广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce repetition, give a direct topic sentence, add one specific supporting detail, and keep it within 3–4 clear sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' or 'so').

範例: Yes. I see many advertisements on my phone because I use social media and streaming apps every day. For example, short video ads often appear between clips, so I learn about new products quickly.

建議: State one clear example of an ad, explain why it impressed you with specific details (images, music, characters), and avoid filler words and repetition. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

範例: Yes. A snack commercial with a cheerful mascot impressed me because it used bright colours and catchy music that I still remember. As a child I wanted to learn how they created the mascot, so I became interested in advertising and marketing.

建議: Answer directly, give a specific example of what you see on transport (posters, digital screens), and explain briefly why these ads are effective or not. Use one linking word to make the response coherent.

範例: Yes. I often see posters and digital screens on buses and trains, which advertise local shops and apps. These ads are effective because they reach commuters who use public transport every day.

建議: Give a direct opinion and add a specific reason or example. Remove hesitation and correct grammar (watch vs watch). Keep it concise and use a linking word such as 'because' or 'so'.

範例: Yes, I like advertisements because they keep me informed about new products and services. For example, ads on social media introduce me to apps and discounts that I might otherwise miss.

建議: Name the type of ads you prefer and explain why with a specific aspect (format, creativity, length). Avoid repeating words and use linking words (for example, 'because' and 'for example').

範例: I prefer YouTube ads because many are short, creative videos that demonstrate products in use. For example, tutorial-style ads show how a gadget works, which helps me decide whether to buy it.

× Of course, when I use my smartphone, I usually usually watch it the very very variety of advertisements. It is a great way to to.

✓ Of course, when I use my smartphone, I usually see a wide variety of advertisements. It is a great way to learn about products.

Errors: repetition ('usually usually', 'very very', 'to to') and incorrect article/phrase 'watch it the ... variety of advertisements'. Use 'see a wide variety of advertisements' to be natural. 'A' is required before 'wide variety' and 'see' fits better than 'watch' for advertisements generally seen on devices. Also provide a complete second clause 'learn about products' to clarify purpose. Suggestion: eliminate repeated words, choose correct verb (see), and include the indefinite article before 'wide variety'.

× Uh, when I was younger, uh, the snack elaborate is very famous elaborate. It was very impression for me. So when I was child, I was interested in a variety of variety of different types. So I want to be AI want to be a advertisement manager.

✓ Uh, when I was younger, the snack brand was very famous. It left a strong impression on me. So when I was a child, I was interested in many different types of snacks. So I wanted to be an advertising manager.

Errors: tense inconsistency and word choice. Use past tense 'was' and 'left' to match 'when I was younger'. 'Impression' requires 'left a strong impression on me'. Include articles 'a child' and 'an advertising manager'. Remove redundant words ('elaborate', repeated 'variety'). Suggestion: use correct past tense verbs, proper collocations ('left an impression', 'interested in many different types'), and correct articles 'a/an'.

× When I when I take the bus take the bus, I usually see the various variety of advertisements. There are many advertisements or advertisements bus or train. I think that it is a great way to advertise their products.

✓ When I take the bus, I usually see a variety of advertisements. There are many advertisements on buses and trains. I think that it is a great way to advertise products.

Errors: repetition and incorrect noun forms. Use singular 'a variety of advertisements' (article needed) and preposition 'on buses and trains'. Remove 'their' unless referring to a specific subject; 'advertise products' is clearer. Suggestion: remove repeated phrases, fix article usage, and use correct prepositions for public transport ('on buses/trains').

× Of course, I I really watches the advertisement because I'm very curious person. So watching advertising is very beneficial for me. I think advertising is very interesting content.

✓ Of course, I really watch advertisements because I'm a very curious person. So watching advertisements is very beneficial for me. I think advertising is very interesting content.

Errors: subject-verb disagreement 'I watches' should be 'I watch'. Missing article 'a very curious person'. Use plural 'advertisements' to match general reference. Suggestion: ensure verb form matches subject, include necessary articles, and use consistent pluralization for general nouns.

× Currently I interested in YouTube advertisement. YouTube is what is well known for a good social media platform. So there are many interesting advertisements. So when I watch the YouTube I saw many advertise it. It is very interesting.

✓ Currently I am interested in YouTube advertisements. YouTube is well known as a popular social media platform, so there are many interesting advertisements. When I watch YouTube I see many ads. They are very interesting.

Errors: missing auxiliary 'am' for present continuous 'I am interested'. Incorrect phrase 'what is well known for a good social media platform' — use 'well known as a popular social media platform'. Mix of tenses 'when I watch ... I saw' should be present 'I see'. Use 'ads' or 'advertisements' and plural form. Suggestion: include correct auxiliary verbs, use appropriate linking words ('as'), and keep present tense consistent when speaking about habitual actions.