自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and check that your details fit the time period: mentioning your daughter does not clearly explain whether you had a bike as a child. Use the correct word “bike,” make the past tense consistent (“played”), and avoid repeating “to.” Clarify how you got to school and add one relevant detail about borrowing your friend’s bike.

範例: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child. I usually walked to school, but sometimes I borrowed a friend’s bike to ride around after school. I enjoyed those rides, even though I had to return the bike afterward.

建議: You give a clear opinion and a relevant reason, but avoid repeating “I live” and correct “might be beat” to “can be difficult.” Explain more specifically how bikes help people in rural areas, and use a linking phrase such as “as a result.” Since Africa is a continent, name your country if you can.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in rural areas. Some people live far from shops or public transport, so cycling is a convenient way to get around. Also, bikes are affordable to use, which makes them helpful for people who cannot afford a car or regular bus fares.

× My daughter was too busy to get me a bike, so I took to school.

✓ My daughter was too busy to get me a bike, so I took it to school.

The verb took needs an object here to show what was taken to school. Add it to refer to the bike. If you mean that you went to school by bike, say so I rode to school.

× I play around, but I borrowed my friend's bike to to ride on.

✓ I played around, but I borrowed my friend's bike to ride on.

The sentence describes events from childhood, so the past-tense form played is needed to match borrowed. Use the past tense consistently when narrating past events.

× I play around, but I borrowed my friend's bike to to ride on.

✓ I played around, but I borrowed my friend's bike to ride on.

The infinitive marker to is repeated. Use it only once before the base verb ride.

× I live in Africa and I live in a rural environment where getting to your destination sometimes might be beat, might be a bit difficult.

✓ I live in Africa, in a rural environment where getting to your destination might sometimes be a bit difficult.

Beat does not express the intended meaning in this context. The correct phrase is a bit difficult. The repeated phrase appears to be a false start, so remove it and use the complete phrase.