自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then explain your parents’ concern. Use the simple past with a finished time reference such as “when I was a child” (not “I’ve never had”), and avoid repeating the reason or using fillers. For example, you can say “I didn’t have one because…” and finish with one specific detail.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child, although I really wanted one. My parents were worried that I might fall and hurt myself, so they didn’t let me have one.

建議: Start with a clear answer such as “Yes, they’re quite popular.” Avoid the incomplete, repetitive opening (“As they are quite popular as”), and replace vague wording like “that” with a clear noun. Give one specific reason and connect it smoothly with “because” or “so.”

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among people who can’t afford a car or a motorbike. They’re an inexpensive way to get around, so many people use them for commuting.

× No, I've never had a bike when I was a child, um, even though I really wanted one, but the reason I did not have one was because my parents were a bit, um, skeptical about leaving me with a bike.

✓ No, I never had a bike when I was a child, even though I really wanted one. The reason I did not have one was that my parents were a bit skeptical about letting me have a bike.

Use the simple past, 'never had,' for an experience within the finished time period 'when I was a child.' The present perfect, 'I've never had,' is not appropriate with this specific finished past period.

× No, I've never had a bike when I was a child, um, even though I really wanted one, but the reason I did not have one was because my parents were a bit, um, skeptical about leaving me with a bike.

✓ No, I never had a bike when I was a child, even though I really wanted one. The reason I did not have one was that my parents were a bit skeptical about letting me have a bike.

Do not use 'even though' and 'but' together to introduce the same contrast. Use 'even though' on its own, or remove it and use 'but.' Splitting the thought into two sentences also makes the contrast clearer.

× Um, they were afraid that I'd get hurt and yeah, that is a reason.

✓ They were afraid that I would get hurt, and that was the reason.

The response describes the parents' past concern, so use 'was' rather than 'is' to keep the tense consistent. 'Would get hurt' also fits the past viewpoint expressed by 'were afraid.'

× As they are quite popular as uh mainly because they are like a form of transportation for those that can't afford a car or a motorbike.

✓ Yes, they are quite popular, mainly because they are a form of transportation for people who cannot afford a car or a motorbike.

The original begins with 'As' but does not form a complete dependent clause, and it repeats 'as' before 'mainly because.' Start with a complete main clause, such as 'They are quite popular,' and then give the reason with 'mainly because.'

× A lot of people actually use uh bikes rather than a car or a motorbike as they can't afford that.

✓ A lot of people actually use bikes rather than cars or motorbikes because they cannot afford them.

For a parallel comparison, use plural nouns on both sides: 'bikes' and 'cars or motorbikes.' This makes the compared forms consistent.

× A lot of people actually use uh bikes rather than a car or a motorbike as they can't afford that.

✓ A lot of people actually use bikes rather than cars or motorbikes because they cannot afford them.

The singular pronoun 'that' does not clearly refer to the two possible vehicle types. Use 'them' to refer to the plural options, or repeat the nouns to make the meaning explicit.