自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlamışsın ve çocukluk anından söz etmişsin; ancak “ride a bicycle” demelisin ve “we lived in an apartment fourth floor with the which has no elevator” bölümü dilbilgisi açısından anlaşılmıyor. Dolgu seslerini azaltıp düşüncelerini tamamlanmış cümlelerle ifade et. Bisiklet sürmekten neden hoşlandığını veya apartmanda yaşamanın bisikletini kullanmanı nasıl etkilediğini açıklayarak yanıtını geliştir.

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was about seven. I loved riding it around the neighborhood, especially on weekends. We lived on the fourth floor of an apartment building without an elevator, so carrying it downstairs was a bit of a challenge.

建議: Fikrini belirtmiş ve bisiklet kullanımını sağlık eğilimleriyle yakıt fiyatlarına bağlamışsın; ancak yanıt “it will be” ifadesinde yarım kalıyor. “Wellness trends” yerine bağlama daha uygun olan “growing interest in fitness” veya “health-conscious lifestyles” ifadelerini kullanabilirsin. Ayrıca yakıt fiyatlarının bisiklet kullanımını nasıl etkileyeceğini açıklayıp yanıtını tamamla; “although”, “because” veya “so” gibi bağlaçlarla fikirlerini birbirine bağla.

範例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country at the moment. However, growing interest in fitness and rising fuel prices may encourage more people to cycle. I think their popularity will increase, especially in cities with safe bike lanes.

× I liked riding bicycle.

✓ I liked riding a bicycle.

Bicycle is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article here. Use a when referring to bicycles in general.

× We lived in an apartment fourth floor.

✓ We lived in an apartment on the fourth floor.

Use on to describe the floor of a building, and use the before an ordinal number such as fourth.

× We lived in an apartment fourth floor with the which has no elevator.

✓ We lived in an apartment on the fourth floor, which had no elevator.

The phrase with the which is not a grammatical clause. Use which to introduce a relative clause referring to the apartment. Since the speaker is describing where they lived as a child, had is an appropriate past-tense verb.