自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接切题，也提供了父亲陪你练习的具体细节，内容基础较好。需要重点改善语法和表达自然度：讲过去的经历时使用过去时，如“practiced”；“ride a bike in the park”比“riding it on in the park”自然；删除或改正“excited for a”和“my study”等不完整或难以理解的表达。可以用“at first”描述刚开始时的紧张，并用连接词串联感受和结果。

範例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike when I was little, and I practiced riding it in a park near our house. At first, I was excited but also a little nervous. My father stayed close by and helped me until I felt confident.

建議: 回答给出了“价格实惠、实用”和通勤、共享单车等理由，观点明确且有相关细节。需要避免重复“popular”和“cycling”，并检查可能的识别或发音错误（如“spikes”应为“bikes”）。注意主谓一致：“the rise ... has made”，以及名词表达：“bike-sharing services”。结尾可用“has made cycling more common”清楚地说明共享单车带来的影响。

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. They are affordable and practical, so many students and office workers use them to get around. In addition, the growth of bike-sharing services has made cycling even more common in cities.

× When I was a little girl my father bought a bike for me and I practice riding it on in the park near my house.

✓ When I was a little girl, my father bought a bike for me, and I practiced riding it in the park near my house.

这句话描述的是过去的经历，因此要用一般过去时。practice 应改为 practiced，与前面的 bought 保持时态一致。

× When I was a little girl my father bought a bike for me and I practice riding it on in the park near my house.

✓ When I was a little girl, my father bought a bike for me, and I practiced riding it in the park near my house.

表示在公园里骑车时用 in the park。on 和 in 不能在这里连用，应删除多余的 on。

× I remember being excited for a but a bit nervous at 1st and my study and my father stayed close to help me until I felt confident.

✓ I remember being excited but a bit nervous at first, and my father stayed close to help me until I felt confident.

excited for a but 以及 my study and my father stayed close 的结构不完整或连接不当。可改为 excited but a bit nervous 表达“既兴奋又有点紧张”，并删除使句子结构混乱的 my study。

× So many students and office workers commute by bicycle, and the rise of bike sharing service have dismay cycling cycling even more common in cities.

✓ So many students and office workers commute by bicycle, and the rise of bike-sharing services has made cycling even more common in cities.

这里的 bike-sharing service 指多种共享单车服务，应用复数 services。修改名词单复数时，要注意名词与其限定词及上下文的搭配。

× So many students and office workers commute by bicycle, and the rise of bike sharing service have dismay cycling cycling even more common in cities.

✓ So many students and office workers commute by bicycle, and the rise of bike-sharing services has made cycling even more common in cities.

主语是单数的 the rise，因此谓语动词应使用 has，而不是 have。判断主谓一致时，要找出真正的主语；这里 services 是介词 of 后面的名词，不是主语。

× So many students and office workers commute by bicycle, and the rise of bike sharing service have dismay cycling cycling even more common in cities.

✓ So many students and office workers commute by bicycle, and the rise of bike-sharing services has made cycling even more common in cities.

这里用 has made 表示“已经使……变得……”。has 后面应接过去分词，make 的过去分词是 made；dismay 不能用于这个结构。