广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は主題に触れているが、言い回しが不明瞭で繰り返しが多いです。まず主文で「はい／いいえ」や頻度を明確に述べ、その後で理由を一つか二つの具体例で補足してください。接続詞（because, so, therefore, however など）を適切に使い、同じ語の重複を避ける練習をしてください。発音や流暢さの向上のために短めの文で練習し、文を繋ぐ際は一つの論理的順序に従ってください。

範例: Yes, I see a lot of ads on my phone and computer. For example, when I use the free version of YouTube, ads play before and during videos. Because I don't have a subscription, I often have to wait through several short commercials, which can be annoying when I'm trying to watch quickly.

建議: 内容は具体的で良いですが、言葉の詰まり（uh）や反復が目立ちます。話し出しで簡潔な主題文を使い、詳細（商品名、広告の特徴、感情）を順序立てて述べてください。また、接続詞（for example, because, so）や時制に注意して自然な流れを作ると得点が上がります。

範例: Yes. I remember TV commercials for local snacks, especially a brand of donuts that looked very tasty. The ad showed colorful packaging and happy children enjoying them, so I always begged my mother to buy them whenever I saw the commercial.

建議: 主旨は理解できるが、文の構成が混乱していて重複が多いです。まず交通機関での広告の有無を明確に述べ、その後で自分の行動（スマホで動画を見る）と広告の頻度を結び付けて説明してください。文章を簡潔にし、不要な繰り返しを避け、接続詞（when, because, so）で論理を整えてください。

範例: Yes, I often encounter ads while commuting. On trains I usually watch YouTube on my phone, and because I use the free version, many advertisements appear during the videos.

建議: 答えは直接的だが、構文ミスや語順の乱れ、繰り返しが多く分かりにくいです。まず短い肯定／否定の主文を置き、理由を一つか二つの簡潔な文で述べてください。不要な繰り返しを避け、代名詞や動詞の形（e.g., 'ads are bothering me'）に注意しましょう。練習として短い正しい文を繋げる訓練をしてください。

範例: No, I don't like advertisements. They interrupt the videos I want to watch, and they are often repetitive, so they become annoying.

建議: 良い具体例とポジティブな理由を述べていますが、表現がやや冗長で不自然な語順があります。まず広告の種類を明確に言い、その後で具体的な利点（どのように役立ったか）を一つか二つの短い文で説明してください。接続詞（for example, because, so）を使う際は文を簡潔に保つと自然になります。

範例: I prefer ads that promote English-learning apps. For example, I discovered several useful apps through those advertisements, and they helped me practice vocabulary and grammar, so I'm grateful for them.

× When I use YouTube, they are not advertisements during watching random videos 'cause I don't subscribe to YouTube, I just use. I'm just using free YouTube, so they are a lot of advertisements.

✓ When I use YouTube, there are ads while I watch random videos because I don't subscribe to YouTube; I just use the free version, so there are a lot of advertisements.

This sentence has multiple issues: incorrect use of 'they are' for existence (use 'there are') and incorrect verb form 'during watching' (use 'while I watch'). Use of 'ads' is more natural than 'advertisements' repeated; 'free YouTube' should be 'the free version of YouTube' or 'the free version'. Suggestion: use 'there is/are' for existence and use 'while' + subject + verb for simultaneous actions. Also combine clauses with punctuation for clarity.

× I remember advertisements for, uh, snacks, Creole specific snacks like Donuts, uh, they looked very delicious to me and I always, always asked my mom to buy them whenever I see that on TV.

✓ I remember advertisements for Creole snacks like donuts; they looked very delicious to me, and I always asked my mom to buy them whenever I saw them on TV.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. 'I remember' is present, but the described events happened in the past, so verbs describing those events should be past tense: 'looked' and 'saw'. Also 'Creole specific snacks' is awkward; 'Creole snacks' is clearer. Use 'them' to refer back to snacks. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistency when referring to past experiences.

× On train I often see advertisements on smartphone cause while on the train. While on train I always watch YouTube on smartphone. So while watching that there are a lot of smart. There are a lot of advertisements during random videos I see.

✓ On the train I often see ads on my smartphone because while on the train I always watch YouTube on my phone. While watching, there are a lot of advertisements during the random videos I see.

Prepositions and articles are incorrect: use 'on the train' not 'on train'. 'On smartphone' should be 'on my smartphone' or 'on my phone'. Also sentence fragments like 'because while on the train.' must be completed. 'A lot of smart.' is unclear and likely a fragment—replace with 'a lot of advertisements.' Suggestion: include articles ('the') and possessives ('my') and avoid sentence fragments.

× I don't like advertisements cause when I see advertisements it's like I while I was while I was watching random videos that I wanna see. So advertisements is kind of bothering and wanna stop wanna make you.

✓ I don't like advertisements because when I see them, they interrupt me while I'm watching random videos that I want to see. So advertisements are kind of annoying and make you want to stop watching.

Errors include subject-verb agreement ('advertisements is' should be 'advertisements are'), verb forms ('while I was watching' vs present continuous 'while I'm watching' to match habitual action), and unclear phrasing 'wanna stop wanna make you.' Replace informal 'wanna' with 'want to'. Suggestion: match verb tense/aspect to the context, ensure subject and verb agree in number, and avoid fragments.

× I like advertisements of the way to improve my English, like the App English app to learn English, because thanks to that I came across a lot of good apps that make me improve my English. So I always think I'm very thankful for that.

✓ I like advertisements about ways to improve my English, such as the English-learning apps, because thanks to them I discovered a lot of good apps that helped me improve my English. So I am very thankful for that.

Preposition 'of' is incorrect; use 'about' or 'on' for topics. 'the App English app' is redundant and awkward; use 'English-learning apps' or 'the English app'. Use past tense 'discovered' and 'helped' for completed actions. 'Thanks to that' should refer to 'them' (ads), so use plural pronoun. Suggestion: use correct prepositions for topics, avoid redundancy, and maintain consistent verb tense.