广告— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要更直接并注意语法和时态，避免重复与模糊表达。先给出主题句，然后用一到两句具体细节说明为何印象深刻（例如广告的画面、音乐、出现频率或带来的情感）。注意动词时态和代词用法，删去多余的词。

範例: The advertisement for the brand "I Can" left a strong impression on me as a child. It appeared everywhere—on modern buildings, in subway stations and on billboards—so I saw it almost daily. The ad felt very fashionable because of its bright colors and catchy music, which made it hard to forget.

建議: 回答要组织得更清晰，先给出肯定句，再用连接词说明原因并给出具体例子。改正语法错误（如‘to and off school’应为‘to and from school’），并用复合句使表达更自然。

範例: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport because I commute about two hours to and from school every day. As a result, I often notice ads for food and travel in Chinese subways, which seem to be the most common types.

建議: 回答要更明确并避免重复。先给出总体立场，然后具体说明不同场景下的感受与原因。用更自然的短语替换‘tolerated’（例如‘they bother me less’）并修正语法和习惯用法（‘favorite movie’单数并注意时态）。

範例: It depends on the context: I don't mind ads in public places like buses or subways because they are easy to ignore. However, when I'm trying to watch my favourite movie, ads annoy me and make me frustrated because they interrupt the experience.

建議: 回答要更具体并用更地道的表达。先给出偏好（例如‘creative or humorous ads’），然后说明原因并举例。避免模糊句和重复，使用连接词使逻辑清楚。

範例: I prefer creative or humorous advertisements, especially those that tell a short story or use a clever joke. They feel more engaging and memorable than ordinary ads that only list product features.

建議: 回答要更准确并修正表达。说明常见广告形式并给出频率或具体场景。避免重复（如‘we must we must’），使用正确词汇（‘on phones and computers’、‘apps’）。

範例: Yes, I often see many ads on my phone and computer, especially in apps and video sites. For example, before watching online movies we usually have to watch a 15-second commercial.

× Yes, I think the most impressive advertisement is is the ad of like I can.

✓ Yes, I think the most impressive advertisement is the "I Can" ad.

句子有重复词“is is”，且短语“the ad of like I can”结构不自然。应使用固定名称或引号表示广告名称，并用单一的系动词“is”。建议删除重复词，使用正确的名词短语或引号标示作品名。

× I can saw it everywhere, such as modern building, subways and bars.

✓ I saw it everywhere, such as on modern buildings, subways and in bars.

原句使用“can saw”混合了情态动词和过去式，语法错误。应去掉情态动词或改为适当时态；此外，地点名词前需加介词（on/in）且复数形式更合适（buildings）。建议使用“saw”并补介词。

× It was seen as a symbol of fashion.

✓ It was seen as a symbol of fashion.

此句语法正确，可保留。意思清晰，使用被动结构无误。

× Yes, because it takes me two hours to and off school so I can see many advertisements on the subways, bars and other transport.

✓ Yes, because it takes me two hours to get to and from school, so I can see many advertisements on the subways, buses and other transport.

原句缺少动词短语“get to and from school”且“and off”错误；“bars”应为交通工具“buses”。需使用正确动词短语和交通工具词，并在并列名词前加定冠词或复数形式。

× The most popular advertisement in Chinese subway is for delicious food and traveling.

✓ The most popular advertisements in Chinese subways are for delicious food and travel.

“in Chinese subway”应为复数“in Chinese subways”或“on the Chinese subway system”；主语与谓语需数一致（advertisements … are）。“traveling”改为名词“travel”更自然。

× It depends on where I see it.

✓ It depends on where I see them.

若指“advertisements”，代词应为复数“them”。单数“it”与复数先行词不一致，属于代词使用错误并影响句子结构。

× If there is advertisement in subway and bus or in other public place, I will feel I will feel tolerated.

✓ If there are advertisements in the subway, on buses or in other public places, I can tolerate them.

“there is advertisement”需用复数且用“there are”；“in subway and bus”需加冠词和正确介词（in the subway, on buses）；“public place”应为复数“public places”；“I will feel I will feel tolerated”重复且表达不自然，改为“I can tolerate them”。

× But if I want to see a favorite movies I will be a little noisy and upset.

✓ But if I want to watch my favorite movie, I will be a little noisy and upset.

“see a favorite movies”混合单复数且动词选用不当。应为“watch”搭配“movie”，如果是特定喜爱影视用“my favorite movie”。同时保持单数一致和在名词前加冠词。

× I think it is funny to put advertisement into a story or a joke.

✓ I think it is funny to put an advertisement into a story or a joke.

“put advertisement”缺冠词，应为“put an advertisement”；整体结构正确但需要不定冠词以标示单一事物。

× I think it is more tolerated than this for just common intentions.

✓ I think that is more acceptable than advertisements with just obvious commercial intentions.

原句“more tolerated”搭配不当，tolerated通常被动，语义不自然。且“this”指代不明，改为更明确的表达：可接受性（acceptable）对比“明显的商业目的”。建议使用“acceptable”并明确要比较的对象。

× Yes, there are countless advertisements in Chinese form and computers such as radio apps.

✓ Yes, there are countless advertisements on Chinese phones and computers, such as radio apps.

原句“in Chinese form”显然为拼写或词选错误，意为“on Chinese phones”；应使用介词“on”用于电子设备，并用复数“phones”。保持明确的名词。

× We must we must see 15 seconds advertisement for watching movies.

✓ We must watch a 15-second advertisement before watching movies.

原句重复“We must we must”，且结构不自然。“see 15 seconds advertisement for watching movies”应改为“watch a 15-second advertisement before watching movies”。使用连字符构成形容词短语并调整副词位置以符合习惯用法。