广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence that answers the question, then give 1–2 short specific details. Avoid hesitation and irrelevant words. Use linking words like “because” properly and correct basic grammar (e.g., “every day”, “I use my phone for 8–10 hours”).

範例: Yes. I see many advertisements on my phone and computer because I use my phone every day for about 8–10 hours. For example, social media and video apps show short video ads between posts, so I notice them often.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) and give a specific example or reason. Avoid repeating words or using filler. Use past tense correctly when talking about childhood.

範例: Yes. A cereal cartoon ad impressed me as a child because the characters were funny and I wanted to collect the toys that came with the box. I remember the jingles and the bright colours, which made it memorable.

建議: Answer the question about transport specifically. Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific examples (e.g., posters on trains, ads on buses), using linking words like “for example” or “such as.”

範例: Yes. I often see advertisements on trains and buses, such as posters for online shopping sites and travel services. For example, the train windows often have large posters promoting seasonal sales and new apps.

建議: State your opinion clearly and support it with specific reasons. Use concise language and correct grammar (e.g., “they are boring” not “it's boring”). Avoid unclear words like “participants.” Use linking words like “because” and “so.”

範例: No, I don't like most advertisements because they interrupt what I'm doing and feel repetitive. For instance, video ads often appear before videos and waste time, so I usually skip them when I can.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the types you prefer, then give a specific reason and one short example. Use consistent phrasing (e.g., “informational ads” or “game ads”) and avoid repetition.

範例: I prefer informational advertisements and game ads because they either teach something useful or relate to my hobbies. For example, ads for language apps show useful phrases, while game ads introduce new games I might enjoy.

× I usually see Edward the cement, uh, phone because I usually use phone everyday, uh, 8 or 10 hours, uh, because that's all.

✓ I usually see advertisements on my phone because I use my phone every day for about eight to ten hours.

The sentence has article errors and other issues. 'Edward the cement' seems incorrect; replace with 'advertisements'. 'use phone' needs the possessive article 'my phone' and 'everyday' should be 'every day' (adverbial phrase). Numbers should be written as words in speech context and 'for about' clarifies duration. Ensure subject-verb agreement and natural phrasing.

× When I was child, uh, I don't uh, uh, advertised because I am a child.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't pay attention to advertisements because I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' (singular/plural issue). Verb tense inconsistent: 'When I was a child' requires past tense throughout, so 'don't' and 'am' should be 'didn't' and 'was'. Also 'advertised' is wrong in meaning; use 'pay attention to advertisements' to convey impression.

× I see a lot of advertising on marketing and online shopping.

✓ I see a lot of advertising in marketing and on online shopping sites.

Prepositions are incorrect. Use 'in marketing' to refer to the field and 'on online shopping sites' to indicate location. Also 'advertising' is countable/uncountable context; this correction keeps the original meaning and proper prepositions.

× I don't like advertisements because I'm bored, uh, it's boring. And participants, uh, spends my time.

✓ I don't like advertisements because they are boring and they waste my time.

Pronoun and verb forms were incorrect. 'I'm bored, it's boring' is redundant; better to say 'they are boring'. 'Participants' is incorrect word choice; use 'they' or 'they' as subject. 'Spends my time' has wrong verb form and subject; 'waste my time' is natural. This fixes adjective/adverb and subject-verb agreement errors.

× In my opinion, uh, information advertising and language skills advertising and uh, I like the most advertising games advertising because I love games play.

✓ In my opinion, I like informational and language-learning advertisements, and I especially like advertisements for games because I love playing games.

Article and word-formation errors: use 'informational' or 'information' as adjective and 'language-learning' for clarity. 'I like the most advertising games advertising' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'I especially like advertisements for games'. 'Games play' should be 'playing games'. This correction fixes article use and adjective formation.