自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ начинается прямо, но объяснение звучит противоречиво: вы говорите, что у вас не было велосипеда, а затем упоминаете, что дома их было два. Уточните, что велосипеды принадлежали семье или брату. Замените неестественное «everything that's connected with bikes or something like that» конкретной причиной, например страхом упасть. Следите за грамматикой: «my little brother liked».

範例: I didn’t have my own bike as a child because I was afraid of falling off. However, my family had two bikes, and my younger brother used to ride them quite often.

建議: Ответ содержит конкретный пример фестиваля, но исправьте согласование: «bikes are». Используйте «a two-day festival» и параллельную грамматическую конструкцию: «listen to music and ride their bikes». Уберите слова-паразиты и уточните, идет ли речь об обычных велосипедах или мотоциклах, поскольку «bikers» часто означает мотоциклистов.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in my hometown. Every year, riders come to a two-day festival where they listen to live music and take part in group rides.

× But in my home we had two bikes because my little brother like all these things.

✓ But at home, we had two bikes because my little brother liked all these things.

The sentence describes the student's childhood, so the verb should be in the past tense. Use liked rather than like. At home is also the natural prepositional phrase for describing where the family had the bikes.

× Yes, I think bikes is really popular in my country, uh, and even in my native town because every year, uh, a lot of bikers with their bikes come to our town for a two-days festival, uh, where they listen for music and riding their bikes.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country and even in my native town because every year a lot of bikers with their bikes come to our town for a two-day festival, where they listen to music and ride their bikes.

Bikes is a plural subject, so it requires the plural verb are, not is. Match the verb to the subject by checking whether the subject is singular or plural.

× Yes, I think bikes is really popular in my country, uh, and even in my native town because every year, uh, a lot of bikers with their bikes come to our town for a two-days festival, uh, where they listen for music and riding their bikes.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country and even in my native town because every year a lot of bikers with their bikes come to our town for a two-day festival, where they listen to music and ride their bikes.

In a compound modifier before a noun, the number of days is expressed with the singular form: a two-day festival, not a two-days festival. Keep the unit noun singular in this construction.

× Yes, I think bikes is really popular in my country, uh, and even in my native town because every year, uh, a lot of bikers with their bikes come to our town for a two-days festival, uh, where they listen for music and riding their bikes.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country and even in my native town because every year a lot of bikers with their bikes come to our town for a two-day festival, where they listen to music and ride their bikes.

The correct expression is listen to music, not listen for music. Use to after listen when naming the sound or activity someone is paying attention to.

× Yes, I think bikes is really popular in my country, uh, and even in my native town because every year, uh, a lot of bikers with their bikes come to our town for a two-days festival, uh, where they listen for music and riding their bikes.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country and even in my native town because every year a lot of bikers with their bikes come to our town for a two-day festival, where they listen to music and ride their bikes.

The two actions are joined by and, so they should use parallel verb forms. Use listen and ride rather than listen and riding.