自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly, then add one or two relevant details. Replace “purchased” with the more natural “bought,” and avoid repeating “and” by linking your ideas more smoothly. The final phrase is unclear: explain specifically what you enjoyed or learned. Keep the verb tense consistent by using the past tense when describing childhood.

範例: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a bike when I was a child, and I rode it almost every day. I loved exploring the neighborhood on my own, and learning to ride made me feel more independent.

建議: Give a clear direct answer and explain how or why bikes are popular. Correct the grammar: use “people use them” rather than “it usually uses,” and say “for commuting” instead of “for working purpose.” Avoid sentence fragments such as “I usually see,” and clarify what you mean by “uncountry city.” Add a specific example, such as people cycling to work or using bikes in crowded cities.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in busy cities. Many people use them to commute because they are affordable and easy to park. I often see people cycling to work or riding motorbikes through crowded streets.

× It was a great experience for me as it fosters a sense of belonging and encouragement.

✓ It was a great experience for me because it fostered a sense of belonging and encouragement.

The sentence describes a past experience, so the verb should also be in the past tense. Use fostered instead of fosters to keep the tense consistent.

× I think so because it usually uses for working purpose.

✓ I think so because they are usually used for work.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Use they to agree with that plural noun.

× I think so because it usually uses for working purpose.

✓ I think so because they are usually used for work.

Bikes receive the action of being used, so the passive form is needed: are used. The original uses uses without an object or a passive auxiliary.

× A lot of bikes on the roadside that ride by some other other uncountry city.

✓ I usually see a lot of bikes being ridden on the roadsides in other cities.

The original is a sentence fragment because it has no main verb. Connect it to I usually see to form a complete sentence. Use being ridden to express what is happening to the bikes.