自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 질문에 먼저 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, “when I was child”에는 관사 a가 필요하고 “bike my bicycle”은 어색한 표현입니다. “ride my bike”라고 말하세요. 가게에 자전거를 타고 갔다는 내용을 한 번만 말하고, 어디에 갔는지 구체적으로 덧붙이면 더 자연스럽습니다. 망설임과 반복도 줄여 보세요.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it to a nearby shopping center with my friends.

建議: 인기 여부에 답하고 이유를 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 다만 “many of Japanese people”은 “many Japanese people”로, “use bicycle”은 “ride bicycles”로 고치세요. 같은 내용을 반복하지 말고, 자전거가 흔한 이유나 자전거를 볼 수 있는 장소 같은 구체적인 예를 하나 덧붙이면 답변이 더 효과적입니다.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Japan. Many people ride them to work or to nearby shops, and you can often see bicycles parked outside train stations.

× when I was child

✓ when I was a child

The singular count noun child needs an article. Use a before child when referring to someone in general.

× to nearby shopping center

✓ to a nearby shopping center

Shopping center is a singular count noun, so it needs an article. Use a because the speaker is referring to a nearby shopping center in general.

× many of Japanese people

✓ many Japanese people

Use many directly before a plural noun when speaking about people in general. Many of normally needs a determiner, as in many of the Japanese people.

× use bicycle

✓ use bicycles

When referring to bicycles in general, use the plural form bicycles. The singular count noun bicycle cannot normally stand alone without an article or another determiner.