自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly, then add a few clear details. Keep your response to no more than five sentences. Use “it” for a bike, and say “bought it for me,” not “bought it from me.” The phrase “as much as it was my first time” is unclear; explain that learning to ride was a memorable experience instead. Avoid repeating that the bike was a cherished gift and that you enjoyed it.

範例: Yes, I had a black bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me for my tenth birthday, so it was a very special gift. I remember learning to ride it and cycling around my neighborhood almost every day.

建議: Give a direct answer and support it with a clear example. “Go to the state” does not fit the context; use “go outside” or name a place where you see bikes. The final phrase, “Most of them were milk,” is unclear, so replace it with the type of bike you mean or omit it. Use a linking phrase such as “For example” to connect your detail to your main point.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. You can see people riding them on the streets and in parks, especially in the evenings. When I was growing up, most of my friends had bikes, and we often rode them together after school.

× He was a black bike.

✓ It was a black bike.

Use the pronoun it for a bike, which is an object and not a person. Choose a pronoun that agrees with the noun it replaces.

× My father bought it from me on my birthday.

✓ My father bought it for me on my birthday.

Use for me to show that the bike was purchased as a gift for the speaker. From me would mean that the speaker was the person selling or giving the bike to the father.

× I enjoyed using the bike and as much as it was my first time, I remember riding it every day.

✓ I enjoyed using the bike, and because it was my first time riding one, I remember riding it every day.

As much as does not correctly express the intended reason in this sentence. Use because to connect the fact that it was the speaker's first time riding a bike with the memory of riding it every day.