自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你直接回答了问题，也提供了自行车被偷以及自己难过的细节，内容比较具体。主要问题是时态和表达不自然：“not after long”可改为“before long”，“it had been stolen from someone”在这里应使用主动或简单被动表达，例如“it was stolen”。回答时尽量避免重复和填充词，并把句子控制得更流畅。

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but it was stolen before long. I was really upset because it was a birthday present from my dad.

建議: 你尝试给出观点和原因，但关键词和表达多处不清楚：“bags”应为“bikes”，“banking”可能想表达“cycling”；“not everyone of my country”可改为“not everyone in my country”。请先明确回答自行车是否受欢迎，再用一两个连贯、具体的理由支持观点；避免重复和未完成的句子。

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. They’re a convenient and affordable way to get around, and many people also ride them for exercise.

× Yeah, I had one, but uh not after long it ha it had been stolen from someone.

✓ Yeah, I had one, but not long after, someone stole it.

这里叙述的是过去发生的事情，使用一般过去时“stole”更自然。“had been stolen”是过去完成时，通常需要另一个过去时间点作为参照；此处没有这样的参照。此外，“not long after”是“没过多久”的正确表达。

× Not everyone of my country from my countries can afford it.

✓ Not everyone in my country can afford one.

表达“在我的国家”，应使用介词“in”，而不是“of”或“from”。“country”指一个国家时用单数。由于前文讨论的是自行车，用“one”指代一辆自行车比“it”更清楚。

× Can afford one.

✓ Not everyone in my country can afford one.

“Can afford one”缺少主语，不能独立构成完整句子。应将它与前面的意思合并，并补上主语“Not everyone in my country”。

× And yeah, banking is is a is a is a type of sports consuming consumer type.

✓ And yeah, biking is a type of sport.

“a type of”后面通常接单数名词，因此应说“a type of sport”，而不是“a type of sports”。这里讨论骑自行车，使用“biking”比“banking”合适。