自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a clear, consistent answer: you say you did not have a bike as a child, but then mention using a bicycle. Clarify whether you mean you use one now. Correct the grammar to “when I was a child,” and use the past tense for childhood routines. Add one specific detail if relevant, and avoid fillers such as “uh.”

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I usually walked to school. I started cycling for short trips when I was older.

建議: Answer directly, then give one or two clear reasons. Avoid repeating “cities” and “day-to-day travel,” and fix the awkward phrase “the these cities.” Explain the link between congestion and choosing bikes more precisely, and use a specific example such as easier parking or getting through traffic.

範例: Yes, bikes are popular in India, especially in crowded cities such as Pune and Mumbai. They’re convenient for short journeys and can be easier to park than cars. However, traffic congestion is still a problem.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was child because uh I walked to my school and mostly I use my bicycle for my day-to-day travel.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I walked to my school, and I mostly used my bicycle for my day-to-day travel.

Use the indefinite article a before the singular countable noun child. A singular countable noun generally needs an article or another determiner.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was child because uh I walked to my school and mostly I use my bicycle for my day-to-day travel.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I walked to my school, and I mostly used my bicycle for my day-to-day travel.

The answer describes the student's childhood, a past period. Use used rather than use to keep the verb tense consistent with the past-time context.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because most of the people here use bikes for their day-to-day travel and the cities like Pune, Mumbai, in India, these cities are metropolitan cities so the these cities are very congested here and so usually people prefer bikes or cars.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because most people here use them for day-to-day travel. Cities such as Pune and Mumbai are metropolitan and very congested, so people usually prefer bikes or cars.

The original sentence combines several ideas in a confusing structure and repeats the subject with the cities like Pune, Mumbai and these cities. Use a clear subject and divide long ideas into separate clauses or sentences.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because most of the people here use bikes for their day-to-day travel and the cities like Pune, Mumbai, in India, these cities are metropolitan cities so the these cities are very congested here and so usually people prefer bikes or cars.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because most people here use them for day-to-day travel. Cities such as Pune and Mumbai are metropolitan and very congested, so people usually prefer bikes or cars.

Do not place the before the demonstrative determiner these. These already identifies the noun, so the phrase should be these cities, not the these cities.