自行车— Part 1 評分報告
對話
Part 1
考官
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
考生
Yes, I had to buy uh, when I was a child. It was a small red pack and I used to ride into my friend's house every afternoon.
考官
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
考生
Well, I think bikes are quite quite popular in some cities, especially among young people, because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, my students and office workers ride bikes to or work, but really as people use.
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Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
分數: 52.0建議: Асуултад шууд хариулж, дугуйтай байсан эсэхээ тодорхой хэлээрэй. “I had to buy” гэдэг нь “би худалдаж авах хэрэгтэй болсон” гэсэн утгатай тул “I had” эсвэл “I got” гэж хэрэглэнэ. “Small red pack” гэдэг хэллэг ойлгомжгүй, мөн “ride into my friend’s house” гэхээс илүү “ride to my friend’s house” гэж хэлэх нь зөв. Хариултыг 2–3 энгийн өгүүлбэрээр цэгцэлж, жишээ нь дугуйн өнгө болон хаашаа унаж явдгаа хэлээрэй.
範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was small and red, and I used to ride it to my friend’s house every afternoon.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
分數: 56.0建議: Гол санаа болон шалтгаанаа сайн хэлсэн ч “quite quite” гэж давтсан, мөн “ride bikes to or work” болон төгсгөлийн “but really as people use” хэсэг ойлгомжгүй байна. “Students and office workers” гэвэл тэдний унадаг газрыг “to school or work” гэж тодорхой хэлээрэй. Хариултаа жишээтэйгээр дуусгаж, хэрэггүй давталт болон ойлгомжгүй төгсгөлийг хасах нь зүйтэй.
範例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in some cities, especially among young people. They’re affordable and convenient for short trips, so many students ride them to school and office workers use them to commute.
文法
× Yes, I had to buy uh, when I was a child.
✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child.
The phrase had to buy requires an object and does not clearly answer whether you owned a bike. Use had one to refer back to a bike and form a complete, direct answer.
× It was a small red pack and I used to ride into my friend's house every afternoon.
✓ It was a small red pack, and I used to ride to my friend's house every afternoon.
Use to when describing movement toward a destination. Into means movement from outside to the inside of a place, which does not fit the likely meaning here.
× For example, my students and office workers ride bikes to or work, but really as people use.
✓ For example, my students and office workers ride bikes to work.
Or is incorrectly placed between to and work; the correct expression is ride bikes to work. The remaining words form an incomplete, unclear clause, so finish the sentence there unless you can express the intended contrast in a complete clause.
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