自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Start with a clear direct answer, then explain why you had the bike. The final part is difficult to understand, and the repeated words and fillers make your answer unclear. Use complete sentences and check the phrasing—for example, say “I have an older sister” rather than “I have a round one older sister.”

範例: Yes, I did. My brother bought me a bike because I really wanted one. My older sister had a bike too, so I enjoyed riding with her.

建議: Your main idea is clear, but reduce fillers and correct the grammar: use “bicycles” for the general plural and “one of the most convenient ways.” Add a specific reason to develop your answer, such as how bikes help people avoid traffic or travel short distances.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. They’re one of the most convenient ways to travel, especially in cities, because people can avoid traffic and cover short distances quickly.

× I actually uh, I have a round one older sister so she had it so I want to want.

✓ I actually, uh, have one older sister, so she had a bike, and I wanted one too.

The answer refers to having and wanting the bike during childhood, so wanted is more appropriate than want. The phrase want to want is also not the intended construction here; use wanted one to express that you wanted a bike as well. The wording a round one older sister is unclear, so the correction assumes you mean one older sister.

× I think so because, uh, bicycle is, uh, one of the, uh, comfortable way to travel, especially in cities.

✓ I think so because a bicycle is one of the comfortable ways to travel, especially in cities.

After one of the, the noun must be plural, so use ways rather than way. Remember this pattern: one of the + plural noun.

× I think so because, uh, bicycle is, uh, one of the, uh, comfortable way to travel, especially in cities.

✓ I think so because a bicycle is one of the comfortable ways to travel, especially in cities.

Bicycle is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a before bicycle when referring to any bicycle in general. Check singular countable nouns to ensure they have an article or another determiner.