自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then explain who bought the bike and why you wanted it. Use the past tense consistently: say “I wished” or “I had always wanted,” not “I always wish.” The second sentence is incomplete and unclear, so finish your thought and avoid repeating “bike” and “bicycle.”

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me because I had always wanted one. I loved riding it around the neighborhood with my friends after school.

建議: Your answer is relevant, but make the supporting reason more specific and avoid ending with “So of course,” which repeats your opening. Use the plural “bikes” or “bicycles,” and say “to commute to work” rather than “going for a job.” You could also distinguish between bicycles and motorbikes if that is what you mean.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in smaller towns. Many people use bicycles to commute to work or to run errands because they are affordable and convenient. Motorbikes are also common for longer journeys.

× When it was bought by my father because I always wish to have a bicycle and I always wanted to ride with my friends after having my.

✓ My father bought it because I had always wanted a bicycle and wanted to ride with my friends after getting it.

The original begins with a subordinate clause introduced by 'When' and then adds 'because', leaving the sentence structure incomplete. It also ends with the unfinished phrase 'after having my'. Make the main clause clear and complete, and replace the unfinished phrase with 'after getting it'.

× When it was bought by my father because I always wish to have a bicycle and I always wanted to ride with my friends after having my.

✓ My father bought it because I had always wanted a bicycle and wanted to ride with my friends after getting it.

The student is describing a childhood event in the past, so 'wish' should be changed to a past form. 'Had always wanted' makes clear that the desire existed before the father bought the bike. Keep the verb tenses consistent when narrating past events.

× I think that bikes are very popular in my country because usually people use bike for everything when going for a job or by traveling from one place to another.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in my country because people usually use bikes for everything, whether commuting to work or traveling from one place to another.

'Bike' is a singular countable noun here, but it refers to bikes in general. Use the plural form 'bikes' when speaking generally about them. Check whether a noun refers to one item or a whole category.

× I think that bikes are very popular in my country because usually people use bike for everything when going for a job or by traveling from one place to another.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in my country because people usually use bikes for everything, whether commuting to work or traveling from one place to another.

The phrases 'when going for a job' and 'by traveling' are not parallel in this sentence. Use matching forms, such as 'whether commuting to work or traveling from one place to another'. Parallel phrasing makes lists of activities easier to follow.

× So of course.

✓ So, of course, they are popular.

'So of course' does not contain a verb and is incomplete as a standalone sentence. Add a subject and a verb, such as 'they are popular', to express the complete idea.