ("snake"→?), nêu rõ vì sao ấn tượng (giai điệu, hình ảnh, nhân vật). Dùng 2-3 câu, nối ý bằng "because" hoặc "so".

範例: Yes, when I was younger I saw many ads for toys and snacks. One ad stayed with me because it had a very catchy song and colourful characters, so I could still hum the tune years later.

建議: Sửa từ sai và cụm từ không rõ ("bees"→"buses", "size of bees"→"sides of buses", "birth stops"→"bus stops"); trình bày rõ hơn loại quảng cáo và ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng liên từ như "for example" để liệt kê thông tin.

範例: Yes, I often see a lot of advertising on buses and at bus stops. For example, I usually notice ads for restaurants, language schools and mobile services when I travel around the city.

建議: Làm rõ ý và sửa ngữ pháp: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng ("It depends"), giải thích nguyên nhân sử dụng mệnh đề ("because"); loại bỏ từ không cần thiết và điều chỉnh từ vựng ("annoying", "persuasive"/"helpful"). Hạn chế 2-3 câu súc tích.

範例: It depends. I don't like ads that appear too frequently because they can be annoying, but I appreciate ads that are funny or useful if they introduce a product I need.

建議: Sửa ngữ pháp và dùng từ đúng ("critical"→maybe "creative" or "clever"; "ads" not "as"); tổ chức câu: chủ đề → lý do → ví dụ; tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "for example" hợp lý.

範例: I prefer short, clever advertisements that make me laugh because they are memorable. For example, I once remembered an ad with a funny storyline that convinced me to buy the product.

× Yeah, on the term especially when I'm using social media I often see us on YouTube TikTok and shopping apps sometimes I'm actually looking for a pair of shoes and then suddenly astarizing shoe advertisement everywhere.

✓ Yeah, on the tram, especially when I'm using social media, I often see them on YouTube, TikTok and shopping apps. Sometimes I'm actually looking for a pair of shoes and then suddenly a starising shoe advertisement appears everywhere.

Student used 'term' instead of 'tram' (word choice) and 'us' instead of 'them' (pronoun). Also sentence structure and verb tense: 'advertisement everywhere' lacks verb; should use 'appears'. Suggestion: use correct nouns and pronouns and include verbs to complete sentences. (Vietnamese) Lỗi: sử dụng danh từ không đúng và đại từ không đúng; thiếu động từ. Hãy dùng danh từ đúng (tram), đại từ phù hợp (them) và thêm động từ hoàn chỉnh (appears).

× Yes, I remember seeing a lot of advertisements for toys and snacks when I were younger.

✓ Yes, I remember seeing a lot of advertisements for toys and snacks when I was younger.

Incorrect past tense conjugation: 'were' should be 'was' for singular first person. Suggestion: use 'was' with I in past tense. (Vietnamese) Lỗi: động từ to be ở quá khứ sai; với 'I' phải dùng 'was'.

× There were one snake advertisement with a really catchy shong and I could remember the tune even after the advertisement and

✓ There was one snack advertisement with a really catchy jingle and I could remember the tune even after the advertisement.

Plural/singular and word choice errors: 'There were one' incorrect — use 'There was one' because 'one' is singular. 'snake' should be 'snack' and 'shong' should be 'jingle'. Also sentence ended with 'and' without continuation; corrected to complete the thought. Suggestion: match 'there was' with singular nouns and check word choice. (Vietnamese) Lỗi: sai số ít/số nhiều và từ bị viết sai; với 'one' phải dùng 'there was'; sửa các từ sang 'snack' và 'jingle' và hoàn chỉnh câu.

× Yes, especially on bees. I often see advertisements on the size of bees or at birth stops when I travel around the city, it's quite common to ask for restaurants, language gangs or mobile service.

✓ Yes, especially on buses. I often see advertisements on the sides of buses or at bus stops when I travel around the city; it's quite common to see ads for restaurants, language schools or mobile services.

Preposition and word choice errors: 'bees' should be 'buses'; 'size of bees' should be 'sides of buses'; 'birth stops' should be 'bus stops'. 'ask for' incorrect; should be 'see ads for'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and vocabulary for locations and 'see ads for' when describing advertised services. (Vietnamese) Lỗi: giới từ và từ vựng sai; sửa 'buses','sides','bus stops' và dùng 'see ads for'.

× It depends I don't really like advertisement interviews or appear to frequently because they can be annoying.

✓ It depends. I don't really like advertisements that interrupt or appear too frequently because they can be annoying.

Run-on sentence and word choice: missing punctuation between clauses; 'advertisement interviews' and 'appear to frequently' are incorrect. Suggestion: split into sentences, use 'advertisements that interrupt' and 'appear too frequently'. (Vietnamese) Lỗi: cấu trúc câu nối không đúng và chọn từ sai; tách câu, dùng 'advertisements that interrupt' và 'appear too frequently'.

× However, I don't my shop and gritty as especially when they make me laugh or sell me something I to nudge.

✓ However, I don't mind shopping ads, especially when they make me laugh or nudge me to buy something.

Missing and incorrect pronouns/words: 'don't my shop and gritty' is unintelligible; likely intended 'don't mind shopping ads'. 'I to nudge' should be 'nudge me to buy'. Suggestion: ensure verbs and objects are present and pronouns appropriate. (Vietnamese) Lỗi: sử dụng đại từ và từ ngữ thiếu/sai; sửa thành 'don't mind shopping ads' và 'nudge me to buy'.

× I prefer short advertisements that are funny or critic.

✓ I prefer short advertisements that are funny or clever.

Word choice: 'critic' is incorrect adjective here; likely 'creative' or 'clever'. Suggestion: choose an adjective that fits context ('clever' or 'creative'). (Vietnamese) Lỗi: sử dụng tính từ không phù hợp; thay 'critic' bằng 'clever' hoặc 'creative'.

× I don't like as that simply tell me to buy something again and again.

✓ I don't like ads that simply tell me to buy something again and again.

Article and word errors: 'as' should be 'ads' (advertisements). Suggestion: use correct noun 'ads' for advertisements. (Vietnamese) Lỗi: sai từ (as -> ads); dùng danh từ đúng 'ads'.

× For example, I'm sometimes remember an advertisement because it had a funny story line because I told you wanted to buy the product.

✓ For example, I sometimes remember an advertisement because it had a funny storyline that made me want to buy the product.

Tense and structure errors: 'I'm sometimes remember' incorrect — use 'I sometimes remember' (present simple). 'story line' should be 'storyline'. 'because I told you wanted' is garbled; intended 'that made me want'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual memory and proper clause 'made me want'. (Vietnamese) Lỗi: thì và cấu trúc câu sai; dùng 'I sometimes remember' và 'made me want'.