休息— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly by naming a place, then explain why it helps you relax and add one specific example. Improve word choice and grammar: say “peaceful,” “unwind,” “listened to the birds,” and “enjoyed the sounds of nature.” Avoid unclear expressions such as “the native’s routing.”

範例: Recently, I usually relax at home, especially on my porch, because it is peaceful and helps me unwind after a long day. For example, yesterday I sat outside, listened to the birds, and enjoyed the sounds of nature.

建議: Give a clear answer about whether you relax alone or with other people. Use accurate vocabulary and punctuation: “I usually prefer to be alone,” “introverted,” and “especially at the weekend.” Connect the contrasting ideas with “however” and provide a specific family activity.

範例: I usually prefer to relax alone because I am quite introverted. I often play video games or watch movies in my room to unwind. However, at weekends, I sometimes relax with my family by going out for dinner.

建議: State your opinion clearly and support it with a relevant explanation. Check vocabulary and pronunciation so that the music genres and final idea are understandable; you could say “K-pop and hip-hop” and “forget about my daily stress.” Use the present tense consistently: “help me relax,” not “helped me relax.”

範例: Definitely. I often listen to K-pop and hip-hop because their melodies and rhythms help me relax and forget about my daily stress. I usually play music when I feel tired after studying or working.

建議: List your activities in a grammatically parallel form and explain their effect. Use “play games, listen to music, watch movies, or lie down” rather than mixing verb forms. Add linking words and replace the unclear phrase “feel lace sweats” with “feel less stressed” or “feel relaxed.”

範例: I do several things to relax, such as playing video games, listening to music, and watching movies. If I am especially tired, I simply lie down on my bed for a while. These activities help me clear my mind and feel less stressed.

× For example, yesterday I went outside and sat on my porch, listen to the bird and enjoy the native's routing.

✓ For example, yesterday I went outside and sat on my porch, listened to the bird, and enjoyed the native's routing.

The sentence describes completed actions that happened yesterday, so the verbs should be in the past tense: listened and enjoyed. The verbs are also arranged in a parallel structure after went and sat.

× However, I sometimes spend time with my family especially on the weekend we go outside to have dinner

✓ However, I sometimes spend time with my family, and especially on weekends, we go outside to have dinner.

The original sentence joins two complete ideas without appropriate punctuation or a conjunction. A comma and and are needed to connect the ideas clearly. Weekends is used because this describes a repeated activity.

× Definitely, I often listen to music such as kip and type up because the melody and the rhythms helped me relax and forget about diabetes that for example when I feel tired.

✓ Definitely, I often listen to music such as kip and type up because the melody and the rhythms help me relax and forget about diabetes, especially when I feel tired.

The answer describes a general habit, so help should be in the present tense rather than helped. The phrase that for example is not grammatically appropriate here; especially when clearly introduces the situation in which the music helps the speaker relax.

× Definitely, I often listen to music such as kip and type up because the melody and the rhythms helped me relax and forget about diabetes that for example when I feel tired.

✓ Definitely, I often listen to music such as kip and type up because the melody and the rhythms help me relax and forget about diabetes, especially when I feel tired.

That is used incorrectly before the example of when the speaker feels tired. Especially when is the appropriate connecting expression because it introduces a specific situation.

× I do a few things to relax, especially playing games, listen to music watching movies or just lie down on my bed they make me feel lace sweats

✓ I do a few things to relax, especially playing games, listening to music, watching movies, or just lying down on my bed. They make me feel lace sweats.

The activities in the list should use the same -ing form for parallel structure: playing, listening, watching, and lying. The original sentence also needs a period before They because it contains two separate sentences.