自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly and avoid restarting the sentence several times. Use the past tense consistently, and say “for my seventh birthday” rather than “for my 7 years old birthday.” You can add one relevant detail, such as how often you rode it.

範例: Yes, I had a red bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me for my seventh birthday, and I rode it around my neighborhood almost every day.

建議: State your opinion clearly at the beginning, for example, “Yes, bikes are quite popular.” Organize your reasons with linking words such as “because” and “also,” and avoid repeating “sometimes.” Use “ride a bike” or “cycle” and separate your ideas into clear sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Some people ride them for exercise, while others use them to get around. They are especially convenient for short journeys because people can avoid traffic and save time.

× It's a gift from my parents for my 7 years old birthday.

✓ It was a gift from my parents for my seventh birthday.

The gift was given in the past, so use the past-tense verb was rather than the present-tense verb is. When describing a past event, keep the verb tense consistent with the time being discussed.

× It's a gift from my parents for my 7 years old birthday.

✓ It was a gift from my parents for my seventh birthday.

Use the ordinal adjective seventh to describe a birthday. The phrase 7 years old describes a person or age, but it does not correctly modify birthday. You could also say my birthday when I was seven.

× Yes, it's for very popular because sometimes people want to do some sports and they ride the bicycle and sometimes they don't want to take the bus and don't want to use the subway uh or the distance is not very long they use the bike.

✓ Yes, it's very popular because sometimes people want to do sports and ride bicycles. Sometimes they don't want to take the bus or use the subway, or they use a bike when the distance is not very long.

The preposition for is unnecessary before the adjective phrase very popular. Say something is very popular, not is for very popular. Check whether a preposition is required by the word or phrase that follows it.

× ...or the distance is not very long they use the bike

✓ ...or they use a bike when the distance is not very long.

The original joins two clauses without a clear grammatical connection. Use when to introduce the condition for using a bike, and place the condition next to the main clause it relates to. This makes the relationship between the ideas clear.