广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Улучшите ясность и связность ответа: начните с прямого ответа, затем кратко объясните причину, используя связки (for example, because, so). Избегайте повторений и общих фраз; вместо этого дайте конкретный пример того, где вы видите рекламу и почему она заметна.

範例: Yes, I see adverts often on my phone and TV. For example, social media apps usually show short video ads between posts, so I notice them many times a day.

建議: Сделайте ответ более конкретным: назовите одно запоминающееся объявление, опишите, что в нём запомнилось (персонаж, музыка, слоган) и почему оно произвело впечатление. Используйте связки (because, which, so) и избегайте повторов и неточностей.

範例: Yes, one advert that impressed me as a child was a cereal commercial with a funny cartoon mascot. The mascot’s song was catchy and the bright colours made me remember the brand, so I wanted to buy it.

建議: Структурируйте ответ: начните с прямого «Да» или «Нет», затем уточните где именно (inside trains, on stations) и почему это эффективно, приведя конкретную причину. Уберите повторы и завершите мысль логическим выводом.

範例: Yes, there are many adverts inside trains and at stations. Because commuters spend time waiting or travelling, companies place posters and digital screens there, which makes the ads hard to miss.

建議: Дайте чёткий ответ и пояснение: скажите, что вам нравятся релевантные рекламы, объясните почему (полезность, новые продукты), и приведите конкретный пример. Избегайте бессмысленных повторов и поправьте грамматику.

範例: It depends — I like ads that are relevant to my interests. For instance, I enjoy yoga adverts because they introduce new classes or equipment that help me improve my practice.

建議: Сформулируйте тему ясно: назовите тип рекламы (educational, product, service), объясните конкретную выгоду (skills, techniques) и приведите пример того, что именно вам полезно. Используйте связки (for example, because, such as) и закончите предложение.

範例: I prefer educational advertising related to yoga, such as videos or course promotions. For example, an ad for an online yoga workshop can teach new techniques and provide useful resources for my practice.

× So yeah, I regularly see advertisements on my phone on my TV because in our day They say management and marketing plays an important role and as they do their work so clearly and so good, I think.

✓ So yeah, I regularly see advertisements on my phone and on my TV because nowadays people say management and marketing play an important role, and since they do their work so clearly and so well, I think.

The sentence uses inconsistent tense and incorrect word forms. 'in our day' is replaced with 'nowadays' to match present tense. 'They say' is vague; 'people say' is clearer. 'management and marketing plays' is subject-verb agreement error because a compound subject requires the plural verb 'play' (Grammar problem type ID 27). 'so good' should be the adverb 'so well' to modify the verb 'do'. Suggestions: ensure subject and verb agree (singular vs plural), use adverbs to modify verbs, and use 'nowadays' for current habitual actions.

× Yeah, it really was so interesting and so impressive advertisements when I was a child because in that day advertisements was really unreally unreally and so differently differently than

✓ Yeah, advertisements were really interesting and impressive when I was a child because at that time advertisements were really unreal and quite different.

Multiple agreement and word choice errors. 'it really was ... advertisements' misuses 'it' and mixes singular verb with plural noun; use 'advertisements were' (plural) to match the noun (Grammar problem type ID 27). 'in that day' should be 'at that time' for natural phrasing. 'unrealy unrealy' likely meant 'unreal' or 'really unusual'; use 'unreal' or 'quite different'. Remove repeated words. Suggestions: match noun number with verb number, avoid redundant repetitions, and use standard time expressions.

× Yeah, even in our on our trains and the transports in public transports, we can we can show our advertisements about everything because I think it's an effective way to show to show public, to show people about their

✓ Yeah, even on our trains and other public transport, we can display advertisements about everything because I think it's an effective way to show people information.

Preposition and word-choice issues: use 'on trains' not 'in our on our trains'; 'public transport' is the correct phrase rather than 'transports'. 'show our advertisements' better as 'display advertisements'. 'show to show public, to show people about their' is ungrammatical; use 'show people information'. Suggestions: use correct prepositions for transport ('on trains'), avoid repetition, and use appropriate verbs like 'display' or 'show' with direct objects.

× It depends on what I want to see. If there about my if it's related to my professional job, of course I like chew, I like I like to see about my things for example for yoga, for yoga

✓ It depends on what I want to see. If it's related to my profession, of course I like it; I like to see things related to my work, for example, yoga.

Sentence fragments and repetition: 'If there about my' is ungrammatical and should be 'If it's related to my profession'. 'I like chew' is meaningless; likely intended 'I like it'. Remove repeated 'I like'. Use 'things related to my work' for clarity. Suggestions: form complete conditional clauses ('If it's related...'), avoid filler words, and use clear nouns instead of verbs like 'chew'.

× So yeah, as I mentioned, if it's related to my job, for example, yoga, I like to see advertisements about yoga and because it improves my skills, it improves my my understanding about yoga and the other. It gives me new materials and new

✓ So yeah, as I mentioned, if it's related to my job, for example yoga, I like to see advertisements about yoga because they improve my skills and my understanding of yoga. They give me new materials and information.

Tense and agreement: maintain present tense 'like' and use plural 'they' to refer to 'advertisements'. 'it improves my skills' should be 'they improve my skills' to match plural subject (Grammar problem type ID 27). 'understanding about' should be 'understanding of'. Remove duplicate 'my'. 'the other' is unclear; use 'information' instead. Suggestions: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents, use 'of' with 'understanding', and avoid incomplete sentence endings.