自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 先直接回答问题，再用一到两个清晰的细节补充。注意过去时和代词一致：讲童年经历时用“bought”“hoped”，指母亲要用“she”。“take exercise from birth”和“at the same age of other kids”不自然，可分别改为“get some exercise”和“like other children”。删去重复的“So she she”，并补充具体感受或使用场景。

範例: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a small bicycle when I was about six because she wanted me to get more exercise. I rode it around our neighborhood with my friends, and I really enjoyed it.

建議: 开头直接回答“Bicycles are quite popular”，不要用“very probably”表达“很受欢迎”。说明过去情况时用“in the 1990s”或“back then”，不要用“ancient age”；“private courses”可能想表达“private cars”，请确认词义。注意主谓一致和单复数，例如“the country didn’t have many private cars”“people rode bicycles”。逻辑上可说明自行车因价格低、方便而受欢迎。

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in the 1990s. Back then, fewer people owned private cars, so many people rode bikes to work or school. They were an affordable and convenient way to get around.

× Yes, when I was a child and my mother bought a MMM small bicycle for me because he hopes I can take exercise from birth at the same age of other kids they can do it.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, my mother bought a small bicycle for me because she hoped I could start exercising at the same age as other kids.

“when I was a child”是时间状语从句，后面不能直接用“and”连接成原句结构；改用逗号并补出主句。“mother”指女性，应使用“she”，不能用“he”。叙述过去发生的事情时，“hope”应改为“hoped”；“I can”也相应改为“I could”。比较年龄时用“the same age as”，不能用“the same age of”。

× So she she hope I can make it too.

✓ So she hoped I could do that too.

这里是在讲过去的事情，因此“hope”应改为过去式“hoped”，“can”应改为“could”。“she”重复了一次，删除多余的代词；用“do that”指代前面提到的事，句子结构更完整清楚。

× Sure, bicycles are very probably in our country, especially in 1990s.

✓ Sure, bicycles are very popular in our country, especially in the 1990s.

此处描述自行车在国内受欢迎的程度，应使用形容词“popular”，而不是表示“可能地”的副词“probably”。表示某个年代时，通常在年代前加定冠词“the”，所以应说“in the 1990s”。

× In that ancient age, our country don't have any private courses, so people like riding bicycle if the distance was too long.

✓ In that age, our country didn't have any private courses, so people liked riding bicycles if the distance was too long.

句子谈论的是过去的情况，因此“don't have”应改为过去式“didn't have”，“like”应改为“liked”。泛指人们骑自行车时，通常用可数名词复数“bicycles”，而不是单数“bicycle”。