自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答切题，也提供了父亲教你骑车和练习的细节。建议删掉“uh”和重复的“my”，并注意时态：讲童年经历时用过去时。“practice it”可改为“practise riding”，而“write”应为“ride”；“Only after a few days”后应使用倒装结构，或换成更自然的表达。

範例: Yes, I had a couple of bikes when I was a child. My father taught me how to ride, and I practised in the area around my house almost every day. After just a few days, I was able to ride confidently without any help.

建議: 回答直接，并用成年人通勤的情况作了对比。注意“among we children”应改为“among children like us”或“among children”；“as an adult”与后面的“we”不一致，可统一主语。可以补充一个具体原因，例如成年人通勤时更常选择公交或汽车。

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular, especially among children and people who live close to work or school. However, many adults take the bus or drive because it is more convenient for longer commutes.

× Only after a few days I can write confidently without any help.

✓ Only after a few days could I write confidently without any help.

这句话描述的是童年时发生的事情，整体语境是过去时，因此表示过去能力的情态动词应使用 could，而不是 can。

× Only after a few days I can write confidently without any help.

✓ Only after a few days could I write confidently without any help.

以 Only after... 放在句首表示强调时，主句通常需要部分倒装：将情态动词放在主语之前。因此应说“could I”，而不是“I could”。

× Bicycles are very common and popular among we children, but as an adult and when we commute, we usually choose to take a bus or drive a car.

✓ Bicycles are very common and popular among us children, but as an adult and when we commute, we usually choose to take a bus or drive a car.

介词 among 后面应接宾格代词。we 是主格，不能放在介词后；应使用宾格 us，因此应说“among us children”。