自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then add one or two relevant details. Use the correct articles in “when I was a child” and “a small red bicycle.” Avoid the redundant “gave it to me”; say “gave me.” Use “raced each other” rather than “raised each other.”

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and my parents gave it to me for my seventh birthday. I rode it in the park with my friends most afternoons, and we often raced each other.

建議: Give a clear answer and support it with a specific reason or observation. Avoid repeating that people prefer cars, and replace fillers such as “uh” and “um” with brief pauses. Use natural comparisons (“prefer cars to bikes”) and clarify your personal opinion with a complete sentence.

範例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Many people rely on cars, especially for commuting, because they find them more convenient. However, cycling is a healthy and environmentally friendly option, so I’d choose a bike if the roads were safer.

× Uh, yes, I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Uh, yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Child is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a before child.

× It was small red bicycle with training wheels that my parents gave it to me for my seventh birthday.

✓ It was a small red bicycle with training wheels that my parents gave me for my seventh birthday.

Bicycle is a singular countable noun, so it needs the article a. The corrected sentence also removes the redundant pronoun it; that issue is explained separately.

× It was small red bicycle with training wheels that my parents gave it to me for my seventh birthday.

✓ It was a small red bicycle with training wheels that my parents gave me for my seventh birthday.

In the relative clause, that already refers to the bicycle as the object of gave. Using it as another object pronoun is redundant. Say gave me, not gave it to me.

× They prefer um more than the bicycle they prefer car more than the bicycle.

✓ They prefer cars more than bicycles.

The original contains an incomplete false start followed by a repeated clause, making the sentence structure unclear. State the preference once in a complete sentence.

× They prefer um more than the bicycle they prefer car more than the bicycle.

✓ They prefer cars more than bicycles.

When referring generally to cars and bicycles, use plural nouns rather than singular count nouns without articles. Use cars and bicycles.

× And uh I think but uh it is really healthy uh if I have option I choose the right thing bicycle bike

✓ I think it is really healthy. If I had the option, I would choose a bicycle.

But signals a contrast, but no contrasting idea follows it here, so it should be omitted. Separate the opinion from the conditional statement to make the meaning clear.

× And uh I think but uh it is really healthy uh if I have option I choose the right thing bicycle bike

✓ I think it is really healthy. If I had the option, I would choose a bicycle.

Option and bicycle are singular countable nouns, so they need articles. Use the option and a bicycle.

× And uh I think but uh it is really healthy uh if I have option I choose the right thing bicycle bike

✓ I think it is really healthy. If I had the option, I would choose a bicycle.

The original combines an opinion and a conditional idea without clear sentence boundaries, and the ending is incomplete. Use a complete sentence for each idea. For a hypothetical choice, use if I had the option, I would choose.