自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 先直接回答是否有自行车，再用一两个具体细节补充，例如谁教你骑车、你在哪里骑。注意使用正确表达，如“when I was a child”和“taught me how to ride a bike”；避免重复“how to relate”，并删去“I’m done”等与回答无关的话。

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents taught me how to ride it and keep my balance. I used to ride it around our neighborhood, and I have very fond memories of those days.

建議: 开头直接说明自行车是否受欢迎，随后用清楚、具体的理由支持观点，例如短途出行方便、成本低或有利于环保。注意使用“a convenient way to get around”和“good for the environment”等自然表达；避免重复和未完成的句子。

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for short trips. They’re a convenient and affordable way to get around, particularly in busy areas. They’re also better for the environment than cars.

× Yeah, hell back when a child, my parents told me how to relate, how to relate fast and good, control your balance on the bike.

✓ Yeah, back when I was a child, my parents taught me how to ride a bike, ride fast and well, and control my balance.

“back when a child”缺少主语和系动词，应该说“back when I was a child”。原句中的动词结构也不平行；改为“how to ride…, ride…, and control…”后，几个动作的形式保持一致。

× Yeah, hell back when a child, my parents told me how to relate, how to relate fast and good, control your balance on the bike.

✓ Yeah, back when I was a child, my parents taught me how to ride a bike, ride fast and well, and control my balance.

这里的“good”修饰动词“ride”，需要使用副词“well”；“fast”既可以作形容词，也可以作副词，因此此处可以保留。

× Yeah, hell back when a child, my parents told me how to relate, how to relate fast and good, control your balance on the bike.

✓ Yeah, back when I was a child, my parents taught me how to ride a bike, ride fast and well, and control my balance.

原句先说父母教“我”（“me”），后面却说控制“你的”平衡（“your balance”），代词指代不一致。此处应使用“my balance”，与说话者本人保持一致。

× It's fantastic memory for me.

✓ It's a fantastic memory for me.

“memory”在这里是可数名词单数，前面需要加不定冠词“a”。

× It's convenience It's convenience way to go to anywhere near for from you.

✓ It's a convenient way to get anywhere nearby.

“way”是可数名词单数，前面需要加“a”。

× It's convenience It's convenience way to go to anywhere near for from you.

✓ It's a convenient way to get anywhere nearby.

“convenience”是名词，这里需要用形容词修饰名词“way”，因此应改为“convenient”。表示“附近的地方”时，用“nearby”更合适。

× It's convenience It's convenience way to go to anywhere near for from you.

✓ It's a convenient way to get anywhere nearby.

“anywhere”前通常不需要加介词“to”，所以应说“go/get anywhere”，而不是“go to anywhere”。原句“for from you”也不是正确的介词搭配；如果想表达“附近”，可以直接用“nearby”。

× it's not be uh cruel on the world

✓ It's not cruel to the world.

表示“对……残忍”时，通常使用“cruel to”，而不是“cruel on”。另外，“is”后面直接接形容词“cruel”，不需要再加“be”。