自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 質問には「子どもの頃、自転車を持っていました」と簡潔に答えられていますが、同じ内容の繰り返しや「umm」が多く、後半の「moving in a distant way」「fascinated to buy」は意味が不自然です。自転車の用途や乗ったときの気持ちなど、具体的な情報を一つ加えましょう。

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood, especially on weekends. It was a fun way to get around and spend time with my friends.

建議: 「人気がある」と直接答え、町で自転車に乗る人を見かけるという理由も述べています。一方、「go out to commute to work week in weekdays」は不自然で、例として挙げた「women walking by school」は自転車の人気を裏付けていません。平日の通勤・通学で自転車に乗る人を見かけるなど、質問に合った具体例を、自然な表現と接続語で説明しましょう。

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, I often see people cycling to work or school in my town, especially on weekdays. They’re a convenient and affordable way to get around.

× And then yeah, I, I, I was very, umm, fascinated to buy.

✓ And then, yeah, I was very fascinated by buying one.

When fascinated describes what interests someone, use by followed by a noun or an -ing form. The infinitive to buy does not fit this construction. You could also say, I was very interested in buying one.

× For example, when I um go out to commute to work week in weekdays, I often see women walking by school.

✓ For example, when I go out to commute to work on weekdays, I often see women walking by the school.

Use on weekdays to describe when a repeated activity takes place. The phrase week in weekdays is not a correct time expression.

× For example, when I um go out to commute to work week in weekdays, I often see women walking by school.

✓ For example, when I go out to commute to work on weekdays, I often see women walking by the school.

Use the before school when referring to a particular school building that the listener can identify. Without an article, by school does not clearly refer to the building in this context.