自行车— Part 1 評分報告

練習Part12026-10-31 21:36:54

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Part 1

考官

Did you have a bike when you were a child?

考生

Yes, I have a bike on a child and this is time that when I was six years old and my grandparents taught teach me how to learn to ride a bike that I fell down every time but I kept on to achieve my achievements.

考官

Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

考生

Maybe it is a little bit popular in the teenagers because umm, when I was walking in my homes and around my homes, I can't find it. There are many children and teenagers are riding bike in community and so on.

評估

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Part 1

Did you have a bike when you were a child?

分數: 38.0

建議: 回答与问题相关,但时态和表达错误较多,影响理解。讲童年经历时要用过去时,例如“when I was a child”和“my grandparents taught me”;“learn to ride a bike”即可,不需要说“how to learn”。结尾可以说明自己坚持练习并最终学会,避免重复使用“achieve/achievements”。

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was about six, and my grandparents taught me how to ride it. I fell off quite a few times, but I kept practising and eventually learned.

Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

分數: 45.0

建議: 先明确回答自行车在你所在国家是否受欢迎,再用观察到的情况作为理由。当前回答前后不一致:先说不太受欢迎,随后又说看到很多人骑车;“popular among teenagers”比“popular in the teenagers”自然,“many children and teenagers are riding bikes”也要注意复数和句子结构。可具体说明你看到他们在哪里骑车。

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular, especially among children and teenagers. I often see them riding around my neighbourhood or in local parks. They seem to enjoy cycling as a way to have fun and get around.

文法

5: Past tense issue(过去时错误)

× I have a bike

✓ I had a bike

学生在回忆童年经历,语境是过去,因此应使用过去式 had,而不是现在时 have。描述已经结束的过去经历时,要注意将动词改为过去式。

11: Incorrect use of prepositions(介词使用错误)

× on a child

✓ as a child

表示“作为一个孩子”时应使用 as a child,而不是 on a child。可以记住常见表达:as a child(小时候)。

26: Sentence structure errors(句子结构错误)

× this is time that when I was six years old

✓ That was when I was six years old

原表达中 this is time that 与 when 重复且结构不完整。可直接用 That was when... 表示“那是在……的时候”;回忆过去时用 was。

26: Sentence structure errors(句子结构错误)

× my grandparents taught teach me how to learn to ride a bike

✓ my grandparents taught me how to ride a bike

taught 后面应直接接宾语 me;teach 是多余的动词,而且 how to learn to ride 在这里表达重复。可以使用 teach someone how to do something 这一结构。

8: Verb + -ing form(动词后接 -ing 形式)

× I kept on to achieve my achievements

✓ I kept on trying to achieve my goals

keep on 后面应接动词的 -ing 形式,因此应说 kept on trying,而不是 kept on to achieve。另外,achieve my achievements 表达重复;可用 achieve my goals。记住:keep on doing something。

11: Incorrect use of prepositions(介词使用错误)

× popular in the teenagers

✓ popular among teenagers

表示某事物“在某群体中受欢迎”时,通常用 popular among。泛指青少年这一群体时,teenagers 前通常不加 the。

6: Present tense issue(现在时错误)

× when I was walking in my homes and around my homes

✓ when I walk around my home

这里是在回答自行车现在是否受欢迎,并描述通常的情况,因此应使用一般现在时 walk,而不是过去进行时 was walking。描述日常或一般情况时,优先使用一般现在时。

12: Incorrect use of pronouns(代词使用错误)

× I can't find it

✓ I can't find them

这里的 it 指代前文泛指的复数自行车(bikes),所以应使用复数代词 them。使用代词时,要确保它与所指名词的单复数一致。

3: There be issue(There be 结构错误)

× There are many children and teenagers are riding bike in community

✓ There are many children and teenagers riding bikes in the community

There are 后面可以接名词,再用现在分词短语说明这些人正在做什么;不能再加一个 are,形成两个谓语。结构应为 There are + 名词 + doing。同时,社区前应补上冠词 the。

1: Singular and plural issue(单复数错误)

× riding bike

✓ riding bikes

这里泛指孩子和青少年骑自行车,通常用复数 bikes。名词作泛指时,要根据语境选择单数或复数形式。

重點詞彙

Little— Short; Young; Brief; Minor
Many— Numerous; A great/good deal of
Old— Elderly; Dilapidated; Worn; Antique; Mature
Popular— Well-liked; Nonspecialist; Widespread; Mass
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