广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答总体可以直接回应问题，但存在重复、语法和表达不够自然的问题。建议：1) 开头用一句更自然的主题句，例如“I see ads very often on my phone and computer.” 2) 避免重复词汇（不要反复说advertisements），用代词或同义词替换；3) 用一到两句具体细节支持并使用连接词，例如“for example”或“especially”。4) 注意语法：‘mobile phones’可改为‘my phone’或‘mobile apps’。

範例: I see ads very often on my phone and computer. For example, mobile apps like Taobao and music streaming services show numerous banners and pop-ups, and many websites also display targeted ads based on my browsing history.

建議: 回答含糊且缺乏具体细节，语句不连贯并有口头填充词。建议：1) 直接给出主题句，例如“Yes, a TV advert impressed me as a child.” 2) 提供具体细节（广告内容、为什么印象深刻、感受或影响），用连接词如“because”或“so”。3) 避免无意义的词（如“uh”）并保持句子完整。

範例: Yes, a TV advert impressed me when I was a child. It featured a catchy jingle for a chocolate brand, and I remember it because the music was very memorable and it made me ask my parents to buy the chocolate every week.

建議: 回答有一定内容但表达不完整且有重复词汇和句子碎片。建议：1) 用更自然的主题句，如“Yes, public transport often displays ads.” 2) 给出具体例子并用连接词（for example, because）说明原因或感受。3) 避免重复（如“ad advertisement”），并完成句子，不留下未说完的部分。

範例: Yes, public transport often displays many advertisements. For example, on a recent long train journey in Yunnan I noticed posters promoting tourist attractions and local products, which I found useful for planning stops.

建議: 态度表达明确，但语言冗余、语法和用词问题影响自然度。建议：1) 用更自然的否定句并扩展理由，例如“I don't like ads because they interrupt me.” 2) 用连贯的支持句并使用连接词（because, so, therefore）。3) 避免重复词并注意单复数与定冠词。

範例: I don't like advertisements because they often interrupt what I'm doing on my phone. They can be distracting, especially pop-ups or video ads that start playing automatically.

建議: 回答能传达主要意思，但句子结构笨拙且有重复。建议：1) 用更简洁的主题句，例如“I prefer ads about groceries or products I need.” 2) 说明原因和例子（how such ads help you, where you see them）并使用连接词（for example, because, so）。3) 尽量用更地道的表达如“product ads”或“targeted ads”。

範例: I prefer advertisements about groceries or products I need because they help me discover new brands and deals. For example, targeted ads for cooking ingredients or snacks on shopping apps often give me useful information and discounts.

× There are a lot of advertisements when I use the mobile phones such as Taobao and Google Music and some other apps.

✓ There are a lot of advertisements when I use mobile phones such as Taobao, Google Music and some other apps.

句中“the mobile phones”使用不当。英语中在泛指可数名词复数时通常不加定冠词，应用“mobile phones”而不是“the mobile phones”。另外列举应用时用逗号分隔，去掉多余的“and”。

× I think the advertisements are now full of every website I visit.

✓ I think advertisements are now all over every website I visit.

原句中“full of every website”搭配不自然。应使用习惯表达“all over”或“on every website”来表示广告遍布网站。将定冠词去掉使句子更自然。

× Definitely there are many advertisements, especially in the TV programs.

✓ Definitely, there were many advertisements, especially in TV programs.

题目询问“when you were a child”，叙述应使用过去时，故将“are”改为“were”。此外“the TV programs”更自然为“TV programs”表示总体概念，去掉定冠词。

× I still remember that one day I just watched the TV in front of my TV station and uh, the advertisement.

✓ I still remember that one day I was watching TV at my home/station when an advertisement came on.

原句结构混乱且时态和搭配不正确。“watched the TV in front of my TV station”不通顺，可能想表达“在家/在电视台前看电视”。建议用过去进行时“was watching TV”更符合回忆中的背景动作，并用“an advertisement came on”来表达“出现了一个广告”。中文建议：用更清晰的地点和时态，并用习惯搭配表达广告出现。

× I often see them on trains because it has a long journey to take, so we have much time on paying attention to the advertisements.

✓ I often see them on trains because they have long journeys, so we have plenty of time to pay attention to the advertisements.

原句“it has a long journey to take”中主语与代词不一致，应与“trains”保持一致用“they”。“much time on paying attention”搭配错误，应为“plenty of time to pay attention”。建议注意主谓一致和固定搭配。

× Last Sunday I traveled in Yunnan province. There was indeed an ad advertisement on the.

✓ Last Sunday I traveled in Yunnan Province. There was indeed an advertisement on the train.

原句“an ad advertisement on the.”不完整且重复“ad advertisement”。应去掉重复并补全地点（如“on the train”）。注意专有名词“Yunnan Province”首字母大写并省略不必要的冠词。

× When I use my mobile phones there is usually much information but also a lot of the ad advertisements, which bothered me a lot because I just want to do my own things, no interrupt, so I don't like them.

✓ When I use my mobile phone there is usually a lot of information but also many advertisements, which bother me a lot because I just want to do my own things, without interruption, so I don't like them.

多处时态和数的问题：1)“mobile phones”泛指用单数“mobile phone”更自然；2)“a lot of the ad advertisements”重复且冠词使用错误，改为“many advertisements”；3)主句时态要一致，用现在时“bother”而非过去式“bothered”；4)“no interrupt”不正确，应为“without interruption”。中文建议：注意单复数一致、避免重复用词、保持时态一致并使用正确固定搭配。

× It's about the groceries which I want to buy because when I have some need, I prefer to watch the ads to explore the groceries I want to look for.

✓ They are about groceries I want to buy because when I need something, I prefer to watch ads to find the groceries I'm looking for.

句首代词与前文不衔接，改为“It/They are”或直接省略“It's”。“the groceries which I want to buy”中定冠词可省略为“groceries I want to buy”。“when I have some need”不自然，改为“when I need something”。“watch the ads to explore the groceries I want to look for”重复冗长，改为“watch ads to find the groceries I'm looking for”。建议简化表达，用常见搭配如“need something”和“find something”。